Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'abroad', 'by car', 'hidden streets'); keep sentences concise and use linking words for coherence. Add one clear reason and a brief specific example to strengthen the answer while keeping under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. When I travel abroad, I prefer getting around on foot rather than by car or train because walking lets me explore the city more closely and discover hidden streets and interesting buildings. For example, last year in Lisbon I found a charming cafe tucked away on a narrow lane while wandering.

제안: Use correct verb tenses and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: 'I usually stayed', 'my cousin', 'we spent', 'making up stories.'

예시: Not really; when I was a child I usually stayed at home with my family because I enjoyed playing games with my brother and my cousin. For instance, we often spent hours playing board games or making up stories, which felt cozier than going for walks.

제안: Good structure and relevance. Improve accuracy and fluency by fixing small mistakes ('simply enjoying') and adding a linking phrase to connect ideas. Include one specific effect of walking to show more depth.

예시: I think people go to parks to relax, especially after a hectic week. On weekends I often see families exercising, having picnics, or simply enjoying each other's company and the fresh air, which helps them recharge and reduce stress.

제안: Avoid repetition and keep sentences concise. Correct small issues ('re-energize', 'go for a long walk or exercise') and use a linking word to structure the plan. Provide one specific detail about the park to make the answer more vivid.

예시: I'd choose a large city park because after a hectic week I like somewhere peaceful where I can unwind and re-energize. For example, I would take a long walk along tree-lined paths, do some light exercise, and then have an afternoon picnic with friends.

제안: Fix word choice and tense issues ('few nearby amenities' is fine; 'I find these walks very beautiful'). Keep it concise and add one specific sensory detail to make it more engaging.

예시: Lately I've been taking walks around my house because I live in a rural area with few nearby amenities. I usually stroll through the garden and along the quiet lanes beside my property; I find the fields and bird-song very beautiful, and it helps me clear my mind.

× When I travel aboard, I prefer to get around on foot rather than car or train because walking lets me explore the city closely and discover interesting buildings and Hayden streets.

✓ When I travel abroad, I prefer to get around on foot rather than by car or train because walking lets me explore the city closely and discover interesting buildings and hidden streets.

Errors: 'aboard' vs 'abroad' (wrong word), missing preposition 'by' before means of transport, 'Hayden' is likely a typo for 'hidden'. Suggestions: Use 'abroad' for travelling to other countries, use 'by car/train' to indicate transport, and proofread for typos.

× Last year in Lisbon, I found Saguaro Charming Cafe this way.

✓ Last year in Lisbon, I found the Saguaro Charming Cafe this way.

Missing definite article before a specific cafe; tense 'found' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'the' when referring to a particular named location that you discovered.

× When I was a child, I usually stay at home with my family because I enjoy playing games with my brother and my cousin staying.

✓ When I was a child, I usually stayed at home with my family because I enjoyed playing games with my brother, and my cousin stayed with us.

Use past tense 'stayed' and 'enjoyed' to match 'When I was a child'. The phrase 'my cousin staying' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'my cousin stayed with us.' Also add a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× It felt more relaxing and cozy than going for a walk outside, and we often spend hours playing board games or making up story together.

✓ It felt more relaxing and cozy than going for a walk outside, and we often spent hours playing board games or making up stories together.

Maintain past tense: 'spent' instead of 'spend' and plural 'stories' instead of 'story'. Suggest using past tense consistently in narrated past events and correct plural for 'stories.'

× On weekends, I often see families and friends exercising, having picnics or simple enjoying each other's company and the fresh air to recharge.

✓ On weekends, I often see families and friends exercising, having picnics, or simply enjoying each other's company and the fresh air to recharge.

Use adverb 'simply' not adjective 'simple' to modify 'enjoying'. Also add a comma before the final item in the list for clarity. Suggest checking word class (adjective vs adverb) when modifying verbs.

× I would choose a large City Park because after a hectic week I like somewhere peaceful where I can unwind and re energize and I might go for a long walk or like exercise and then have a picnic with my friends or family in the afternoon.

✓ I would choose a large city park because after a hectic week I like somewhere peaceful where I can unwind and re-energize; I might go for a long walk or light exercise and then have a picnic with my friends or family in the afternoon.

Lowercase 'city park' unless it's a proper name; 're-energize' is hyphenated or can be one word, use 'light exercise' not 'like exercise'. Also sentence was run-on; split or use a semicolon for clarity. Suggestions: watch capitalization for common nouns and fix word choice ('light').

× I've been taking walks around my house because I live in a rural area with few nearby amenities.

✓ I've been taking walks around my house because I live in a rural area with few nearby amenities.

Sentence is correct grammatically. Present perfect continuous 'I've been taking' fits current repeated action. No change needed.

× I usually stroll around the garden and along the quiet lanes beside my property.

✓ I usually stroll around the garden and along the quiet lanes beside my property.

Sentence is correct. Prepositions 'around' and 'along' are appropriate. No change needed.

× I found these works very beautiful and a good way to get some fresh air and clear my mind.

✓ I find these walks very beautiful and a good way to get some fresh air and clear my mind.

'Found' implies past discovery; context indicates habitual present, so use 'find'. 'Works' is a typo for 'walks'. Suggest using present simple 'find' when describing ongoing feelings and correct noun to 'walks.'