Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and avoid irrelevant info. Focus on frequency and typical context.

예시: Not really. I only walk occasionally, usually when I have free time, and I prefer short walks in the park or around my neighborhood. For example, I often walk for 20–30 minutes after work to relax.

제안: Start with a clear statement about past habits, then add a specific example and use past tense consistently. Use linking words like ‘often’ and ‘for example’. Reduce repetition and filler words.

예시: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child. For example, my mother would take me to the local park almost every afternoon, where I played with friends and explored nature.

제안: Give a clear reason, then expand with specific supporting details and a contrast using linking words (e.g. 'however', 'because'). Avoid vague generalizations and grammar errors.

예시: People like walking in parks because it is healthy and peaceful. For example, parks offer fresh air and green space for exercise and relaxation; however, some people cannot visit parks often due to work or lack of interest.

제안: Answer directly with a clear conditional sentence, then explain reasons with specific details. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid vague phrases like 'show myself'.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the seaside because the sound of waves relaxes me and the open view helps me think clearly. For instance, walking on a beach at sunset would inspire me and reduce stress.

제안: Use past simple consistently and be specific about what you saw and how it made you feel. Replace fillers with concrete descriptions and link idea with 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Lately I went for a walk in a nearby forest. I saw tall trees, birds and small animals, and I enjoyed the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, so I felt really refreshed.

× I, uh, sometimes, uh, walk in the park, in the street, uh, if I have a free time, uh, just that time, uh, I can work a lot then.

✓ I sometimes walk in the park or in the street when I have free time; at those times I can do a lot of work.

Problems: article/quantifier ('a free time' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable and needs no article) and sentence structure (run-on with many fillers). Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'when I have free time', and split into clearer clauses. Use 'do a lot of work' rather than 'work a lot then' for natural order.

× Uh, when I was a child, uh, I, uh, walk every day, every time, uh, foreplay, uh, playing in the park.

✓ When I was a child, I walked every day, often playing in the park.

Problem: past tense error — 'walk' should be 'walked' to match past time reference. Also awkward phrase 'foreplay' is incorrect; use 'often' or 'often playing'. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions and choose appropriate adverb.

× That's why, uh, my mom, uh, go to take me.

✓ That's why my mom used to take me.

Problem: subject-verb agreement and tense — 'my mom go' is incorrect; with past habitual action use 'used to take me' or 'would take me'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and remove fillers.

× The Walking is healthier. I suppose that all people walk in the park, but some people don't walk in the park because some people work, some people doesn't don't like and but they do.

✓ Walking is healthier. I suppose many people walk in parks, but some people don't because they work or they just don't like it.

Problems: article/gerund — 'The Walking' should be 'Walking' when speaking generally. Subject-verb agreement — 'doesn't don't like' is incorrect; use 'don't like' with plural subject. Also wordiness and repetition. Suggestion: remove 'the' before gerund, use plural verbs with plural subjects, and simplify the sentence.

× Uh, if I had it challenge, I would like to uh, walk uh, at the sea, uh, because, uh, it helps me, uh, it show myself, it shows uh, my dream, my.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk by the sea because it helps me clear my mind and express my dreams.

Problems: incorrect word choice ('it challenge' should be 'the chance'), preposition ('walk at the sea' should be 'walk by the sea' or 'walk along the sea'), sentence structure and vocabulary ('it show myself' is ungrammatical). Suggestion: use 'If I had the chance' and clearer expressions like 'clear my mind' or 'express my dreams'.

× I went to, uh, forest forest because, uh, when I uh, go to forest, I uh, see out of trees and uh, uh, animals and beautiful ears.

✓ I went to the forest recently because when I go to the forest I can see trees, animals, and beautiful scenery.

Problems: article use — 'forest' needs 'the' or an article when specific; tense inconsistency — 'go' should be 'go' for general habit but 'went' for past; repetition 'forest forest' and wrong word 'beautiful ears' likely meant 'beautiful scenery' or 'beautiful views'. Suggestion: use 'I went to the forest' for a specific past trip, and 'I can see trees and animals and beautiful scenery' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, no. I, uh, sometimes, uh, walk in the park, in the street, uh, if I have a free time, uh, just that time, uh, I can work a lot then. That's it.

✓ No. I sometimes walk in the park or on the street when I have free time; at those times I can get a lot of work done. That's it.

Problems: preposition choice — use 'on the street' rather than 'in the street' for general walking; article 'a free time' incorrect; phrasing 'work a lot then' awkward. Suggestion: use 'when I have free time' and idiomatic 'get a lot of work done'.