Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., 'physical activity', 'gives me energy'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot because it’s my main form of exercise. It helps me stay active and gives me energy to get through long days, so I try to walk for 30–40 minutes most mornings.

제안: Answer directly and use simple past tense correctly. Avoid unclear verbs like 'worked a lot' if you mean 'played' or 'explored'. Give one or two specific details about activities and use linking words (e.g., 'and', 'so').

예시: Yes, I often walked and played outside as a child. I used to explore the neighborhood and play games with friends in the playground, so we were always outdoors after school.

제안: Begin with a topic sentence and organize reasons using linking words (e.g., 'first', 'also', 'because'). Use clearer phrasing (e.g., 'meet neighbors', 'good for health', 'safer than walking on the road'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: People like walking in parks for several reasons. First, it’s a safe and pleasant place for exercise, and also it’s a social space where people can meet neighbors and enjoy fresh air.

제안: Directly answer the hypothetical question and focus on one place. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I usually walk', 'I couldn't find time'). Keep it concise and use a reason with a linking word (e.g., 'because').

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a riverside trail near the city because it’s peaceful and longer than the park near my house, which fits better into a day off.

제안: Answer with a clear past-time phrase (e.g., 'lately I went'), correct verb forms (e.g., 'I often go' or 'I went'), and be specific about timing and people. Use linking words and concise phrasing.

예시: Lately I have been walking in the nearby park with my mother and friends. We usually go in the evenings because it’s well-lit and feels safer than walking on the street.

× Yes, I like walking. It is probably the only exercise that I do and it's really good for the physical activity.

✓ Yes, I like walking. It is probably the only exercise that I do and it's really good for my physical health.

'physical activity' is a noun phrase meaning an action; in this context the speaker wants to refer to their physical well-being, so 'physical health' is the correct noun phrase. Also 'the physical activity' is unnatural here; use 'my physical health' to show possession and correct meaning. Suggestion: Use 'my physical health' or 'my fitness' instead of 'the physical activity'.

× However, it provides energy to do any task easily with full of enthusiasm.

✓ However, it gives me energy to do any task easily and with enthusiasm.

The phrase 'provides energy to do any task easily with full of enthusiasm' has incorrect word order and an incorrect prepositional phrase 'with full of enthusiasm'. 'Gives me energy' is more natural and 'with enthusiasm' correctly expresses manner. Also include 'and' to connect ideas. Suggestion: Use 'gives me energy' and place adverbial phrases after the verb phrase: 'do any task easily and with enthusiasm.'

× So it's really good activity for my long day.

✓ So it's a really good activity for my long days.

Missing article 'a' before 'really good activity' and singular/plural mismatch: 'my long day' should be 'my long days' to refer generally to days. Correct structure: 'So it's a really good activity for my long days.' Suggestion: Remember to use articles before singular countable nouns and match singular/plural meaning.

× Of course, when I was a kid, I worked a lot because in my childhood I always curious about about to did some exciting activities with my friends.

✓ Of course, when I was a kid, I was very active because in my childhood I was always curious to do exciting activities with my friends.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'worked a lot' is awkward for playing/activity; 'I always curious' misses auxiliary 'was' and 'about to did' mixes infinitive and past tense. Use 'was very active' and 'was always curious to do' (infinitive after 'curious') and 'do' not 'did.' Suggestion: Use correct past tense forms and appropriate verbs after adjectives: 'was curious to do' or 'was curious about doing.'

× So it's really a good way to do did various type of activities and work with my friends and play together in playground.

✓ So it was a really good way to do various types of activities, work with my friends, and play together in the playground.

'Do did' is redundant and incorrect; use 'do' (base or gerund depending). 'Various type' should be 'various types' or 'a variety of activities.' Also list items in parallel form and add 'the' before playground. Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a kid.' Suggestion: Keep parallel verb forms and correct pluralization: 'do various types of activities, work with my friends, and play together in the playground.'

× Because it is a good way to meet with neighbors and the known persons.

✓ Because it is a good way to meet neighbors and people you know.

Do not use 'meet with' in this context; 'meet neighbors' or 'meet up with' is possible but 'meet neighbors' is natural. 'The known persons' is unnatural; use 'people you know' or 'acquaintances.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'meet neighbors' or 'meet people you know.'

× However, it is a beneficial for the health to walk in parks.

✓ However, it is beneficial for your health to walk in parks.

'A beneficial' is incorrect because 'beneficial' is an adjective and does not take 'a' here. Use 'beneficial for your health' or 'beneficial to health.' Also replace 'the health' with 'your health' for natural meaning. Suggestion: Use 'beneficial for your health' or 'beneficial to health.'

× On the other hand, it is a way of to safety walking in parks rather than roadside.

✓ On the other hand, it is a safer way to walk in parks rather than by the roadside.

Incorrect structure 'way of to safety walking' should be 'safer way to walk.' 'Roadside' needs preposition 'by the' or 'on the' and comparative 'safer' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use comparative adjective 'safer' and correct prepositions: 'safer way to walk... by the roadside.'

× To be brutally honest, I normally walk in the park near my house.

✓ To be honest, I normally walk in the park near my house.

'To be brutally honest' is colloquial but not grammatical error; this sentence is acceptable. Suggested style change: 'To be honest' is more neutral. No tense change needed. Suggestion: 'To be honest' is more natural in formal tests.

× Sometimes I prefer to work in my terrace at home because sometimes I have a busy schedule.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to work on my terrace at home because I sometimes have a busy schedule.

'Work in my terrace' should be 'work on my terrace' (correct preposition). Also avoid repeating 'sometimes' twice in one sentence; reorder for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'on my terrace' and avoid redundant adverbs.

× So due to this I couldn't found a time to work in park.

✓ So because of this I couldn't find time to work in the park.

'Couldn't found' is incorrect: modal 'could' plus base verb 'find' is required. Also include 'the' before 'park' and remove 'a' before 'time' when used generally ('find time'). Suggestion: Use 'couldn't find time' (could + base verb) and include articles as needed.

× Yes, sometimes. I often to go for a walk lately with my mother and friends at the near park because it is a suitable place for me to walking at late night and it is a good for the safety purpose.

✓ Yes, sometimes. I have often gone for a walk lately with my mother and friends at the nearby park because it is a suitable place for me to walk late at night and it is good for safety.

Multiple errors: 'I often to go' should be 'I have often gone' or 'I often go' depending on timeframe; 'lately' pairs with present perfect so 'have often gone' is appropriate. 'At the near park' should be 'at the nearby park.' 'to walking' should be 'to walk.' 'at late night' should be 'late at night.' 'a good for the safety purpose' wrong article and phrasing; use 'good for safety.' Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'lately' ('have often gone'), correct prepositions and adjective order, and simplify 'good for safety.'