Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting reasons. To improve, reduce redundancy, correct minor grammatical issues, and keep responses within 3–4 concise sentences. Replace vague phrases like "incredibly therapeutic" with specific effects and avoid repeating ideas (health and posture) too closely.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk around my neighborhood every day because it helps relieve stress and improves my posture after long hours at a desk. It’s also an inexpensive way to stay fit and clear my mind.

제안: The answer addresses the question but contains awkward word choice and an unclear idea ('expensive' is incorrect). Improve by using accurate vocabulary and giving a brief reason or example. Keep it concise and coherent with a linking word if needed.

예시: Not really. My parents had a house in the countryside with a large fenced front yard, so I played there most of the time. It felt safe and gave me plenty of space to run around.

제안: Strong, natural response with good reasons and examples. To reach a higher score, vary vocabulary slightly and correct small grammar slips ('a low-pressure way'). Combine ideas more tightly to avoid repetition.

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer a peaceful break from noise and screens. The greenery and open space help reduce stress after a busy day, and parks provide a low-pressure place to exercise, socialise, or think quietly.

제안: Good personal response with a clear reason. Improve grammar ('mountain areas' and 'the experience'), and streamline phrasing to avoid redundancy ('absolutely' + 'would love'). Add a specific detail about what you enjoyed to enrich the answer.

예시: I would love to take a long walk in the mountain areas of Sichuan province. I hiked there once with my university roommates and was impressed by the dramatic scenery and fresh air, so I’ve been wanting to go back to explore more trails.

제안: Clear and relevant answer with good reasons and coherence. To improve, make sentences more concise, avoid minor repetition ('relax' and 'unwind'), and use precise phrases ('the nearest park' -> 'the park near my apartment').

예시: Lately I’ve been walking in the park near my apartment every day to stay healthy and get fresh air. Being surrounded by trees helps me unwind after sitting at my desk and clears my mind.

× my parents own a house in the countryside that boasts of spacious walled front yard.

✓ my parents own a house in the countryside that boasts a spacious walled front yard.

The noun phrase 'spacious walled front yard' needs an article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. 'Boasts of' is also less common; 'boasts' + direct object is preferred. Suggestion: use 'boasts a spacious walled front yard.'

× which felt both safe and expensive.

✓ which felt both safe and expansive.

The adjective 'expensive' means costing a lot of money and does not fit context; likely intended meaning is 'expansive' (spacious). Use the correct adjective to match intended meaning. Suggestion: replace 'expensive' with 'expansive' or 'spacious.'

× It's also low pressure way to move your body, chat with someone or just be alone with your thoughts.

✓ It's also a low-pressure way to move your body, chat with someone, or just be alone with your thoughts.

Countable noun phrase 'way' requires the indefinite article 'a.' Also compound adjective 'low-pressure' should be hyphenated before the noun. Add a comma before 'or' in a list for clarity. Suggestion: include 'a' and hyphenate 'low-pressure.'

× one of the mountains areas in Sichuan province.

✓ one of the mountainous areas in Sichuan province.

The phrase 'mountains areas' mixes plural noun and noun modifier incorrectly. Use the adjective 'mountainous' to modify 'areas,' or 'mountain areas.' Also capitalize 'province' only if part of proper noun; 'Sichuan province' is correct. Suggestion: use 'mountainous areas' or 'mountain areas.'

× I once went hiking there with my university roommates and experience left a deep impression on me, so I've been eager to return ever since.

✓ I once went hiking there with my university roommates and the experience left a deep impression on me, so I've been eager to return ever since.

Missing article 'the' before 'experience' (noun reference to a specific event). Also 'experience' here is a noun; adding 'the' makes the past event specific. Suggestion: add 'the' to clarify the noun phrase.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The adverb 'lately' is typically used with present perfect to refer to recent time up to now. Using simple past ('did you go') suggests a finished past action; present perfect ('have you gone') fits the question about recent activity. Suggestion: use present perfect with 'lately.'

× I've been walking in the nearest park to my apartment building on a daily basis recently, both to maintain my health and to get some fresh air and unwind.

✓ I've been walking in the nearest park to my apartment building recently, on a daily basis, both to maintain my health and to get some fresh air and unwind.

Placement of 'recently' and 'on a daily basis' is awkward. Put 'recently' after the verb phrase and keep 'on a daily basis' adjacent for clarity. Commas improve readability. Suggestion: reorder adverbials for natural flow.

× Walking is also one of the cheapest ways to maintain my health.

✓ Walking is also one of the cheapest ways to maintain my health.

This sentence is actually correct; no preposition error. No change needed. (Included only for completeness.)