Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接地回应问题，并保持句子简洁自然。注意使用正确的词汇（例如 use "walking" 而非 "working" 或 "wondering"），减少重复，并提供一到两个具体原因。句子不超过五句，使用连接词如 "because" 或 "so" 来衔接原因和结果。

예시: Yes, I do walk a lot. I enjoy walking because it helps me relax and think clearly. Also, my bicycle broke last year, so I often walk when I need to go somewhere nearby.

제안: 回答要保持时态和词汇的正确性，用过去时描述童年经历。避免错误词汇（如 "working"、"OR"），并用连词使叙述更连贯，例如 "because"、"so"。提供一两个具体细节，如玩了哪些游戏或去了哪些地方。

예시: Yes, I did. My grandmother enjoyed walking, so she often took me and my friends to the park. We would run around and play games like tag while walking together.

제안: 回答要更简洁并用更准确的词汇表达原因。避免语法混乱，使用连接词（for example, because, and）来列举理由。可以给出具体场景（e.g., exercise, relax, meet friends）。

예시: I think people walk in parks because the air is fresher and it’s a peaceful place to relax. Also, parks are convenient for spending quality time with family or friends when people are busy.

제안: 回答应直接说明想去的地点并给出合理、相关的理由。避免不相关或混乱的信息（如关于付不起的计程车和“pet home”）。控制句子数量并用连接词解释原因或计划。

예시: I would like to take a long walk in Osaka, Japan, because the city has many pleasant neighborhoods and interesting shops. Walking would let me explore local streets and discover food stalls and stores at my own pace.

제안: 回答要清晰说明最近去了哪里并用过去时描述事件。避免重复和语法错误（如 "we feel very We felt"）。说明具体活动和原因（例如散步消化、看风景），并用连接词衔接句子。

예시: I went for a walk near West Lake recently. After dinner my friend and I bought ice cream, and because it was late we strolled around the lake to enjoy the view and digest our food.

× I love work very much because I think while I am working I can wondering and immerse in my own atmosphere to think my things.

✓ I love work very much because I think while I am working I can wonder and immerse myself in my own atmosphere to think about my things.

句中“wondering”用法不当，原句意为“我可以思考/沉浸其中”，此处應使用動詞原形“wonder”或更自然的表達“think”。同時“immerse”後面應接反身代词“myself”，表示把自己沉浸在某種氛圍中；“think my things”不自然，應改為“think about my things”表示“思考我的事情”。建議多注意動詞形式與固定搭配，並使用反身代詞和適當的介詞短語來表達“沉浸於”“思考某事”。

× And also my bike got broken last year so I need to walk uh, because I don't have a bike.

✓ And also my bike broke last year so I needed to walk, because I didn't have a bike.

原句混用現在時和過去時：事件發生在去年，應使用過去時態。常見說法是“my bike broke”而不是“got broken”（後者通常用於被動情況）。接下来的原因句也應使用過去時“needed / didn't have”。建議統一時態描述過去事件。

× My grandma enjoy walking so she always lead me to working outside the OR in the park with some of my friends so we can chase ourselves and play some games in the park when we walk.

✓ My grandma enjoys walking so she always leads me to walk outside in the park with some of my friends so we can chase each other and play some games in the park when we walk.

主語“My grandma”為單數，動詞需加-s：enjoys, leads。短語“lead me to working outside”語法不正確，應為“leads me to walk outside”或“leads me outside to walk”。“OR”應為多餘或錯置，刪除。“chase ourselves”錯用反身，應為“chase each other”。建議檢查主語與動詞的人稱數一致，以及反身代詞和互相動作的表達。

× In my opinion, it's probably because we love to people want to enjoy the fresh atmosphere and also have a good time with their lovers and families because today was everyone was so busy.

✓ In my opinion, it's probably because people want to enjoy the fresh atmosphere and also have a good time with their loved ones and families because everyone is so busy nowadays.

原句結構混亂，包含多餘詞“we love to people”應刪除且改為“people want to...”。“lovers and families”用詞不自然，改為“loved ones and families”。時態和時間副詞也不當，將“today was everyone was so busy”改為“everyone is so busy nowadays”。建議簡化句子結構，使用自然的名詞短語和正確的時態副詞。

× Uh, probably in Japan and Osaka because definitely we don't have any money to hail the taxi on.

✓ Uh, probably in Osaka, Japan, because we definitely wouldn't have any money to hail a taxi there.

句中表達假設情況應使用與現在事實相對的語氣，原句混用現在肯定式和地點表達不清。將“don't have any money to hail the taxi on”改為“wouldn't have any money to hail a taxi there”更符合“if I had the chance”這類假設語境。並修正地名順序與冠詞用法。

× So we need to walk, walk and go buy some stores to look and see what is good to buy someone to take it in the pet home.

✓ So we would need to walk, go into some shops to look around, and see what would be good to buy and take home for a pet.

原句結構混亂，多次重複“walk”且“go buy some stores”錯誤（應為“go into some shops”）。“what is good to buy someone to take it in the pet home”語序與代詞使用錯誤，需改為“what would be good to buy and take home for a pet”。建議整理句子邏輯，分段列出動作並使用正確的短語如“go into shops”, “look around”, “take home”。

× Maybe near the West Lake. My friend and I got an ice cream after dinner and maybe the time was so late so we feel very We felt very grateful. So we need to go for work around the Westlake to digest our ice cream.

✓ Maybe near the West Lake. My friend and I got an ice cream after dinner and it was quite late, so we felt very grateful. So we went for a walk around the West Lake to digest our ice cream.

原句時態混用且句子不連貫。“got an ice cream”是過去事件，應將後續描述統一為過去時“it was... we felt... we went”。“go for work”用詞錯誤，應為“go for a walk”。注意“West Lake”應一致寫法。建議在敘述過去經歷時統一使用過去時態並使用正確搭配詞語。