Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (employment → work), avoid redundancy, and use linking words to expand briefly with specific detail. Limit to max 4–5 sentences.

예시: Not really. I usually walk only five minutes from my house to work each day. However, I try to take longer walks on my days off because walking is good exercise and helps me relax.

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (liked/took), and give a specific example or memory to enrich the answer using linking words like because or for example.

예시: Yes, I did. My dad often took me to the park when I was a child because he wanted us to get fresh air and spend quality time together. For example, we used to feed the ducks and play on the swings every Sunday.

제안: Be specific and accurate. Start with a clear reason, avoid awkward phrases (“see the wheel”), and use linking words to list reasons. Give concrete examples (scenery, fresh air, exercise, walking pets).

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because the scenery is pleasant and the air is fresher than in the city. In addition, parks are good for light exercise and many people walk their dogs there, which makes the atmosphere friendly.

제안: Answer directly with a clear place and a reason. Use correct tense (If I had the chance), avoid irrelevant detail about searching online, and include linking words to explain why you chose the place with specific features.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk at Roma Street Parkland because it has wide paths, lakes and lots of native plants. I think the peaceful environment and varied scenery would make for a very enjoyable walk.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer (I went to a park), avoid repetition, and add a specific detail about the conversation or what you noticed during the walk to make the answer interesting.

예시: I went to a nearby park last week with a friend. We walked for about an hour and talked about our plans for the holidays while enjoying the sunshine and watching people play football.

× Not really, I walk from my house to employment just like 5 minutes a day.

✓ Not really, I walk from my house to work for just about five minutes a day.

The original sentence has an unnatural noun choice ('employment') and awkward time expression. Use 'work' instead of 'employment' and 'for just about five minutes a day' to express duration. Also write numbers as words in formal writing. Maintain present simple tense for habitual action.

× I know it's good to walk a lot because it's a good exercise but on my day off I try my best to walk more.

✓ I know it's good to walk a lot because it's good exercise, but on my day off I try to walk more.

Remove the article 'a' before 'good exercise' (uncountable noun) and simplify 'try my best to walk more' to 'try to walk more' for natural phrasing. Present simple is correct for general statements and habits.

× My dad like to talk me out to the park and take a brief air and also spend quality time with me.

✓ My dad liked to take me out to the park to get some fresh air and spend quality time with me.

The context is past habit, so use past tense 'liked'. Correct verb patterns: 'take me out' not 'talk me out'. Use 'get some fresh air' instead of 'take a brief air'. Maintain parallel structure 'to get... and spend...'.

× People like to walk in the park because of they can see the wheel and also to breathe air and sometime also they walk with the dog.

✓ People like to walk in the park because they can see the scenery, breathe fresh air, and sometimes walk with their dog.

Remove incorrect 'because of they' and use 'because they'. 'See the wheel' is unclear; likely 'scenery'. Use 'breathe fresh air'. Fix 'sometime' to 'sometimes' and use 'their dog' for natural possession. Maintain present simple for general truths.

× If I have a chance to go for a long walk, I would definitely go search online for the popular place to walk.

✓ If I had a chance to go for a long walk, I would definitely search online for popular places to walk.

For a hypothetical condition contrary to present, use past tense in the if-clause ('If I had') and 'would' in the result clause. Use 'search online for popular places' (no 'go search'). Maintain conditional structure.

× For example South Park. The Roma street is a good place for walk.

✓ For example, South Park. Roma Street is a good place to walk.

Add comma after 'For example'. Use 'Roma Street' without 'The' and use the infinitive 'to walk' to indicate purpose: 'a good place to walk'.

× I went for a park last week with my friend.

✓ I went to a park last week with my friend.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'go' and 'a park' (indefinite article). 'Went for a park' is incorrect.

× We had a one hour walk and we talked each to each other and we spent about one hour.

✓ We had a one-hour walk; we talked to each other and spent about an hour.

Use hyphen in 'one-hour' as a compound adjective. Use 'talked to each other' not 'each to each other'. Avoid repetition of time by saying 'spent about an hour.' Use past simple consistently for completed actions.