Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and clear: give a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar, and provide one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Keep it under 5 sentences. For example, say why you like pizza (taste, variety, convenience) and give a short example of how you enjoy it.

예시: I like pizza because it is versatile and full of flavour. For example, I often make my own pizzas at home, choosing different toppings like mushrooms and peppers, which lets me customise each slice. Also, it’s easy to share with friends, so it’s my favourite food for gatherings.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense consistently since you’re talking about the past. Reduce fillers and give specific examples and reasons or memories. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas and keep sentences concise.

예시: When I was young, I loved sweets, especially chocolate, candy and ice cream. For example, I remember getting cake and ice cream at birthday parties, which made sweets my favourite treat as a child.

제안: Be specific about seasons and the foods you eat, use correct vocabulary (seasonal, mostly, during), and organise your answer with linking words (for example, in winter, during the rainy season). Avoid vague items and aim for two clear supporting details about seasonal choices.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter I eat more leafy vegetables and root vegetables because they are in season, while during the rainy season I prefer hot street foods like spicy noodles or soup to stay warm.

제안: Answer directly and use clear grammar: use present perfect or simple past to show change. State what changed and give a reason with a short example. Keep sentences concise and use linking words (for example, now, because).

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to prefer sweets, but now I prefer spicy dishes because my family cooks spicy food at home, so I developed a taste for stronger flavours.

× My favorite food is pizza because, uh, is it is a versatile and by topping your own type of toppings on it, uh, you made uh, it for your own slice. So I love to add pizza.

✓ My favorite food is pizza because it is versatile, and you can add your own choice of toppings, so you can make a slice just for yourself.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect pronoun use ('is it is', 'you made uh, it') and awkward phrasing. Replace redundant pronouns with 'it' referring to pizza and use clear clauses: 'it is versatile' and 'you can add your own choice of toppings'. Also use 'make a slice for yourself' instead of 'made it for your own slice'. Keep present tense to match general fact.

× Uh, when I, uh, when I was young, I like to eat sweets like chocolates, candy, ice cream as uh, I am a child or different people offer me different type of gesture by giving me a cake, ice cream.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat sweets like chocolates, candy, and ice cream because people often gave me cakes and ice cream.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses ('when I was young' with 'I like'). Use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Also correct phrasing: 'different people offer me different type of gesture' is unnatural; use 'people often gave me' and plural forms 'cakes and ice cream'. Remove unnecessary filler words.

× Yes, I do eat different foods and different type of ears because some of the food are seasonal like green vegetables are mostly purchased on the time of winter and during the time of rainy. I prefer street food like maggi or balmala etcetera.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because some foods are seasonal; for example, green vegetables are mostly bought in winter and during the rainy season. I also prefer street food like Maggi or bhelpuri (balmala).

Errors include 'different type of ears' (incorrect words) and wrong quantifiers/number agreement ('some of the food are'). Use 'different times of the year' and 'some foods are seasonal'. Use 'bought in winter' and 'rainy season'. Capitalize proper nouns/brand names and provide a clearer example for the street food name.

× Yes, my favorite food is change or sauce and so my childhood because now I don't prefer sweets. I do like to eat spicy food because in our home also my mom made spicy.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since my childhood because now I don't prefer sweets. I like to eat spicy food because my mother also cooks spicy food at home.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate a change from past to present. 'Is change or sauce' is meaningless and corrected to 'has changed since my childhood'. 'I don't prefer sweets' is acceptable; for the reason clause use 'my mother also cooks spicy food' to match habitual present. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear vocabulary.