Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and reduce fillers (like "like").

예시: Yes, I walk regularly, especially in the mornings. For example, I plan to walk for about half an hour tomorrow to clear my mind and prepare for the day; walking every morning helps me feel refreshed and focused.

제안: Correct past tense and sentence structure. Begin with a direct past-tense statement, then add one or two specific examples. Avoid unnecessary words and ensure verbs agree with the subject.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child, usually around our neighborhood. I used to meet my neighbors and we would play together, and sometimes we walked to nearby shops to buy snacks or small toys.

제안: Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer reasons with linking words. Give two concise, specific reasons and one example. Avoid vague or awkward phrasing.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because the environment is peaceful and the air is fresh. In addition, parks often have good facilities such as benches and paths, for example, some parks in Kuala Lumpur are well maintained and comfortable for walking.

제안: Make the idea clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct statement of the place, then give one or two specific reasons. Use correct articles and remove trailing fragments.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in Brisbane, Australia, because the nearby Gold Coast has beautiful beaches and coastal paths. I could enjoy watching the sunrise or sunset along the shore, which would make the walk memorable.

제안: Answer in simple past or present perfect correctly and clearly. Say where you last walked (or explain you haven't) with one clear reason. Avoid long pauses and incomplete sentences.

예시: I haven't walked outside recently; instead, I've been using a treadmill at home or at the gym. I avoided outdoor walks because my city has been very crowded during the recent holidays.

× Yes, I do really enjoy to walking especially in the morning like tomorrow morning I have a schedule for walk around half an hour and like every morning I always have a time for walking to refresh my brain.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy walking, especially in the morning. For example, tomorrow morning I have a scheduled walk of about half an hour, and every morning I always make time for walking to refresh my mind.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing), not 'to' + base verb. 'To walking' is incorrect; use 'walking'. Use noun forms and collocations: 'a scheduled walk' and 'make time for' are natural. 'Refresh my brain' is better phrased as 'refresh my mind'. Also split run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity.

× When I were a child I often go outside for walking especially around the house and I meet my neighbor and we playing together.

✓ When I was a child I often went outside for walks, especially around the house. I met my neighbor and we played together.

Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood: 'were' should be 'was' for singular 'I', 'go' should be 'went', and 'playing' should be 'played' to match past tense. Also 'for walking' is awkward; 'for walks' is more natural.

× Also we went to like some stores to buying some games or snacks and walking was really comfortable for.

✓ Also we went to some stores to buy games or snacks, and walking was really comfortable for us.

After 'to' use the base verb 'buy', not 'buying'. 'To like some stores' is informal/awkward—omit 'like'. The sentence lacks an object after 'for'; add 'us' to clarify. Keep verb forms consistent.

× People likes to walk in parks because it's very comfortable and the air are really fresh.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it's very comfortable and the air is really fresh.

With plural subject 'people', the verb should be 'like', not 'likes'. 'Air' is a singular noun, so use 'is' instead of 'are'.

× Also there is less people that sitting on the park and the facilities of the park especially in some countries is really good like in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia, the Kelsey Park.

✓ Also there are fewer people sitting in the park, and the park facilities, especially in some countries, are really good, for example in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia, at Kelsey Park.

Use 'fewer' with countable nouns ('people') rather than 'less'. 'There is' should be 'there are' for plural. Use 'in the park' instead of 'on the park'. 'Facilities ... are' requires plural verb agreement. 'Like' should be 'for example' or 'such as'; use correct preposition 'at Kelsey Park'.

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Brisbane, Australia because they have Gold Coast nearby and a few is really nice because we can see the sunset or sunrise depending on our walking time and it's just.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Brisbane, Australia, because the Gold Coast is nearby and it is really nice; we could see the sunset or sunrise depending on the time of our walk.

Use 'the Gold Coast' with article and treat it as singular ('is nearby'). 'A few is really nice' is unclear—use 'it is really nice'. Maintain conditional mood: 'would like' fits with 'could see'. Remove trailing 'and it's just' which is incomplete.

× Recently, I didn't take walking instance of it.

✓ Recently, I haven't gone walking much.

'Didn't take walking' is incorrect; use 'haven't gone walking' or 'haven't been walking' to express recent experience. 'Recently' commonly pairs with present perfect. 'Instance of it' is unclear and unnecessary.

× I prefer to work only in my treadmills inside my home or I just go to the gym for treadmills because a lot of people, uh, was coming to my cities due to the big holidays, so a lot of.

✓ I prefer to use the treadmill at home, or I go to the gym to use the treadmill, because many people come to my city during big holidays, so it gets crowded.

Use singular 'the treadmill' when referring to one's own equipment; 'treadmills' is plural and odd with 'my'. 'Prefer to work only in my treadmills' should be 'prefer to use the treadmill'. Use present simple 'come' or present continuous 'are coming' with clear time reference; 'was coming' is wrong here. 'My cities' should be 'my city' unless multiple cities are meant. Finish the sentence: 'so it gets crowded' clarifies the reason.