Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で簡潔ですが、表現の自然さと語彙の幅を改善できます。例えば “wholesome” は不自然に聞こえるので、より適切な形容詞（healthy, refreshing, energising など）を使い、理由を1～2つの具体的な効果（心身の健康、ストレス軽減など）で補強してください。また文章は2～3文にまとめ、冗長な語句を避けて自然な接続詞（and、so、because）を使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I do. I walk my dog for about 30 minutes every morning, which helps me stay fit and clears my mind. It’s also a pleasant way to start the day and gives me energy for work.

제안: 文法と語順、時制の使い方に問題があります。過去の習慣を表す際は過去形や used to を使い、“maybe” や重複した助動詞（may might）を避けてください。答えは明確な主題文で始め、その後に理由や具体例を一文で補足すると良いです。接続詞は and や because をシンプルに使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I used to go outside a lot when I was a child because my mother enjoyed taking walks. We often visited the nearby park and played there for an hour or so.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが語彙と文構造が不自然です。“work in parks” や “treats” は文脈に合いません。一般的な理由を挙げるときは、自然な表現（enjoy the scenery, breathe fresh air, relax）を使い、具体例を1つ付け加えてください。接続語（for example, because）を使って論理を明確にしましょう。

예시: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy the scenery and breathe fresh air. For example, seeing flowers and trees helps many people feel relaxed and less stressed.

제안: 良い答えですが “famous” や “awesome” といった語の繰り返しを避け、より具体的な描写を加えると自然さが増します。理由を二つ挙げる（景色や雰囲気、施設など）と説得力が増します。長さは2～3文に収めましょう。

예시: I would choose the large park near my house because it has beautiful walking paths lined with seasonal flowers. The park also offers quiet lakeside areas where I can relax during a long walk.

제안: 過去形で答えている点は良いですが、文法（a bit of far → a bit far / a bit of a long way）と論理が不自然です。“I have to work to be healthy” は文脈に合いません。最近の散歩については具体的な場所・距離・理由を簡潔に述べ、接続詞でつなぎましょう。

예시: I walked from the station to my office this morning, which took about 20 minutes. I try to include walking in my daily routine to stay healthy.

× Yes I do because every morning I walk around with my lovely dog for 30 minutes.

✓ Yes, I do, because every morning I walk around with my lovely dog for 30 minutes.

Punctuation and minor flow: add commas after 'Yes' and 'do' for natural spoken English. The tense is present simple and is correct; no verb tense change needed. Suggestion: include commas to reflect pauses in speech.

× Let me see, well I maybe often go outside because my mom likes to go out the doors so I I may might go.

✓ Let me see. Well, I often went outside because my mom liked to go outdoors, so I often went with her.

Multiple modal and tense errors. The question asks about past habitual action, so use past simple 'went' and 'liked.' Remove conflicting modals 'maybe' and 'may might' which are incorrect together. 'Go out the doors' is unnatural; use 'go outdoors' or 'go out.' Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past actions and avoid stacking modals.

× One major example of benefit to work in parks is that we can see the beautiful views like flowers and treats.

✓ One major benefit of walking in parks is that we can see beautiful sights like flowers and trees.

Preposition and word choice errors: use 'benefit of' rather than 'benefit to' and 'walking in parks' instead of 'work in parks.' 'Views' is acceptable but 'sights' sounds more natural; 'treats' was likely a typo for 'trees.' Suggestion: choose accurate nouns and correct prepositions.

× I'd like to walk in the park near my house because it is one of the famous parks in Japan and there are a lot of awesome views and flowers.

✓ I'd like to walk in the park near my house because it is one of the most famous parks in Japan and there are a lot of beautiful views and flowers.

Article and modifier order: 'one of the famous parks' should be 'one of the most famous parks' to indicate highest degree among many. 'Awesome' is informal; 'beautiful' is more appropriate. Tense and structure are otherwise fine. Suggestion: use correct comparative/superlative forms and natural adjectives.

× I walked from the station to here today, although it is a bit of far, I have to work to be healthy.

✓ I walked from the station to here today. Although it was a bit far, I have to walk to stay healthy.

Mix of tenses and incorrect expression 'a bit of far.' Use past simple 'was' for the condition of the walk earlier today. 'I have to work to be healthy' is wrong meaning; likely 'walk' not 'work.' Use 'have to walk' or 'try to walk' and 'stay healthy' instead of 'be healthy.' Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: match tenses to time references and choose correct verbs.