Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Используйте более естественные фразы и исправьте грамматические ошибки. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем дайте одно-два конкретных уточнения. Избегайте лишнего повторения (например, «experiencing all that architectural values of our city» неверно).

예시: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in summer. I usually take short walks around my city to enjoy the streets and admire the architecture, such as old facades and modern buildings.

제안: Уточните формулировки и исправьте смысловые ошибки («work a lot» неуместно для прогулок), добавьте связующее слово и конкретный пример, чтобы ответ был более естественным и информативным.

예시: Yes, I did. I spent most afternoons walking around the neighborhood with friends. For example, we often went to the local park and a small café where we spent time chatting and playing.

제안: Сделайте предложение более связным и грамматически корректным. Используйте связующие слова (for example, because) и приведите конкретные причины с примерами вместо повторов и ошибочных конструкций.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because the atmosphere is calmer and less noisy than the city. For example, parks offer fresh air, trees and quiet paths where you can relax and escape traffic and crowds.

제안: Будьте точнее и избегайте преувеличений (это не самый большой парк в мире). Начните с чёткой темы, затем дайте пару конкретных ожиданий о прогулке, используя связующие слова.

예시: I would love to take a long walk in Central Park in New York. I imagine strolling along the lakes, watching birds, and seeing famous sights like the Bethesda Terrace while enjoying the green spaces.

제안: Исправьте опечатки и грамматику («short talk» → «short walk»), используйте прошедшее время последовательно и добавьте конкретный пример, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и связным.

예시: Recently I took a short walk in the city centre. It was lively — street musicians were playing, and I enjoyed the music and the historic buildings while walking along the main square.

× Yes, I do walk a lot, especially during summer days.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, especially during the summer.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in positive present simple statements; use 'I walk'. Add the definite article 'the' before 'summer' for natural English. Suggestion: Use simple present without 'do' in affirmative sentences and include articles where needed.

× I really like taking a short walk around our city, enjoying urban life and experiencing all that architectural values of our city.

✓ I really like taking short walks around our city, enjoying urban life and experiencing all those architectural values of our city.

'A short walk' can be pluralized to match a habitual action: 'taking short walks'. 'All that architectural values' is ungrammatical; use 'all those architectural values' to refer to multiple items. Suggestion: Match number (singular/plural) between verbs and nouns and use demonstrative 'those' for plural.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This question sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I remember walking most of the day in our neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I remember walking for most of the day in our neighborhood with my friends.

Add the preposition 'for' with time expressions like 'most of the day'. Suggestion: Use 'for' before duration phrases.

× We used to work a lot and visit different places such as parks, cafes and other entertaining places together.

✓ We used to play a lot and visit different places such as parks, cafes, and other entertaining spots together.

'Work a lot' is likely the wrong verb for children; 'play a lot' fits the context. Also 'places' repeated is redundant; use 'spots' or omit repetition. Suggestion: Choose verbs appropriate to the subject and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition.

× I think people like walking in parks as the environment here is more relaxing and calm.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because the environment there is more relaxing and calm.

Use 'because' for cause instead of 'as' for clarity. Replace 'here' with 'there' when referring generally to parks. Suggestion: Use 'because' for causal clauses and ensure demonstratives match the referent.

× Especially does living in cities can spend their time calmly far away from urban areas.

✓ Especially people living in cities can spend their time calmly, away from noisy urban areas.

Original sentence has wrong word order and an incorrect auxiliary 'does'. Rearrange subject 'people living in cities' and remove 'does'. Clarify 'away from noisy urban areas' as the contrast. Suggestion: Place the subject before the verb and avoid unnecessary auxiliaries.

× There's the there are lots of noisy places which we can avoid simply by visiting parks in nature.

✓ There are lots of noisy places which we can avoid simply by visiting parks.

Remove the redundant 'the' and the repeated 'there are'. Also 'parks in nature' is awkward; 'parks' suffices. Suggestion: Use a single 'there are' to introduce existence and keep noun phrases concise.

× As I am a big fan of walking, I would really like to visit a park which is located in New York.

✓ As I am a big fan of walking, I would really like to visit a park located in New York.

Relative clause 'which is' can be reduced: 'a park located in New York' is more natural. No change in meaning. Suggestion: Use reduced relative clauses for conciseness when appropriate.

× It is the biggest park in the world and I think I will really enjoy walking there and relaxing, enjoying the nature and looking at some sights in the park.

✓ It is one of the biggest parks in the world, and I think I would really enjoy walking there, relaxing, enjoying nature, and looking at the sights in the park.

Claiming a single 'biggest park in the world' is likely inaccurate; 'one of the biggest parks' is safer. Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical preference. Remove 'the' before 'nature'. Suggestion: Use cautious comparative language and consistent conditional when speaking hypothetically.

× Recently I have a short talk in our city center.

✓ Recently I had a short walk in our city center.

'Have a short talk' is incorrect semantically; context asks about walking. Use past simple 'had' or present perfect 'have had' — 'had' fits the recent past reference 'recently'. Also correct 'talk' → 'walk'. Suggestion: Choose verbs that match meaning and use past simple for finished recent events.

× It is full of life and very energetic place where you can meet many people playing different instruments.

✓ It is full of life and a very lively place where you can meet many people playing different instruments.

'Energetic' describes people/actions, not places; use 'lively' for places. Also add the article 'a' before 'very lively place'. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjectives for nouns and include articles where needed.

× You can enjoy the music, look at the beautiful architecture and spend spend wonderful time there.

✓ You can enjoy the music, look at the beautiful architecture, and spend a wonderful time there.

Remove duplicate 'spend'. Add the article 'a' before 'wonderful time'. Suggestion: Proofread to catch repetition and include articles for singular countable nouns.