Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I do) then add one or two specific supporting details without filler words (umm). Correct small grammar errors (every weekend, not every weekends). Use a linking phrase to connect example.

예시: Yes, I do. I live near the Tamagawa River, so I walk there most weekends; for example, I usually stroll along the riverbank every Saturday and Sunday to relax and get some exercise.

제안: Good direct answer and relevant details. Improve by adding a linking word and one specific memory or brief example to make it more vivid. Avoid repeating similar phrases (father and my mother -> my parents).

예시: Yes, I did. My parents loved walking by the rivers and forests near our house, so we often went on family walks; for instance, I remember collecting leaves and listening to birds on weekend afternoons.

제안: Start with a general topic sentence about people, then give your personal view as a linked example. Avoid redundancy (don't repeat 'refreshing') and combine related ideas with linking words (because, moreover).

예시: Many people enjoy walking in parks because it reduces stress and offers fresh air and greenery; for example, I find park walks clear my head and provide light exercise at the same time.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid hesitations (I suppose). Use linking words to connect reasons (because, so) and be specific about what makes it suitable for a long walk (paths, length, views).

예시: I would choose the Tamagawa River because it's close to my home and has long, pleasant riverbanks lined with greenery, so I can enjoy continuous paths and scenic views for several hours.

제안: Answer in the past tense for 'lately' (I went). Remove hesitations and correct grammar (every Saturday and Sunday). Add a brief specific detail about the most recent visit (when or what you noticed) and use a linking phrase.

예시: Recently I went for a walk along the Tamagawa River. I usually go on weekends, and during my last visit last Sunday I noticed many cherry blossoms along the riverbank, which made the walk especially pleasant.

× I go there every weekends, Saturdays and Sundays.

✓ I go there every weekend, on Saturdays and Sundays.

The phrase 'every weekends' mixes 'every' with a plural noun; 'every' requires a singular noun (every weekend). Also include 'on' before specific days for correct preposition usage.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

No grammatical correction needed: the sentence correctly uses past tense with 'did' to ask about habitual past actions. Included only to indicate it meets the provided list; no change required.

× Yes, I went outside a lot to have a walk when I was young.

✓ Yes, I went outside a lot to take walks when I was young.

Use 'take a walk' or 'take walks' rather than 'have a walk' in natural English. Because the action is habitual in the past, plural 'walks' fits better. The past tense 'went' and 'was' are correct.

× My father and my mother loved walking alongside rivers and forests around the house.

✓ My father and mother loved walking along the rivers and forests around the house.

Use 'along' rather than 'alongside' for natural walking contexts (both are possible but 'along' is more idiomatic). Also 'my father and mother' is smoother than repeating 'my'. Add 'the' before 'rivers' and 'forests' if referring to specific ones near the house.

× I can't see this applies to every person but in my case I love walking in the park because it clears my head and it's very refreshing and also you can take exercise at the same time.

✓ I can't say this applies to everyone, but in my case I love walking in the park because it clears my head, it's very refreshing, and you can get exercise at the same time.

'I can't see this applies to every person' is awkward; 'I can't say this applies to everyone' is natural. Use 'everyone' rather than 'every person'. Use commas to separate clauses. 'Take exercise' is less natural than 'get exercise' or 'exercise'.

× Very efficient and refreshing.

✓ It's very efficient and refreshing.

The fragment lacks a subject and verb. Add 'It's' (it is) to create a complete sentence that refers back to walking in the park.

× I suppose I would go to the Tamagawa River, which is very near my house.

✓ I suppose I would go to the Tamagawa River, which is very near my house.

No correction needed: sentence is grammatically correct and uses present participle forms appropriately; included to indicate it matches the list and requires no change.

× The riverbank is very pleasant and a lot of greenery alongside the river.

✓ The riverbank is very pleasant and there is a lot of greenery along the river.

Original sentence lacks a verb phrase connecting the second part. Add 'there is' to indicate existence and use 'along the river' for idiomatic phrasing. 'A lot of greenery' requires a verb to be grammatical.

× The recent walk I took is again, uh, Tamagawa River.

✓ The most recent walk I took was, again, at the Tamagawa River.

Referencing a past event requires past tense 'was' rather than 'is'. Also use 'the most recent walk' for clarity and include preposition 'at' before the location.

× I go there on weekends, every Saturdays and Sundays, and even on other holidays.

✓ I go there on weekends, every Saturday and Sunday, and even on other holidays.

Do not use plural with 'every'; say 'every Saturday and Sunday' (or 'on Saturdays and Sundays'). Also using 'on weekends' and 'every Saturday and Sunday' is slightly redundant but acceptable; ensure agreement by using singular after 'every'.

× I love the scenery and the green lining up alongside the river.

✓ I love the scenery and the greenery lining the river.

'Green lining up alongside the river' is awkward. Use 'greenery lining the river' or 'the green trees along the river'. 'Along the river' or 'lining the river' are idiomatic prepositional phrases.