Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体清晰且信息量足，但句子较长且有少许语法和用词不准确（如“keep my fitness”可改为“maintain my fitness”）。建议使用更自然的主题句并用一到两句支持细节，注意句子连贯与词汇准确性。

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. As an undergraduate without a car, I walk from my dorm to the lecture halls every day and usually reach around 8,000 steps. I find this daily walking helps me maintain my fitness and clears my mind before classes.

제안: 内容具体但有词汇和表达问题（如“Those odd things”不恰当，应该是“Those outings”或“Those trips”）。回答可更简洁，保持一两个支持细节并用连词衔接。

예시: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. My parents usually took me to the local park almost every weekend, where we walked, played games and I loved running around with my family. Those outings are still some of my fondest memories.

제안: 回答有逻辑但出现不准确词汇（如“cardio scalar health”不正确，应为“cardiovascular health”或“cardio health”）。建议用更自然的连接词并给出具体例子说明如何放松或恢复精力。

예시: I think people like walking in parks because it provides a break from busy work life and a chance to relax. The fresh air, greenery and quiet paths are good for cardiovascular health, lower stress and help people recharge after a long day.

제안: 回答具体且有描绘，但有语法小错误（如“there has several ponds”应为“it has several ponds”；“makes walks the peaceful”不自然）。建议调整句子结构，使用连接词并保持简洁。

예시: I would choose to walk in Olympic Park because it's very close to my home and easy to visit regularly. The park is lined with trees and has several ponds with ducks and other birds, which makes a long walk peaceful and enjoyable.

제안: 回答能传达大意但存在较多错误和不自然表达（如“the sun is settled”应为“the sun was setting”；“I stored there”错误，应为“I stayed there”；“listening to a protest”可能是笔误或不合逻辑）。建议重组句子，使用正确时态和词汇，并提供清晰的细节。

예시: A few days ago I went for a walk in Riverside Park. I stayed there for about 40 minutes because the area is peaceful and the river view is beautiful, especially in the evening when the sun was setting. I enjoyed the cool breeze and listened to people chatting as they walked by.

× I'm an undergraduate and I don't own a car so I usually work from my dorm to the lecture buildings every day.

✓ I'm an undergraduate and I don't own a car so I usually walk from my dorm to the lecture buildings every day.

句中使用了动词“work”，但根据语境应表示“从宿舍走到教学楼”，应使用“walk”。这是动词选择与现在时态表达的一致性问题。改为“walk”能与“usually”（经常）及现在习惯动作相匹配。建议：注意动词与语境一致，表示行走用“walk”。

× I walk about 8000 steps a day and I think it's a very healthy lifestyle to keep my fitness.

✓ I walk about 8,000 steps a day and I think it's a very healthy lifestyle to keep me fit.

原句“to keep my fitness”词组不自然。应使用不定式短语表示目的或结果，并用形容词短语“keep me fit”来表达保持健康体能。属于现在时表达中短语搭配不当。建议：用“keep + 人 + 形容词”来表达使某人保持某种状态。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

原句“to have a walk”在英语中较少用，通常用“for a walk”或“go for a walk”。这里是过去一般问句，助动词“Did”后动词用原形“go”正确，主要问题是介词短语搭配，应改为“for a walk”。建议：记住固定搭配“go for a walk”。

× Those odd things happen almost every weekend and they were very memorable because I love running around and spending time with my family.

✓ Those little things happened almost every weekend and they were very memorable because I loved running around and spending time with my family.

句子中同时使用现在时“happen”和过去时“were/love”时态混用导致时态不一致。既然讲述的是童年回忆，应整体使用过去时：用“happened”和“loved”。另外“odd things”不合语境，改为“little things”更贴切。建议：叙述过去经历时保持过去时一致。

× It also lets them get some fresh air and is good for cardio scalar health, so it helps people feel healthier and recharge their energy.

✓ It also lets them get some fresh air and is good for cardiovascular health, so it helps people feel healthier and recharge their energy.

“cardio scalar”不是正确词汇，应为“cardiovascular”（心血管的）。这是形容词使用错误。建议：使用标准术语“cardiovascular health”。

× I would like to take a long walk in Olympics Park because it's very close to my house so it's easy for me to go there regularly.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in Olympic Park because it's very close to my house so it's easy for me to go there regularly.

“Olympics Park”名称用法不当，通常应为“Olympic Park”（形容词形式）。这是专有名词的形式问题，属于现在分词分类不适用但更接近词形错误；按清单只能归到“Verb in the present participle form”里（无更合适项）。建议：注意地名常用形容词形式，如“Olympic Park”。

× The park is lined with trees and there has several ponds where you can see ducks and other birds, which makes walks the peaceful and enjoyable.

✓ The park is lined with trees and there are several ponds where you can see ducks and other birds, which make walks peaceful and enjoyable.

原句中“there has several ponds”语法错误，正确结构为“there are several ponds”。此外“which makes walks the peaceful and enjoyable”中定语从句谓语与先行词“ponds”数不一致，且“the peaceful and enjoyable”结构不自然，应改为“which make walks peaceful and enjoyable”。属于主谓一致与数的错误。建议：使用“There is/are”引出存在句，并保持从句谓语与先行词数一致，去掉多余定冠词。

× Well, I'd say I went for a walk along the Riverside Park just a few days ago.

✓ Well, I'd say I went for a walk along Riverside Park just a few days ago.

“the Riverside Park”中定冠词不必要，公园名称通常不用“the”。此处主要为固定搭配和过去时使用正确，但问题属于过去时范畴（使用“went”正确），改为去掉冠词以符合地名用法。建议：专有名词前通常不加“the”。

× The main reason is that the area is quite peaceful and the view of the river is really charming, especially in the evening when the sun is settled.

✓ The main reason is that the area is quite peaceful and the view of the river is really charming, especially in the evening when the sun has set.

短语“the sun is settled”不正确，表示“太阳下山”应使用完成时“has set”或过去式“set”。这里描述常态情形，用“has set”或更常见的“sets”都可，保持时态和习惯表达。建议：用固定短语“the sun has set”或“when the sun sets”。

× I stored there for about 40 minutes and listening to a protest when enjoying breeze.

✓ I stayed there for about 40 minutes, listening to music and enjoying the breeze.

原句“stored there”用词错误，应为“stayed there”。此外“listening to a protest when enjoying breeze”结构混乱且语义怪异，应为“listening to music and enjoying the breeze”或若是“listening to a podcast/protest”需明确词语。属于句子结构和词汇选择错误。建议：使用“stay”表示停留，用现在分词短语并列时要并列一致，注意名词搭配（the breeze）。