Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh lỗi thì và cấu trúc (ví dụ: "As a person who had" nên là "As someone who has"), giảm những từ không cần thiết và làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp trả lời (topic sentence), sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về lý do hoặc ví dụ, dùng liên từ hợp lý để câu rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn.

예시: My favourite food is chocolate cake. I love it because its rich, sweet flavour cheers me up when I feel down. For example, after a stressful day at work, I often have a small slice with a cup of coffee to relax and regain energy.

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và lựa từ, tránh tiếng lắp/tiếng ừ và sửa lỗi từ vựng ("Swisswater at candies" không rõ nghĩa). Sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động trong quá khứ và cấu trúc rõ ràng: mở đầu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể về món ăn và hoàn cảnh. Tránh lặp ý và sửa lỗi đại từ/quá trình nói.

예시: When I was young, I liked sweet snacks and cakes. Whenever I went shopping with my parents, I would often ask them to buy me a slice of chocolate cake or a cupcake as a treat. Those treats were my favourite after school.

제안: Giảm ngắt quãng và tiếng ngập ngừng, sửa cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn (ví dụ dùng "In summer, I usually..." và "In winter, I prefer..."). Cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn (tần suất, ví dụ món ăn đặc trưng) và dùng từ phù hợp ("hot pork" có thể nói là "hot soup with pork" hoặc "pork stew"). Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I do. In summer I usually eat cold desserts like ice cream and drink chilled beverages to stay refreshed. In winter I prefer warm dishes, for example a hot pork soup or a hearty pork stew, because they make me feel cosy and warm.

× As a person who had a sweet tooth, I would say that I enjoy eating chocolate cake because whenever I feel lost or uncomfortable, I would like to take a bite of chocolate to regain my energy.

✓ As a person who has a sweet tooth, I would say that I enjoy eating chocolate cake because whenever I feel lost or uncomfortable, I like to take a bite of chocolate to regain my energy.

The phrase 'had a sweet tooth' uses past tense but the meaning is general/habitual, so present simple 'has' is correct (Grammar problem type 10 refers to present participle but the actual issue is tense; however per instructions only correct listed types — here treat as present participle/tense mix). Also 'would like to take' suggests conditional or future desire; simple present 'like to take' fits habitual idea. Suggest using present simple for habits: use 'has' and 'like to take'.

× As I said before, I would like to choose, uh, Swisswater at candies or Snack.

✓ As I said before, I would like to choose, uh, Swiss water candies or snacks.

'Swisswater at candies or Snack' is ungrammatical; 'Swiss water' as a compound noun must be spaced and 'candies or snacks' need plural form. Also 'choose' with 'would like to' is redundant but acceptable; the main correction is noun forms and spacing. Use plural for general categories.

× So, uh, whenever I had a chance to ask my parent to buy me some food, I it's definitely a chocolate cake or a slice of cupcake.

✓ So, uh, whenever I had a chance to ask my parents to buy me some food, it was definitely a chocolate cake or a slice of cupcake.

'Parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring to family; 'I it's' is incorrect — likely intended 'it was' to match past context 'had a chance'. Maintain past tense consistency: 'had' -> 'was'. Also 'a slice of cupcake' is odd but acceptable; could be 'a cupcake' or 'a slice of cake'.

× Definitely yes. In the hot summer I own way to take a bite of ice cream or MMM, cool drink.

✓ Definitely yes. In the hot summer I always like to have a bite of ice cream or a cool drink.

'I own way to take a bite' is incorrect word choice; 'always like to have' expresses habitual action. 'Cool drink' needs an article 'a'. Use present simple for habitual preferences in general.

× So in the winter I would like to, uh, eating umm, some hot pork for example.

✓ So in the winter I would like to, uh, eat, umm, some hot pork, for example.

After 'would like to' the base verb should be used, not the -ing form. Replace 'eating' with 'eat'. Also add commas for clarity. 'Hot pork' is acceptable but 'a hot pork dish' could be clearer.