Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, reduce hesitations and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourite dishes, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (where you get them, key flavours). Use linking words (for example, 'also' or 'and') to connect ideas. Pronounce dish names clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

예시: My favourite food is bunakichuri with Kalabuna and chutney because it has a rich, spicy flavour. I often get it from a local stall; the chutney adds a tangy contrast that makes the dish memorable. I also enjoy Auburn back pasta from Yamcha restaurant, which combines creamy sauce and smoky vegetables.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence (past tense) and add two specific supporting details. Eliminate hesitations and correct minor grammar (use 'liked' and 'was near my house'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to explain why you liked it. Mention specific dishes and one sensory detail or memory to enrich the answer.

예시: When I was young, I liked Chinese food from a nearby place called Yamcha because it was close to my house and very affordable. For example, I often ordered Yamcha special rice and wontons; the rice was fragrant and the wontons had a rich, savoury filling that I loved.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then provide one specific seasonal example. Reduce fillers and correct grammar (e.g., 'my mother makes' and 'a kind of pita called Papa'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast your general habit with the winter exception. Give one sensory detail about the seasonal food.

예시: Not really — I usually eat the same foods year-round; however, in winter my mother makes a special pita called Papa. It is sweet and very flavorful, with a soft texture and warm spices that I only taste during the colder months.

× To be honest, I have a lot of favorite food, but specially I love the bunakichuri with Kalabuna and uh, chutney.

✓ To be honest, I have a lot of favorite foods, but especially I love the bunakichuri with Kalabuna and chutney.

'A lot of' requires a plural noun when referring to countable items, so 'favorite food' should be 'favorite foods'. Also 'specially' is incorrect here; use 'especially'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of favorite foods' when listing multiple items and 'especially' to highlight one in English.

× Uh uh, this, uh, this flavor is very delicious and this flavor is very rich.

✓ This flavor is very delicious and very rich.

Repeated words and filler sounds make the sentence ungrammatical and redundant. Removing repetition yields a concise sentence. Also 'delicious' and 'rich' are adjectives modifying 'flavor'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and fill words; say 'This flavor is very delicious and very rich.'

× I really like it And uh, I also like the Auburn back pasta, which is umm, which is from the Yamcha restaurant.

✓ I really like it, and I also like the Auburn back pasta, which is from the Yamcha restaurant.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' and unnecessary repetition 'which is umm, which is'. Capitalization error after 'it'. Remove filler and duplicate phrase. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses and avoid repeating 'which is'.

× When I was young, I really liked the Chinese food, especially the Chinese food is from Yamcha restaurant.

✓ When I was young, I really liked Chinese food, especially the Chinese food from the Yamcha restaurant.

Tense 'liked' is past and correct, but phrase 'the Chinese food is from' mixes present with past context and is awkward. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'Chinese food' in general reference and change structure to 'Chinese food from the Yamcha restaurant.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use 'Chinese food from the Yamcha restaurant' for clarity.

× It is near to my house.

✓ It is near my house.

English uses 'near' without the preposition 'to' when indicating proximity. 'Near to' is nonstandard in this context. Suggestion: Say 'near my house.'

× I often go there to, uh, taste their food, especially the Yamcha special rice and the wonton I it is very flavorful.

✓ I often go there to taste their food, especially the Yamcha special rice and the wonton; it is very flavorful.

Filler 'uh' removed; there is a typo 'I it' and a run-on sentence. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses and correct the typo. Suggestion: Say 'I often go there to taste their food, especially the Yamcha special rice and the wonton; it is very flavorful.'

× Not really, umm, I don't eat different foods at different times of the year, but umm, in winter, uh, my mother, umm, make a various kind of pita for me.

✓ Not really. I don't eat different foods at different times of the year, but in winter my mother makes a variety of pitas for me.

Verb 'make' must agree with singular subject 'my mother' so use 'makes'. 'A various kind of pita' is ungrammatical; use 'a variety of pitas' or 'various kinds of pita'. Removed fillers and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement and the phrase 'a variety of pitas' for plural items.

× Uh, it is very delicious.

✓ It is very delicious.

Remove filler 'Uh'. Sentence otherwise correct. Suggestion: Avoid filler words in spoken or written answers.

× The that is a pita called Papa.

✓ That pita is called Papa.

Phrase 'The that is' is incorrect. Use 'That pita is called Papa.' or 'There is a pita called Papa.' Suggestion: Use simple demonstrative 'that' with the noun: 'That pita is called Papa.'

× It is very sweet and very, uh, flavorful. My mom.

✓ It is very sweet and very flavorful. My mom made it.

Sentence fragment 'My mom.' is incomplete. Provide a verb to complete the thought and avoid filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence: 'My mom made it.'