Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers/repetition, use linking words to add a brief reason and a specific detail. Aim for 2–3 sentences, correct minor grammar (e.g., ‘variations’), and avoid hesitation sounds.

예시: My favourite food is pizza because there are many delicious varieties. For example, I often choose pepperoni pizza since I like its spicy, savory flavour and the crispy crust.

제안: Use simple past and clear phrasing to describe childhood habits. Give one clear reason and avoid repetition and uncertain phrases. Use linking words (because, although) and correct grammar ('when I was a child', 'unhealthy'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: When I was a child, I liked eating chips because they were crispy and tasty. Although I enjoyed them back then, I now realise they are unhealthy, so I eat them less often.

제안: Answer directly and give clear, specific examples. Improve sentence structure and vocabulary (e.g., 'depending on my location', 'food that is quick to eat'). Use linking words to contrast situations (for example, 'however', 'in contrast'). Limit to 2–3 polished sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. It depends on my location: at events or city centres I usually choose food from a street vendor or a café, but when I am with friends I prefer quick, shareable snacks like burgers or fries.

제안: Give a clear statement about change and one or two specific reasons. Avoid vague language and repetition. Use past and present contrast with linking words (e.g., 'used to', 'now'). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, my preferences have changed. When I was a child I often ate chips and fast food depending on my mood, but now I usually prefer healthier meals like salads or homemade pasta.

× My favorite food is pizza.

✓ My favorite food is pizza.

No article needed before uncountable or general food names; sentence is correct. Included for completeness but no change required.

× I would really like like to eat that because there are so many variant types of uh, ver pizzas that people are like.

✓ I would really like to eat it because there are so many different types of pizza that people like.

The original has repeated 'like', incorrect word 'that' for 'it', wrong adjective 'variant', pluralization 'pizzas' with unnecessary article and misplaced phrase. Use the infinitive 'would like to eat it'. Use 'different types of pizza' (pizza as a category) and 'people like' for habitual preference. Remove filler words.

× I like the food.

✓ I like the food.

This short sentence is grammatically correct; no change required. Included to keep sentences separate.

× I like the variation with pepperoni and it is so delicious and I would like to really.

✓ I like the variety with pepperoni; it is very delicious and I really enjoy it.

'Variation' is not the best noun here; 'variety' is more natural. Adverb 'really' should modify a verb phrase like 'really enjoy it' and 'very delicious' is preferred. Reorder to make a complete clause.

× During my early age I would like to eat chips because it sounds more crispy and as well as it is more tasty though I am.

✓ When I was young I liked to eat chips because they sounded crispier and tastier.

Tense should be past ('liked') for childhood habits. 'During my early age' is unnatural; use 'When I was young'. 'Chips' plural requires 'they'. Use comparative 'crispier' and 'tastier' to compare to other foods.

× I was child. I was child.

✓ I was a child.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular count noun 'child'. The sentence was repeated; use a single corrected sentence.

× That's why I don't know about the about that this is a unhealthy thing.

✓ That's why I didn't know that this is an unhealthy thing.

Tense consistency: refer to past 'didn't know'. Remove repeated words 'about the about'. Use article 'an' before adjective starting with a vowel sound ('unhealthy'). Placement: 'know that this is...' is correct structure.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Add comma for natural speech pause; grammatically correct otherwise. Included for completeness.

× Basically it depends on where I what is my location and if I locate in the party center I would like to grab a grab a check menu.

✓ Basically it depends on my location, and if I am in the city center I like to grab a quick menu.

Incorrect word order 'where I what is my location' should be 'my location' or 'where I am'. 'Locate' is incorrect reflexive use; use 'am'. 'Party center' likely intended 'city center'. 'Grab a grab a check menu' is unclear; 'grab a quick menu' (or 'grab something quick to eat') is natural.

× On the other hand, while I was with my friends, I would like to get food which is quickly eaten.

✓ On the other hand, when I am with my friends, I like to get food that can be eaten quickly.

Tense consistency: habitual present 'I like' rather than 'would like' for general preference. Use 'when I am' for current habitual action. 'Which is quickly eaten' is awkward; use 'that can be eaten quickly' or 'quick to eat'.

× Yes, definitely. A lot of time my mood was changed because in my childhood I was so Moody.

✓ Yes, definitely. Many times my mood changed because in my childhood I was very moody.

Use 'many times' or 'a lot of the time' for frequency. 'Mood was changed' is passive and unnatural; use active past 'my mood changed'. 'Moody' should be lowercase and 'very' is the adverb for emphasis.

× That's why I sometimes I like to eat chips, sometimes pizza or fast food or street food, uh, sometimes a soda.

✓ That's why sometimes I liked to eat chips, sometimes pizza, fast food, street food, or sometimes have a soda.

Maintain past tense to match childhood context: 'liked' not 'like'. Remove redundant 'sometimes I'. List items need commas and parallel structure. 'Have a soda' is the correct collocation. Reduce fillers.