Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct collocations (e.g., “gives me energy”, “good exercise”).

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. It gives me energy and is a good form of exercise, so I try to walk for about 30 minutes every day to stay fit.

제안: Clarify tense and vocabulary, and organize into a topic sentence plus supporting detail. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., ‘work’ for ‘walk’) and grammar errors like ‘I am belong’. Provide a reason with a linking phrase such as ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: Yes, I often walked when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford a bicycle. Therefore I used to walk to school and to visit friends almost every day.

제안: Give a clear general statement then two specific reasons. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., ‘surrounded by nature’, ‘feel relaxed’). Avoid repetitive phrasing and incorrect collocations like ‘positive spine’.

예시: People like to walk in parks because they are surrounded by nature and fresh air. As a result, walkers often feel more relaxed and less stressed, and they enjoy pleasant scenery and open spaces.

제안: Answer the question directly with a specific place and reasons. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use clear linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘so’) and name a location to show concreteness.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside because the ocean views are calming and the fresh air boosts my energy, helping me relax and think clearly.

제안: Keep it coherent and correct tense agreements. Start with a clear topic sentence about where and when, then give two specific details. Correct word choices (e.g., ‘streets were quiet’, ‘it was relaxing’).

예시: Last week I walked in Riverside Park. It was peaceful; I enjoyed watching dogs and the sunset, and walking around my neighborhood helped me get fresh air and clear my head.

× Yes, I love to walk because it gives, uh, it gives out energy and it's, I think it uh, exercise also as well.

✓ Yes, I love to walk because it gives me energy and I think it is good exercise.

The original used 'gives out energy' and 'exercise also as well' incorrectly. Use 'gives me energy' (verb + object) and 'is good exercise' (correct linking verb with noun). The error relates to incorrect verb forms and redundant phrasing. Improve by using simple, direct expressions: 'gives me energy' and 'is good exercise.'

× Yes, a lot of time when our child, I always used to work because I don't have a bicycle and and I am belong from middle class family.

✓ Yes, many times when I was a child, I always used to walk because I didn't have a bicycle and I belonged to a middle-class family.

Several tense and word-choice errors: 'when our child' should be 'when I was a child' (pronoun and past tense), 'a lot of time' -> 'many times', 'used to work' should be 'used to walk' to match meaning, 'I don't have' -> 'I didn't have' (past tense), 'I am belong from' -> 'I belonged to' (correct verb and preposition). Use past tense consistently for past habits and proper verb forms.

× That's why I always walk by myself.

✓ That's why I always walked by myself.

The action refers to past habit, so the past tense 'walked' is required. The preposition 'by myself' is acceptable but the tense must match the context. Use past tense for past routines.

× Because when we when I work in the park, there is a surface nature here and in the grass when I put my feet and it gives off so much positive energy and positive spine.

✓ Because when I walk in the park, there is a lot of nature, and when I put my feet on the grass it gives off so much positive energy and makes me feel positive.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'we when I work' is confusing; use 'I walk'. 'Surface nature' is incorrect; use 'a lot of nature'. Preposition 'in the grass when I put my feet' -> 'put my feet on the grass'. 'Positive spine' is incorrect collocation; replace with 'makes me feel positive'. Clarify subject and use correct prepositions and collocations.

× That's where I love to work in park.

✓ That's why I love to walk in the park.

The verb 'work' is wrong; context requires 'walk'. Also include the article 'the' before 'park'. Use 'walk' (correct verb) and 'in the park' (correct preposition and article).

× I think recently also I I I I always love to while because it boosts my energy, gives my position, gives me positive vibes.

✓ I think recently I have always loved walking because it boosts my energy and gives me positive vibes.

Tense and word-form problems: 'recently' requires present perfect ('have always loved') or simple present depending on meaning; 'while' is incorrect—use 'walking' (verb + -ing). 'Gives my position' is wrong collocation; replace with 'gives me positive vibes'. Use 'walking' as a noun and correct tense to express a recent continuous preference.

× That's why I always ready for a walk.

✓ That's why I am always ready for a walk.

Missing verb 'am' for a correct adjective phrase; 'always ready' needs auxiliary 'am'. This error is sentence structure/verb omission; add the correct form of 'to be'. Keep word order 'I am always ready'.

× There is no any doubt.

✓ There is no doubt.

Double negative 'no any doubt' is ungrammatical. Use 'no doubt' or 'not any doubt'. Keep the simple present 'there is' for a general statement.

× I went for a walk in the Riverside Park last week.

✓ I went for a walk at Riverside Park last week.

Minor preposition and article choice: 'at' or 'to' Riverside Park is more natural; drop 'the' unless the park's name regularly takes 'the'. Tense 'went' is correct for last week.

× It was peaceful and I enjoyed watching dogs and the sunset where I walk around my neighborhood to get some fresh air and clear my head.

✓ It was peaceful and I enjoyed watching dogs and the sunset while I walked around my neighborhood to get some fresh air and clear my head.

Mixing past and present tenses: 'I enjoyed' (past) should be followed by 'while I walked' (past) rather than 'where I walk' (present). Use 'while' to show simultaneous actions and keep past tense consistent.

× The street stress were quiet and it will relaxing.

✓ The streets were quiet and it was relaxing.

'Street stress' is incorrect; likely 'streets'. Subject 'streets' (plural) with past tense 'were' is correct. 'It will relaxing' mixes future and wrong form; use past 'it was relaxing' to match 'last week'. Also 'relaxing' needs auxiliary 'was'.