Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence naming the favourite food. Remove repetitions and filler words, use correct nouns (e.g. “fruit” → specific fruit) and correct grammar (verb forms, articles). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” / “also”) and avoid exceeding five sentences.

예시: My favourite food is mango. I love it because it is sweet and refreshing, especially in summer. I also enjoy blending it into smoothies because it gives a rich, tropical flavour.

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and correct vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, “when I was young” as a time marker, then “because” for reasons). Replace unclear phrases (“each night”) with precise descriptions and avoid filler. Keep it to one to three sentences with specific details.

예시: When I was young, I loved sweet snacks, especially popcorn. I used to eat it almost every night because I enjoyed the sweet taste and the buttery popcorn aroma.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence like “Yes, I do.” Then give specific seasonal examples linked with connecting words (e.g. “for example,” “during”). Correct unclear words (e.g. “punching” likely meant “dumplings” or “pork”); be precise. Keep sentences short and coherent.

예시: Yes, I do. For everyday meals I usually eat fresh fruit because it’s healthy, but during festivals I eat special foods — for example, mooncakes at Mid-Autumn Festival and dumplings at Chinese New Year.

제안: Use clear contrast language and correct tense: start with “Yes, it has” or “No, it hasn’t.” Explain briefly why it changed with specific reasons and one example. Avoid repetition and incorrect noun usage; use precise food names and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, it has. As a child I preferred sweet snacks like popcorn, but now I prefer fruits such as mango because I want healthier options that are refreshing and nutritious.

× Actually, my favorite fruit is the fruit because it's very healthy and I like mango.

✓ Actually, my favorite fruit is mango because it's very healthy.

The phrase 'the fruit' is vague and unnecessary; 'mango' should be used without 'the'. Omit redundant articles and use the singular noun 'mango' to state a preference. Suggestion: say 'my favorite fruit is mango' or 'my favorite fruit is the mango' (both acceptable), but avoid 'the fruit' before naming the fruit.

× It's very sweet, uh, refreshing and very seasonal, especially in the summer and sometime uh, usually blend it into the MU smoothie, which make it even better.

✓ It's very sweet, refreshing and seasonal, especially in the summer, and I sometimes usually blend it into my smoothie, which makes it even better.

Adjectives should be coordinated with commas; 'sometime' is incorrect here and should be 'sometimes'; 'usually blend' needs a subject 'I' and the possessive 'my' before 'smoothie'; 'make' must agree with singular noun 'which' referring to 'smoothie' so use 'makes'. Suggestion: keep consistent adverb choice (either 'sometimes' or 'usually') and ensure subjects are present for verbs.

× When I was young, I like each night, especially popcorn snack because it is very sweet and uh, I can feel a little popcorn smell when I eat that is.

✓ When I was young, I liked a snack at night, especially popcorn, because it was very tasty, and I could smell a little popcorn when I ate it.

The sentence describes past habits, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'liked', 'was', 'could', 'ate'. 'Each night' is awkward; 'a snack at night' or 'snacks at night' is clearer. 'That is' is incorrect word order and redundant; use 'it'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past-time descriptions and simpler noun phrases ('popcorn' not 'popcorn snack').

× Yes, in normal day I usually like eat fruit because it's very for my health but in the special event like mid autumn I will usually eat the mooncake or in the new year I usually eat punching.

✓ Yes, on a normal day I usually like to eat fruit because it's very good for my health, but on special occasions like Mid-Autumn Festival I usually eat mooncakes, and at New Year I usually eat dumplings.

Use prepositions 'on a normal day' and 'on special occasions'. 'Like eat' should be 'like to eat' or 'enjoy eating'. 'Very for my health' is missing an adjective: 'very good for my health'. 'Mid-Autumn' and 'New Year' need cultural terms and plural nouns: 'mooncakes' and 'dumplings' (not 'punching'). Suggestion: use 'like to eat' or 'enjoy eating', correct prepositions, and pluralize countable foods appropriately.

× Uh, yes, as I said before, when I was young, I usually like each night because it's very sweet and delicious.

✓ Uh, yes, as I said before, when I was young, I usually liked snacks at night because they were very sweet and delicious.

Describing habitual past actions requires past tense 'liked' and 'were'. 'Each night' is awkward; 'snacks at night' is clearer. Use plural 'they' to agree with 'snacks'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× But when I grow up, I like food because I know it's very healthy for my health and eat food is very refreshing and delicious.

✓ But now that I've grown up, I like fruits because I know they are very healthy for my health, and eating fruit is very refreshing and delicious.

The phrase 'when I grow up' should be changed to 'now that I've grown up' to reflect present state after growing up. 'I like food' is vague; 'fruits' fits earlier context. 'I know it's very healthy for my health' is redundant; use 'they are very healthy'. 'Eat food is' is ungrammatical; use gerund 'eating fruit is'. Suggestion: use correct time expression for completed growth, avoid redundancy ('healthy' vs 'for my health'), and use gerund forms for general statements about actions.