Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give one or two relevant details (why you like it and specific examples). Avoid unrelated or incorrect statements (e.g., “making bananas” is confusing). Use correct grammar and keep the response within 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favourite food is Punjabi cuisine because I grew up eating it at home. I especially like samosas and butter chicken for their rich flavours, and I often cook simple Punjabi dishes myself on weekends.

제안: Use correct tense and grammar and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence about past preference, then explain reasons and a brief example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “like kind of material”). Use linking words (because, so, and) to make it coherent.

예시: When I was young, I loved street food, especially spicy snacks. I liked them because of their strong flavours and fresh ingredients, and eating them now reminds me of home whenever I try similar food in Canada.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and brief reason), then give one specific example of how food changes by season or occasion. Avoid vague, repetitive phrases and unclear contrasts (e.g., “sorrow” example is unclear). Use linking words (for example, during, when) to structure the response.

예시: Yes. My food choices change by occasion: during festivals and family celebrations we eat richer and spicier dishes like biryani and sweets, while on regular weekdays I eat lighter, simple meals such as lentils and rice.

× My favorite food is the Punjabi food as I always prefer to eat the food that I usually cook at home.

✓ My favorite food is Punjabi food, because I prefer to eat the food I usually cook at home.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'Punjabi food' and 'food' in general when speaking about a category. Also remove the redundant 'that' and simplify the clause. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to types of cuisine or general food categories.

× For example, I love samosas and also sometimes I prefer making bananas at home.

✓ For example, I love samosas, and sometimes I prefer making bananas at home.

The adverb order 'also sometimes' is awkward; use 'sometimes' or 'also' with correct placement. However, the sentence likely has a semantic error ('making bananas' is odd) but per instructions only fix listed grammar types — here adjust adverb placement. Suggestion: place adverbs before the main verb or at sentence end: 'I sometimes prefer making...'. If 'bananas' is wrong, replace with correct food name.

× When I were young at that time, I prefer the street food like because of the spice level or the like kind of material they are using to make it.

✓ When I was young, I preferred street food because of the spice level and the kinds of ingredients they used to make it.

Subject-verb agreement in past tense requires 'was' not 'were' for singular 'I'. The verbs describing past habits should be in past tense ('preferred', 'used'). Also 'like' and 'material' are inappropriate; replace with 'kinds of ingredients'. Suggestion: use past simple consistently when describing past preferences.

× That's very delicious.

✓ That was very delicious.

Context refers to past experiences ('when I was young' / 'reminds me'), so the descriptive verb should be in past tense 'was'. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame of the experience.

× It reminds me every single time when I try the outside food here in Canada.

✓ It reminds me every time I try food from outside here in Canada.

The present tense 'reminds' is acceptable for a general present reaction, but the phrase 'every single time when I try the outside food' is awkward. Use 'every time' and 'food from outside' or 'eating out'. Suggestion: simplify to 'every time I eat out here in Canada'.

× Yeah, I eat different kind of food like it particularly depends upon the situation or on the occasions like if we are going on family functions, we're like happiness and all that is involved at that time.

✓ Yeah, I eat different kinds of food; it particularly depends on the situation or the occasion. For example, when we go to family functions and are happy, we choose different foods.

Use plural 'kinds' with 'different'. 'Depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural. The clause about 'we're like happiness' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'when we are happy'. Suggestion: use plural quantifiers with 'different' and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× We prefer to eat the spicy like different variety of foods.

✓ We prefer to eat spicy and varied foods.

The original sentence has redundant and disordered phrases ('the spicy like different variety of foods'). Simplify to 'spicy and varied foods' or 'a variety of spicy foods'. Suggestion: keep adjective order natural and avoid filler words like 'like'.

× Like if if it says sorrow at that time there are just like the common.

✓ For example, if it is a sad occasion, we eat the common traditional dishes.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive ('like if if', 'there are just like the common'). Clarify meaning: contrast happy and sad occasions and state the typical food choice. Suggestion: avoid filler 'like' and redundant words; state the condition clearly and the result.