Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite, then briefly mention one or two supporting details (types and reason). Avoid filler words (uh) and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I love biryani the most because of its rich spices and fragrant rice. I also enjoy Mughlai dishes like mutton and chicken korma for their creamy sauces, and for dessert I prefer sheer korma. Overall, I appreciate Mughlai cuisine for its strong flavours and festive feel.

제안: Begin with a direct statement about childhood preferences, then give a clear contrast with present habits using linking words (however, but, now). Be specific about reasons and avoid repeating the same points.

예시: As a child I loved sweets—ice cream and chocolates were my favourites. However, now I limit sweets for health reasons and try to eat more balanced meals. I did enjoy biryani back then as well, which I still eat occasionally.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, remove filler sounds, and use linking words to structure the response (for example, in winter..., whereas in summer...). Give specific examples and a brief reason why you change your diet seasonally.

예시: Yes. In winter I tend to eat warming foods such as dried fruits, nuts and mutton dishes because they help me feel warmer and more energetic. In summer I prefer lighter meals like salads and grilled chicken to stay cool.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then support with brief specific details. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetition; use linking words (although, however) if pointing out minor changes. Correct grammar (has → have, same same → the same).

예시: Not really — my favourites have stayed similar. I loved sweet dishes as a child and I still enjoy them, although now I eat them less often for health reasons.

× My favorite food is biryani.

✓ My favorite food is biryani.

No correction needed but check article usage before specific dishes; 'biryani' as a general favourite does not require an article. Keep as is.

× And in dessert I like sheer korma and Shahi tukda.

✓ And for dessert I like sheer korma and Shahi tukda.

Use the prepositional phrase 'for dessert' instead of 'in dessert'. This is a preposition choice related to article/location usage; 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate purpose or occasion.

× Actually, I am very fond of uh Mughlai food.

✓ Actually, I am very fond of Mughlai food.

Remove filler 'uh' for fluent speech. The original structure is fine otherwise; fillers interrupt clarity. Suggest pausing silently or using brief linking words instead of repeated 'uh'.

× When I was young I used to eat more sweet dishes like ice cream was my favorite and chocolates also.

✓ When I was young I used to eat more sweet dishes; ice cream was my favorite, and I also liked chocolates.

Mixed structures caused tense and parallelism problems. 'Used to' indicates habitual past; follow with a clear past statement 'ice cream was my favorite' and 'I also liked chocolates' to maintain past tense and parallel structure.

× But now as I grew up I limit their intake because of health reasons.

✓ But now that I have grown up I limit my intake because of health reasons.

Pronoun 'their' incorrectly refers to food; use 'my intake' to show personal action. Also use 'now that I have grown up' (present perfect) to link past growth to present habit.

× Besides that I like biryani also when I was young.

✓ Besides that, I also liked biryani when I was young.

Tense should be past 'liked' to match 'when I was young'. Place 'also' in a natural position and add a comma for clarity.

× Uh, yes, uh, in winter I like to eat more, uh, food that provide me inner warmth, uh, like uh, the, the dry fruits, besides that meat, I like eat more meat or mutton items comparatively to summer.

✓ Yes, in winter I like to eat more foods that provide me with inner warmth, such as dry fruits and meat; I eat more meat or mutton dishes compared to summer.

Multiple issues: 'provide me inner warmth' needs 'provide me with inner warmth' (preposition 'with'); 'the dry fruits' should be 'dry fruits' unless specific; 'like eat more' is wrong — use 'I eat more'; use 'meat or mutton dishes' for clarity; 'comparatively to summer' should be 'compared to summer'. Remove fillers for clarity.

× Honestly speaking, no, my food habits has not changed so much since my childhood as I used to love sweet dishes in my childhood.

✓ Honestly speaking, no, my food habits have not changed much since my childhood, as I used to love sweet dishes then.

Subject 'my food habits' is plural, so use 'have' not 'has'. Remove redundant 'in my childhood' after 'since my childhood' and replace with 'then' for conciseness.

× Same same is hap.

✓ The same is true now.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear structured sentence that conveys the intended meaning: 'The same is true now.'

× Same thing is with me right now.

✓ The same thing applies to me right now.

Improve natural phrasing: 'applies to me' is idiomatic. Maintain present tense 'is' but use 'applies' for correct verb usage and smoother expression.

× Also I'm fond of sweet dishes still now.

✓ Also, I'm still fond of sweet dishes.

Place 'still' before 'fond' for natural adverb placement. 'Still now' is redundant; use 'still' or 'still now' rarely — 'still' is preferred.