Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and hesitations, correct contradictory words (sweets are not 'bitter'), and add one or two specific details using linking words. Focus on vocabulary accuracy and fluency.

예시: My favourite food is sweets. I have liked them since childhood because their sweetness uplifts my mood, and I especially enjoy chocolate and fruit candies when I need a treat.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and use specific details with linking words. Reduce filler words and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'I used to love' or 'I always ate'). Mention reasons or a brief example to enrich the answer.

예시: When I was young, I also loved tomatoes, especially in tomato soup. For example, my mother used to make a creamy tomato soup that I always ate after school because its warm, slightly sweet flavor was comforting.

제안: Start with a direct response, avoid pauses, and provide one specific example of seasonal or event food using linking words (e.g., 'however' or 'for example'). This improves coherence and content richness.

예시: Usually I eat the same foods throughout the year; however, during festivals I enjoy traditional dishes. For example, at New Year we always cook a special rice dish and I only eat it at that time.

× My favorite is my favorite food is much sweets.

✓ My favorite food is sweets.

The sentence has redundant phrasing and incorrect article/quantifier use. 'Much' is used with uncountable nouns in negative or interrogative contexts; with countable plural 'sweets' use no 'much' or use 'a lot of'. Also the phrase 'My favorite is my favorite food' repeats 'favorite'. Corrected to 'My favorite food is sweets.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use appropriate quantifiers (e.g., 'a lot of sweets' or simply 'sweets').

× I have liked them uh, since I was a child because umm, it is a bitter taste, uh, is very nice and it makes me feel very happy.

✓ I have liked them since I was a child because they have a bitter taste that is very nice and they make me feel very happy.

Multiple tense and pronoun issues. 'I have liked them since I was a child' is acceptable (present perfect) to show continuing preference; keep it. Pronoun reference: 'it is a bitter taste' should refer to 'sweets' (plural), so use 'they' and plural verbs. Use 'that' to connect the clause describing taste. Also use 'make' to agree with plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and keep consistent tense for continuing states.

× Aside from much sweets, I loved tomatoes because they taste very sweet and I especially liked, uh, tomato soup.

✓ Aside from sweets, I loved tomatoes because they tasted very sweet and I especially liked tomato soup.

'Much sweets' is incorrect quantifier usage; use 'sweets' or 'a lot of sweets'. When referring to past feelings, use past tense 'tasted' to match 'I loved'. Also remove unnecessary commas and filler words. Suggestion: match verb tense when describing past experiences and use correct quantifiers.

× I always uh, a ate uh, my mother made one.

✓ I always ate the one my mother made.

This sentence has disfluent filler words and incorrect word order. 'A ate' is a typographical/hesitation error. Use past simple 'ate' and place the object phrase correctly: 'the one my mother made' refers to the soup. Suggestion: remove fillers and say 'I always ate the soup my mother made' or 'I always ate the one my mother made.'

× I usually eat uh, the same food, umm, at the different time of the year, but uh, especially during the event, umm, I enjoy the traditional, uh, food.

✓ I usually eat the same food at different times of the year, but especially during events I enjoy traditional food.

Article and number errors: 'at the different time of the year' should be 'at different times of the year' (plural) or 'at different times during the year'. Unnecessary definite articles removed: 'the same food' is fine, but 'the different time' is wrong. 'During the event' is vague and singular; use 'during events' or 'on special occasions'. Also remove filler words and commas. Suggestion: use plural 'times' for repeated occasions and avoid unnecessary articles; use 'traditional food' without comma.