Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 表达要更自然、句子更简洁并纠正一些语法和用词错误。第一句含义模糊（“ride and need back”不清楚），应直接回应是否经常步行，再用一两句补充细节并使用连接词。注意时态一致。

예시: I don't walk a lot in my daily life because I usually travel to school by bike, which is more convenient and saves time. However, during holidays I enjoy hiking with my friends; we sometimes walk as much as 15 kilometers a day, which I find very relaxing and refreshing.

제안: 回答总体很好，内容具体，描绘生动。可以把第一句更直接与问题对应，并用少量连接词使结构更紧凑，避免重复“outside/to have walks”。

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because I loved playing outdoors with my friends. For example, there was a small hill near my home where we would run up and down, climb to the top to enjoy the view, and spend hours exploring the area together.

제안: 注意单词拼写（working → walking）并使表达更精炼。可先给出直接原因，再用连接词补充具体效果或例子。

예시: People like walking in parks because parks offer a peaceful, natural escape from city noise. In addition, walking in green spaces can reduce stress, boost mood, and provide a pleasant chance to socialize with friends or family.

제안: 回答清晰且有理由。可以把条件从“If I have the chance”改为更自然的“If I had the chance”，并加一点具体细节说明想看或体验的景色或文化。

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Yunnan Province because it is famous for stunning landscapes and traditional trails. For example, I would like to walk through terraced fields and minority villages to enjoy scenery and experience local culture firsthand.

제안: 回答具体且有细节，但有个地名可能会引起混淆（“Iranian community”是否准确），可稍作解释并把时态固定为过去时，同时用连接词提升流畅性。

예시: Recently I went with friends to a seaside neighborhood known locally as the "Iranian community" during the Qing Festival. We walked along the coastline and watched the sunrise; the scenery was beautiful and it was a very relaxing way to spend the holiday.

× I don't work very much in my daily life because I usually ride and need back to go to school, which is more convenient and saves time.

✓ I don't walk very much in my daily life because I usually ride a bike back to school, which is more convenient and saves time.

句子中有词语使用和结构问题：原句用“work”与语境不符，应为“walk”；“ride and need back to go to school”结构混乱，意思应为“骑自行车回学校”。建议使用简洁明确的短语“ride a bike back to school”。保持时态与一般现在一致。

× Yes, I often went outside to have walks when I was a child because my favorite activity was playing outdoors with my friends.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for walks when I was a child because my favorite activity was playing outdoors with my friends.

原句中“to have walks”不自然，常用表达是“go for a walk”或复数时用“go for walks”。这里为过去习惯，用“went outside for walks”。此修改使表达更地道，句子结构更自然。

× I think people enjoy working in parks because parks provide a natural and peaceful environment away from the noise of the city.

✓ I think people enjoy walking in parks because parks provide a natural and peaceful environment away from the noise of the city.

原句“enjoy working in parks”使用了错误的动词“working”，与语境不符，应为“walking”。将动词改为“walking”使句意与问题匹配。保持一般现在时。

× If I have the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Yunnan Province because it's famous for its beautiful natural scenery and traditional hiking routes.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Yunnan Province because it's famous for its beautiful natural scenery and traditional hiking routes.

条件句中混用时态：第一条件（真实可能）用现在时+will/ modal，虚拟与不太可能或假设情况应使用过去式（If I had ...）+ would。这里说的是假设情形，故将“If I have the chance”改为“If I had the chance”。

× I went to Iranian community with my friends during the Qing festival.

✓ I went to the Iranian community with my friends during the Qing Festival.

地名或社区前通常需要定冠词“the”表示特指，且“Qing Festival”属于节日名称应大写单词首字母。将句子改为“I went to the Iranian community...”并修正大小写以符合英文规范。