Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (family, after dinner), and avoid unnecessary details. Use one or two supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. For example, I usually take a short walk with my family after dinner to relax and talk about our day, especially since I live in a hostel and we like to catch up about school.

제안: Use correct tense and grammar (didn't go; thought; didn't want). Give a concise reason and one brief supporting detail. Use linking words to make it coherent.

예시: No, I didn't walk outside much as a child because my parents thought the neighborhood was unsafe. Therefore, they didn't allow me to go out alone, so I mostly played at home.

제안: Be more specific and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence and then give two linked reasons using connectors. Use correct phrasing (reasons, relax after work, full of nature, breathe fresh air).

예시: People enjoy walking in parks for several reasons. Firstly, it helps them relax and reduce stress after a long day at work; secondly, parks offer pleasant greenery and fresh air, which improves mood and energy.

제안: Keep sentences complete and avoid repetition. Provide a clear reason and one specific detail about what you would enjoy. Use correct structure (e.g., "I would go hiking in the nearby Little Rock Mountain because..."), and finish your thought.

예시: If I had the chance, I would hike the nearby Little Rock Mountain because the trail is surrounded by nature and offers great views, so I could enjoy fresh air and peaceful scenery.

제안: Use past tense accurately and form complete sentences. Be specific about what you did and avoid vague phrases like "we checked a lot." Use linking words to explain purpose (to relax, to chat).

예시: Last weekend I walked around my university campus, which has large green spaces. I often ran into classmates there, and we usually chatted to unwind and relieve stress.

× Sure, I'll usually walk after the dinner with my families to have a short break, like share our recent slides because I'm living in the hostel now so I will share what's happened at the school.

✓ Sure, I usually walk after dinner with my family to have a short break, like sharing our recent news, because I'm living in the hostel now so I can share what has happened at school.

Errors: incorrect use of definite article 'the' with uncountable/general noun 'dinner' and plural 'families' instead of 'family'; awkward verb forms 'like share our recent slides' and tense/auxiliary choice 'will share what's happened'. Suggestions: Use no article before 'dinner' for routine meals; use singular 'family' for one's family; change 'like share' to 'like sharing' (gerund after 'like'); replace 'slides' with 'news' if meaning updates; use 'can share what has happened' to indicate current ability and present perfect 'has happened' for recent events relevant now.

× I didn't go for a walk when I was a child because my parents think it's not secure since the neighborhood area is not very safe so they doesn't want me to go outside alone.

✓ I didn't go for walks when I was a child because my parents thought it wasn't safe since the neighborhood wasn't very secure, so they didn't want me to go outside alone.

Errors: tense mismatch (past events should use past tense 'thought', 'wasn't', 'didn't'), incorrect adjective 'secure' vs 'safe' and redundant 'neighborhood area', and subject-verb agreement 'they doesn't'. Suggestions: Keep past tense consistently for childhood events; use 'safe' or 'secure' (not both) and 'neighborhood' without 'area'; match plural subject with 'didn't'.

× There are several reasons why people like walking in the parks. One of the reason is they want to relieve their stress and to have a relaxation after their whole day work because the park with a full of nature and also can breathe the fresh air.

✓ There are several reasons why people like walking in parks. One of the reasons is that they want to relieve stress and relax after a whole day's work, because parks are full of nature and allow people to breathe fresh air.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' with plural 'parks', singular/plural mismatch 'one of the reason' should be 'one of the reasons', awkward phrases 'have a relaxation' and 'their whole day work', and ungrammatical clause 'the park with a full of nature and also can breathe the fresh air'. Suggestions: Use 'walking in parks' for general statement; 'one of the reasons' and 'relieve stress and relax'; 'a whole day's work' and rephrase final clause to 'parks are full of nature and allow people to breathe fresh air'.

× If I had the chance, I would go hiking in the nearest mountains like the Little Rock Mountain because I think climbing is surrounded by the nature and I can breathe the fresh air and during the hiking I can enjoy the.

✓ If I had the chance, I would go hiking in the nearest mountains, like Little Rock Mountain, because I think being surrounded by nature while climbing would let me breathe fresh air and enjoy the scenery during the hike.

Errors: awkward noun phrase 'the nearest mountains like the Little Rock Mountain' (article and name), incorrect use of 'climbing is surrounded by the nature' (passive and article errors), incorrect phrase 'during the hiking I can enjoy the.' Suggestions: Use 'go hiking' and refer to the mountain name without 'the' if proper name; use 'being surrounded by nature while climbing' or 'while climbing I would be surrounded by nature'; 'breathe fresh air' and 'enjoy the scenery during the hike' complete the idea.

× Last weekend I went for a walk in my university which is a place for our green spaces and often I ran into my classmate and we checked a lot to unwind my stress after.

✓ Last weekend I went for a walk around my university, which has many green spaces, and I often ran into my classmates; we chatted a lot to unwind and relieve my stress afterwards.

Errors: awkward preposition 'in my university' (use 'around' or 'on campus'), unclear clause 'a place for our green spaces', inconsistent number 'my classmate' vs plural, vague 'we checked a lot', and tense/sequence issues 'to unwind my stress after'. Suggestions: Use 'around my university' or 'on campus', 'has many green spaces', 'ran into my classmates' (plural), 'chatted a lot' for casual conversation, and 'to unwind and relieve my stress afterwards' for clarity.