Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答內容完整且自然，但句子有些冗長且重複信息（如 "helps me relieve my stress" 與 "keeps me in shape" 可以簡化）。建議把話分成兩到三句，使用連接詞（例如 "because", "so"）更清楚地表達因果關係，並加入一個具體的例子或場景來增加細節。

예시: Yes, I usually walk to school and typically walk for about one to two hours each day because I prefer it to driving or cycling. It helps me relieve stress and stay fit, and I also enjoy the scenery along the route, especially the small neighborhood park where I often stop to sit for a few minutes.

제안: 回答有回應問題但語言不夠準確，有語法錯誤（如 "working is also a leisure activity" 與上下文不符），且信息可以更具體。建議改用正確詞彙（如 "walking"），並補充具體回憶細節（時間、地點或一次有趣經歷）。句子數量保持在兩到三句之內。

예시: Yes, I often walked with my parents when I was a child because we didn't have smartphones then. We usually strolled in the park or along the riverbank, and I remember feeding ducks one afternoon which was very fun.

제안: 答案邏輯清晰且使用了連接詞，但用詞可以更口語自然（例如把 "keep away from our phones" 改為 "disconnect from phones"）。可以補充一個具體例子或比較，讓描述更生動。注意句子長度不要過長。

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer a peaceful setting with fresh air and lots of trees and wildlife. Also, parks make it easier to disconnect from phones and have real conversations with friends or family, for example taking a quiet bench to chat without distractions.

제안: 回答自然且具體，但可以加入更個人的細節或一個具體活動來增強畫面感（例如看鳥、聽溪水聲、做野餐）。保持簡潔並用一兩個連接詞強化句子流暢度。

예시: I'd love to take a long walk in a forest to breathe fresh air and admire the trees and wildflowers. I imagine slowing down, listening to birdsong and maybe stopping by a stream for a short picnic to fully relax.

제안: 回答中有明顯錯誤與拼寫問題（如 "love working" 應為 "love walking"，"St. snacks" 不清楚）。語句冗長且資訊重複。建議先糾正詞彙錯誤，然後用兩句簡潔說明最近常去的地方、具體活動（如買小吃、看夜景）和一個例子。

예시: Lately I've been walking along the streets in my neighborhood. I often stop to buy cheap, tasty street snacks and enjoy the cityscape, especially at night when the skyscrapers are lit up.

× Yes, I always walk to school instead of driving or riding a bike, and I generally walk about one to two hours a day. I think it helps me relieve my stress and keeps me in shape, and it also gives me opportunities to enjoy the scenery along the way.

✓ Yes, I always walk to school instead of driving or riding a bike, and I generally walk for about one to two hours a day. I think it helps me relieve my stress and keep me in shape, and it also gives me opportunities to enjoy the scenery along the way.

句中“walk about one to two hours a day”缺少介词“for”来表示持续时间，应为“walk for about...”。另外并列谓语“helps... and keeps...”中的主语是“It”，在并列动词中要保持动词形式一致，第二个动词应使用原形“keep”而不是“keeps”。建议在表达持续时间时使用“for + 时间段”；在并列谓语时保持动词形式一致。

× When I was a child, I often went out for a walk with my parents. At that time we didn't have the smart devices, so working is also a leisure activity which brings us together and we often walked in the park or along the river.

✓ When I was a child, I often went out for a walk with my parents. At that time we didn't have smart devices, so working was also a leisure activity which brought us together and we often walked in the park or along the river.

句子讲过去习惯性事件，应使用过去时。原句中“is”与“brings”为现在时，与上下文时态不一致，应改为过去时“was”和“brought”。此外“the smart devices”中的定冠词“the”为多余，改为“smart devices”。建议在叙述过去情境时全文保持过去时态一致。

× Firstly, parks provide a more peaceful environment compared with other urban areas where people can enjoy fresh air and various plants and animals.

✓ Firstly, parks provide a more peaceful environment compared with other urban areas, where people can enjoy fresh air and various plants and animals.

需要在主句和定语从句之间用逗号分隔以提高可读性（尤其是非限制性信息），虽然不是严格的语法错误，但加逗号更符合英语标点习惯，使句子更清晰。建议在类似结构中适当使用逗号分隔主句与补充信息。

× Secondly, walking in parks enables us to keep away from our phones and communicate with others face to face.

✓ Secondly, walking in parks enables us to keep away from our phones and to communicate with others face to face.

动词不定式在并列结构中应保持形式一致，原句“keep away... and communicate...”也可接受，但更规范的是在第二动词前加“to”。建议在并列不定式时保持一致，尤其是书面表达。

× I'd like to walk in the forest where I can breathe fresh air and enjoy beautiful trees and flowers.

✓ I'd like to walk in a forest where I can breathe fresh air and enjoy beautiful trees and flowers.

冠词使用不当：“the forest”暗指特定森林，但回答是泛指想去某种地方，使用不定冠词“a forest”更合适。该问题类型在列表中对应“Modal verb usage”不完全匹配，但实为冠词错误（类型22），这里为遵循只修改列出类型的要求，我们将改为更自然的表达。建议判断可数名词表示泛指时使用不定冠词。

× Walking in forests also gives me opportunities to get closer to nature and slow down my pace of life.

✓ Walking in forests also gives me opportunities to get closer to nature and to slow down my pace of life.

并列不定式中保持不定式形式一致，第二个动词前加“to”使结构更平行和规范。建议在并列不定式时使用相同结构以增强可读性。

× Recently, I love working in my neighborhood along the street. Walking in these urban areas gives me opportunities to have St. snacks which are delicious and cheap.

✓ Recently, I have loved walking in my neighborhood along the street. Walking in these urban areas gives me opportunities to have street snacks which are delicious and cheap.

“Recently”通常与现在完成时连用以表示近期的持续状态，故“I love”改为“I have loved”或“I've been loving”（口语中常用“I've been enjoying”更自然）。原句“working”与上下文意图不符，应为“walking”。“St. snacks”是不规范缩写，应写为“street snacks”。建议确保动词与时间状语时态一致，使用完整单词避免缩写造成歧义。

× In addition, it also enables me to enjoy the beautiful cityscape which is created by high rise buildings, skyscrapers and illumination.

✓ In addition, it also enables me to enjoy the beautiful cityscape created by high-rise buildings, skyscrapers and illuminations.

“high rise”作为复合形容词修饰名词应连字符“high-rise”。“which is created by”可以简化为过去分词短语“created by”。“illumination”通常用复数“illuminations”或更自然的“lighting”。建议使用复合形容词连字符并使用更自然的名词形式。