Keys— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct word choice (e.g., 'khaki' is unclear—likely 'car key'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds ('uh') and repetition.

예시: Yes. I usually carry several keys, including my car key and my house key. I keep them together because I often return home late, so having my keys prevents waking my family to let me in.

제안: Give a clear, concise account with a timeline and result. Use linking words (e.g., 'the last time' followed by 'after that') and avoid trailing off. Provide a short consequence or what you learned.

예시: Yes. I have lost my keys several times. The last time was after work when I dropped them in a parking lot; by the time I realized, they were gone, so I had to call a locksmith. Since then, I attach my keys to a brightly colored lanyard to avoid losing them.

제안: Avoid repetition and contradictory phrasing. Give a direct topic sentence and a specific routine or habit that prevents locking out (correct 'half of my key' to 'all my keys' or 'a spare key').

예시: Not really. I rarely lock myself out because I always check my keys before leaving and carry a spare key on a different ring. This habit has helped me avoid being locked out.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons (one for and one against) using linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand'. Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (e.g., 'neighbors are not always trustworthy').

예시: It depends. If you trust your neighbour, leaving a spare key with them is convenient because they can help in emergencies; however, if you do not know them well, it is risky because they might misplace it or misuse it.

× Yes, almost every day I have khaki and I also have house key.

✓ Yes, almost every day I have a khaki key and I also have a house key.

The sentence omits necessary articles and misuses nouns. 'Khaki' here seems to refer to a key (countable), so use 'a khaki key'. 'House key' also needs the article 'a'. Add 'a' before singular countable nouns. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns and ensure noun forms are clear.

× Uh, I bring them all together because I usually go home very late at night so I don't have to bother asking my parents or my sister to open the door for me when I'm when I arrive home.

✓ Uh, I bring them all together because I usually go home very late at night so I don't have to bother asking my parents or my sister to open the door for me when I arrive home.

There is a repeated phrase 'when I'm when I arrive home' due to an editing or speech disfluency. Remove the extraneous 'when I'm'. Suggestion: Read the sentence fully before speaking or edit out repetitions to keep the present simple 'I arrive' consistent with habitual action.

× Yes uh multiple times already and the last time I lost it, I remember it that I lost it uh in the parking lot after work.

✓ Yes, I have lost them multiple times, and the last time I lost them I remember losing them in the parking lot after work.

Mixes past simple and present perfect awkwardly and repeats phrases. Use present perfect 'have lost' for experiences and then past simple 'lost' or 'losing' for the specific event. Also 'keys' is plural so use 'them' consistently. Suggestion: Use 'I have lost them multiple times' and for the specific event 'the last time I lost them, I remember losing them in the parking lot'.

× I dropped the keys on the floor of the parking lot, but I uh I just forgot about it and then.

✓ I dropped the keys on the floor of the parking lot, but I just forgot about them and didn't notice until later.

The original sentence ends abruptly and mixes singular 'it' with plural 'keys'. Fix sentence structure by completing the thought and matching plural pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: Use a complete clause like 'and didn't notice until later' and ensure pronoun number agrees with the noun.

× Not, not, not often, not really, because I have been very careful with my key.

✓ Not often, not really, because I have been very careful with my keys.

The speaker uses singular 'key' but earlier context implies multiple keys. Use plural 'keys' to match meaning. Suggestion: Choose singular or plural consistently based on context; here 'keys' is appropriate.

× I have to make sure that I bring along half of my key with me whenever I go out.

✓ I have to make sure that I bring along my keys with me whenever I go out.

'Half of my key' is incorrect quantifier usage — you cannot bring 'half' of a key; likely meaning 'some of my keys' or simply 'my keys'. Use 'my keys' to indicate carrying the necessary keys. Suggestion: Say 'my keys' or 'some of my keys' as appropriate.

× It depends on your relationship with your neighbor. If you are very close with them and you trust your neighbors, yes, of course, why not?

✓ It depends on your relationship with your neighbor. If you are very close to them and you trust your neighbor, then yes, of course, why not?

Inconsistent pronoun number: 'neighbor' (singular) followed by 'them' and 'neighbors' (plural). Maintain number agreement. Use singular 'neighbor' throughout or pluralize all references. Also use 'close to' not 'close with'. Suggestion: Keep pronoun number consistent and use 'close to' for relationships.

× You can, why? Why not? You can, uh, keep your, your key with them.

✓ You can, why not? You can keep your key with them.

Redundant hesitation causes repetition; also ambiguity in pronoun number. If earlier 'neighbor' is singular, use 'your neighbor' or 'them' consistently. Suggestion: Simplify to 'You can keep your key with them' or 'You can keep your key with your neighbor'.

× Uh, in contrast, you have to bear in mind that some, uh, neighbor are not that really good.

✓ In contrast, you have to bear in mind that some neighbors are not very trustworthy.

Subject-verb and singular/plural issue: 'neighbor' should be plural 'neighbors' to match 'some', and 'are' agrees with plural. 'Not that really good' is awkward; use 'not very trustworthy' or 'not that reliable'. Suggestion: Use plural 'neighbors' with 'some' and choose a clear adjective like 'trustworthy'.