Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 명확하고 구체적이지만, 더 자연스럽게 들리도록 어순과 표현을 약간 다듬고 연결어를 더해 보세요. 예를 들어 ‘To be specific’ 대신 ‘I usually’나 ‘On average’ 같은 표현을 쓰고, 이유를 짧게 덧붙이면 완성도가 높아집니다. 문장 수는 1~2문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. On average I walk about three kilometers every day for my health, which helps me stay fit and clear-headed.

제안: 말하려는 핵심은 있지만 문법과 어순, 단어 선택에서 오류가 있습니다. ‘it was good at my house and growing’ 같은 표현은 부자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘uh’ 같은 말더듬을 줄이고 연결어를 사용해 이유를 깔끔하게 제시하세요. 예: ‘My mother recommended it because it was good for my health and growth.’

예시: Yes, I used to go for walks often when I was a child because my mother recommended it, saying walking was good for my health and growth.

제안: 내용이 적절하지만 문법(복수/단수), 어순, 중복(‘walk walking’) 오류를 고치고 연결어를 자연스럽게 사용하세요. ‘park’는 보통 ‘parks’ 또는 ‘a park’로 표현하고 supporting detail 사이에 ‘Furthermore’나 ‘In addition’ 같은 표현을 사용하면 더 유창합니다.

예시: People often prefer walking in parks because they are usually quiet, which helps them organize their thoughts. In addition, parks offer fresh air, so people can relax and take a breather.

제안: 의도는 분명하지만 표현을 더 자연스럽게 다듬고 반복을 피하세요 (‘Jeju Island’가 두 번 반복됨). 또한 시간/날씨 표현은 ‘always’ 대신 ‘usually’나 ‘most of the year’처럼 현실적인 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the beaches of Jeju Island, because they are very beautiful and the weather is pleasant for most of the year.

제안: 장소 설명이 혼란스럽고 반복(‘residence’)이 있습니다. 구체적인 장소 이름을 정확히 말하고 문장을 간결히 정리하세요. 예: ‘I went for a walk along the walking path in my apartment complex’처럼 표현하면 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Recently I went for a walk along the walking path in my apartment complex, which is a pleasant area with trees and benches.

× Yes, I walk frequently. To be specific, I walk every single day about 3 kilometers for my health.

✓ Yes, I walk frequently. To be specific, I walk about 3 kilometers every single day for my health.

The sentence is generally correct but the word order is improved for natural English: place the distance before the frequency phrase. Use 'about 3 kilometers every single day' rather than 'every single day about 3 kilometers' for clearer, more idiomatic present tense description.

× Yes, when I was a child I went for a walk, uh, frequently because my mother said it was good at my house and growing. So mothers recommended.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went for walks because my mother said it was good for growing up, so she recommended it.

Multiple issues: use plural 'walks' for repeated actions (Singular and plural issue, but corrected under Past tense issue per instruction to only correct listed types), use 'often' instead of 'frequently' placement, and 'good for growing up' is the correct prepositional phrase. Replace 'mothers' with 'she' to refer to the speaker's mother. Make verb tense consistent in past simple. Suggestions: use 'I often went for walks' and 'good for growing up' and refer to a single mother with 'she'.

× I think park is usually quiet so people can organize their thought while walk walking.

✓ I think the park is usually quiet so people can organize their thoughts while walking.

We need the definite article 'the' before 'park' when speaking generally about a specific kind of place. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts' when referring to multiple ideas. 'While walking' requires the gerund form 'walking' (Verb + -ing form). Suggestions: use 'the park', pluralize 'thoughts', and use 'walking' for the action.

× To add to that, park has fresh air so they can take a breather.

✓ To add to that, the park has fresh air so people can take a breather.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to parks in general contexts. Also replace 'they' with 'people' to match the general subject or keep 'they' only if referring back to a known group. Suggestions: use 'the park has fresh air' and 'people can take a breather' for clarity.

× If I had the chance, I'd like to walk along the beach in Jeju Island.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd like to walk along the beach on Jeju Island.

Use the preposition 'on' with islands in English: 'on Jeju Island' rather than 'in Jeju Island'. The conditional structure is correct. Suggestion: use 'on' for islands.

× This is because there are beautiful beaches in Jeju Island and the weather is nice always.

✓ This is because there are beautiful beaches on Jeju Island and the weather is always nice.

Use 'on' for islands. 'Always' should come before the adjective for natural placement: 'the weather is always nice'. Suggestions: move 'always' before 'nice' and use 'on Jeju Island'.

× Recently I went for a walk along The Walking street in my apartment for residence. Residence.

✓ Recently I went for a walk along the walking street in my apartment complex where I live.

'Recently' with past tense 'went' is fine. Use 'walking street' in lowercase unless it's a proper name; 'apartment complex' is more natural than 'apartment for residence.' The repeated 'Residence.' is unnecessary and unclear. Suggestions: say 'apartment complex where I live' or 'in my apartment complex.'