Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子有语法和表达不自然的问题，且有冗余。建议用一到两句直接回答并用连接词补充细节，修正语法（如时态和冠词），并避免重复信息。可以说明频率、原因和举例。

예시: Yes, I walk a lot because my university is built on a mountain, so I climb many stairs every day. Besides, I often go running or hiking at the weekend to keep fit.

제안: 表达不清楚且有词汇错误（如“mummy is a hiking novel”），语音犹豫较多。建议先用一主题句直接回答，然后用一两个具体细节说明（谁、什么时候、做什么、感受），并改正词汇。

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because my mother loved hiking. On weekends she would take me to nearby mountains, and I enjoyed breathing the fresh air and looking at the scenery.

제안: 回答内容合理但略显重复和冗长。建议用更简洁连贯的句子，使用连接词（for example, because）并给出一两个具体原因或例子来支持观点。注意固定搭配（relieve stress, escape from）。

예시: People walk in parks mainly to relieve stress and relax. For example, being among trees and open space helps them escape daily pressures and return feeling refreshed.

제안: 有词汇和搭配错误（coastal Rd., 'novel' 应为 'partner' 或 'lover'），并有重复。建议用1–2句清晰描述地点和原因，避免口语填充词，注意单词选择和语序。

예시: I would choose a coastal road because I love sea views and the fresh sea breeze. It would be lovely to walk there with my partner while chatting and enjoying the scenery.

제안: 语法和时态混用，句子零散且有词汇错误（'have a work' 应为 'have a walk'）。建议用一到两句描述最近一次的地点、时间和具体活动，注意使用正确时态和连词使叙述连贯。

예시: I went to my city's Central Park recently. On a sunny day my parents and I took our puppy for a walk, had a barbecue and set up a small campsite, so we had a great time.

× Yes, because of my university was built on a mountain so there will be many stairs for me to walk every day.

✓ Yes. My university was built on a mountain, so there are many stairs for me to walk up every day.

原句中“because of”不应直接接完整从句“my university was built...”，且时态和主谓不一致。应改为“because”或用“because of + 名词短语”。另外“there will be many stairs”用现在一般时更自然，且“walk up”比单独“walk”更贴切。建议：使用正确的连词结构或把“because of”改为“because”，并使用现在时态描述习惯性动作。

× By the way, I love to take some sports such as running and hiking on my weekends to exercise myself.

✓ By the way, I like to do some sports on weekends, such as running and hiking, to exercise.

中文说明：动词搭配错误。“take some sports”不自然，正确搭配为“do sports”或“play sports”。“on my weekends”应为“on weekends”或“at the weekend”。“exercise myself”冗余，直接用“exercise”或“stay fit”。建议：使用固定搭配“do sports”，并简化表达。

× Uh, yes, because of my mummy is a hiking novel.

✓ Uh, yes. My mummy is fond of hiking.

中文说明：“because of”后不能接完整句子；“hiking novel”是错误搭配，可能想表达“喜欢徒步”。应改为“My mummy is fond of hiking”或“My mum likes hiking”。建议：不用“because of”引导从句，使用正确的动词短语表达喜好。

× So on weekends, uh, she always took, took me to a mountain to have a hiking conversation and, and I love this feeling to breathe the fresh air in the mountain and see beautiful landscapes.

✓ So on weekends she always took me to a mountain for a hike, and I loved breathing the fresh air and seeing the beautiful landscapes there.

中文说明：原句结构混乱，重复用词，多处搭配不当。“have a hiking conversation”没有意义，应该是“go for a hike”或“have a hiking trip”。动词时态与叙述过去经历应使用过去时（took → took; love → loved）。此外“breathe the fresh air in the mountain”应改为“breathe the fresh air”并把地点用“there”或“on the mountain”。建议：用固定搭配“go for a hike”，并保持一致的过去时。

× I think maybe it's a good way for them to unwind themselves when they get stressful.

✓ I think maybe it's a good way for them to unwind when they feel stressed.

中文说明：“get stressful”用法不正确，常用表达为“feel stressed”或“become stressed”。“unwind themselves”冗余，通常说“unwind”。建议：使用“feel stressed”或“become stressed”，并省略多余的反身代词。

× They need something to help them out, so I think parks offer a sense of escaping them so they can always step away from pressure for a while and come back feeling refreshed.

✓ They need something to help them out, so I think parks offer an escape where they can step away from pressure for a while and come back feeling refreshed.

中文说明：“offer a sense of escaping them”结构错误，指代混乱。应使用“offer an escape”或“offer a way to escape”并用定语从句或副词短语说明用途。建议：用“offer an escape”并重构句子以消除代词不清。

× I will choose the coastal Rd. because I love the sea scenery and I enjoy the air sea air breeze on my face.

✓ I would choose the coastal road because I love the sea scenery and enjoy the sea breeze on my face.

中文说明：在虚拟条件句（If I had the chance）中，主句通常用“would”而不是简单将来时“will”。“coastal Rd.”应写成“coastal road”。“air sea air breeze”重复，应为“sea breeze”。建议：在虚拟语气中使用“would”，并注意单词拼写及重复。

× I think it's very romantic to have a walk with my novel, to walk along the sea to see the beautiful views and have a chatting.

✓ I think it's very romantic to take a walk with my girlfriend/boyfriend, to walk along the sea, enjoy the views and have a chat.

中文说明：“my novel”是错误词汇，可能想说“my lover/novel”误用。应替换为“girlfriend/boyfriend”或“partner”。“have a chatting”不正确，应为“have a chat”或“chat”。建议：使用正确的名词（girlfriend/boyfriend/partner）并用“have a chat”。

× It's on my city's Central Park.

✓ It was in my city's Central Park.

中文说明：回答询问过去发生的地点时应使用过去时“was”而不是现在时“is”。另外介词应为“in Central Park”而不是“on”。建议：使用正确的时态和介词短语“in Central Park”。

× Because of the sunshine, I, with my parents, took our puppy to have a work here and at that time we have a barbecue and set up a campsite.

✓ Because of the sunshine, my parents and I took our puppy to the park, and at that time we had a barbecue and set up a campsite.

中文说明：原句“Because of the sunshine”后接完整句子应使用“because”或把结构重组。“took our puppy to have a work here”不通，应为“took our puppy to the park”或“took our puppy for a walk”。时态不一致，“we have a barbecue”应为过去时“we had a barbecue”。建议：重组句子，使用“took ... for a walk/ to the park”，并保持过去时一致。

× We have a good time here.

✓ We had a good time there.

中文说明：叙述过去经历时使用过去时“had”而不是现在完成或现在时“have”。地点指向过去的公园应使用“there”而不是“here”。建议：使用过去时“had”和适当的地点副词“there”。