Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “I work together.” Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I walk every day. I usually walk to school and around my neighborhood for about 30 minutes, which helps me stay fit and clear my mind.

제안: Start with a direct response, then give a clear, specific memory. Correct tense and grammar (past tense), and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague or unfinished phrases.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school I usually walked to school, and my family often went hiking at weekends because my father loved walking in the hills.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons, using linking words (for example, because, and). Use accurate vocabulary (paths/routes, shade, fresh air) and avoid repetition.

예시: People like walking in parks because the paths are safe and well maintained, and the trees provide shade and fresh air, which makes walking more pleasant and relaxing.

제안: Answer directly with a clear location, give one or two specific reasons, and use correct vocabulary (hiking trails). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases; use conditional form correctly.

예시: If I had the chance, I'd like to hike the trails in New Zealand, because I have heard they offer dramatic scenery and well-marked routes for long, challenging walks.

제안: Give a clear past-tense response with specific details about where you walked and what you did. Avoid fillers and unfinished sentences; use linking words to sequence events.

예시: Two weeks ago I walked around Devonport. I strolled along the waterfront, explored the main square, and climbed a nearby hill to enjoy the view.

× Yes, I do. I walk a lot. I walk every day. Usually I go.

✓ Yes, I do. I walk a lot. I walk every day. I usually walk to school.

The phrase 'Usually I go' is incomplete and vague. The student likely means 'I usually walk (to school)'. Change to 'I usually walk to school' to provide a complete present simple statement and correct word order ('usually' before the main verb). Use present simple for habitual actions.

× I go to my primary school. I work together.

✓ I go to my primary school. I walk with others.

'I work together' is incorrect in this context: 'work together' means collaborate, not walking. Likely intended meaning is walking together with others, so use 'I walk with others.' This corrects meaning and verb choice.

× Yes I did, my memory goes back to primary school.

✓ Yes, I did; my memories go back to primary school.

Mixing 'did' (past) with 'goes' (present) is inconsistent. Use 'memories go back' (present simple describes the state) or 'my memory went back' is awkward. Better: 'my memories go back to primary school.' Also plural 'memories' fits better.

× Usually I go to school by walk and my father like hiking.

✓ Usually I walk to school, and my father likes hiking.

'By walk' is incorrect; use 'walk' as the verb or 'on foot' as a phrase. Also subject-verb agreement error 'father like' should be 'father likes' (third person singular). Split into two clauses with comma and conjunction to improve flow.

× So uh my family go to high.

✓ So my family go hiking.

'Go to high' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'go hiking' (verb) or 'go to the highlands' (place). Use 'go hiking' to express activity. 'My family go' is acceptable in British English; in American English use 'my family goes hiking.' Choose consistent variety.

× I think in the park is there are there are good routes to work people.

✓ I think parks have good routes for walkers.

Original sentence has redundant and incorrect structure ('in the park is there are there are', 'to work people'). Simplify: 'Parks have good routes for walkers.' This corrects word order and word choice ('walkers' for people who walk).

× They have a main amount of trees so I think it's good.

✓ They have a large number of trees, so I think they're good places to walk.

'Main amount of trees' is ungrammatical. Use 'a large number of trees' or 'many trees.' Also clarify 'it's good' to 'they're good places to walk' for clarity and agreement.

× I have a chance to roll up and I'd love to walk S landing in New Zealand because as as part I heard there are many nice hacking load and.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd love to walk the Southland in New Zealand because I've heard there are many nice hiking routes.

Original mixes tenses and has many errors: 'I have a chance to roll up' should be conditional 'If I had the chance'; 'S landing' likely 'Southland' or 'South Island'; 'hacking load' should be 'hiking routes.' Use conditional structure 'If I had the chance, I'd love...' and present perfect 'I've heard' for reported information.

× Two weeks ago I went to, I went to Devonport and then I, I went around the, the court and then and I was, I went up to speak to where I'll do it.

✓ Two weeks ago I went to Devonport. I walked around the court, and then I went up to the viewpoint.

Sentence is repetitive and unclear. Remove repeated 'I went to' and 'I', use past simple consistently for completed actions ('I went', 'I walked'). 'Speak to where I'll do it' is unclear; likely 'went up to the viewpoint' or similar. Keep clear subject-verb structure and concise phrasing.