Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, give a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or reason using a linking word. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

예시: My favourite food is cake because I love sweet flavours. For example, I often choose chocolate cake after meals since it cheers me up and is a nice treat with coffee.

제안: Organize the answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples and a brief reason using linking words. Avoid vague or unfinished phrases and correct grammar and word choice.

예시: When I was young I liked simple home-cooked dishes, such as chicken soup and plain rice. These meals were comforting because my parents used fresh ingredients, and I also enjoyed small sweet treats like rice cakes occasionally.

제안: Remove hesitations and irrelevant details, state a clear pattern, then give two specific seasonal examples connected with linking words like "for example" or "during".

예시: Yes, I do. In winter my family often eats tangyuan together for warmth and tradition. During the Spring Festival we usually have fish because it symbolizes prosperity.

제안: Give a direct answer followed by a concise explanation with a linking word. Correct tense and word order, and provide a specific example of a favourite fruit or how you eat it now.

예시: No, it hasn't changed. I liked fruits as a child and I still do, especially mangoes; for instance, I often have fresh mango slices as a snack in the afternoon.

× My my favorite food is cake because eating sweet food makes me happy.

✓ My favorite food is cake because eating sweet foods makes me happy.

Duplicate word 'My my' is a repetition error (sentence structure). Also 'sweet food' is better as the plural 'sweet foods' or 'sweets' when speaking generally. Improve by removing the repeated word and using the plural for general category: 'My favorite food is cake because eating sweet foods makes me happy.'

× I love simple home cooked dishes like chicken soup and rice. One was Yum because they were comforting and made by my parents with fresh ingredients.

✓ I loved simple home-cooked dishes like chicken soup and rice when I was young because they were comforting and made by my parents with fresh ingredients.

The original mixes present 'I love' with past 'was' and passive 'made by my parents' without clear tense. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense 'loved' and 'when I was young'. 'One was Yum' is unclear; replace with a clause explaining why they were liked. Hyphenate 'home-cooked.'

× I also enjoy sweet treats trees such as.

✓ I also enjoyed sweet treats, such as cakes and cookies.

The phrase 'sweet treats trees such as.' is ungrammatical and incomplete. It likely meant to list examples. Match tense to past (childhood) and provide examples to complete the sentence: 'I also enjoyed sweet treats, such as cakes and cookies.'

× Uh, yes I do. In the winter, Thursday night, umm, my family and uh, I eat tangyuan together, but during the Spring festival we will eat fish.

✓ Yes, I do. In winter, on Lantern Festival night my family and I eat tangyuan together, and during the Spring Festival we eat fish.

The original mixes 'Thursday night' incorrectly with a seasonal context and uses future 'will eat' instead of habitual present. Use 'In winter, on Lantern Festival night' (or 'during the Lantern Festival') for the occasion. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'my family and I eat' and 'we eat fish.' Remove filler words for clarity.

× Uh, no, no, it hasn't changed. Uh, I like eating fruits when I was a child I now I still like it especially.

✓ No, it hasn't changed. I liked eating fruits when I was a child, and I still like them now, especially certain kinds.

The answer mixes present and past tenses awkwardly and lacks punctuation. Use past 'liked' for childhood and present 'still like' for now. Replace 'it' with plural 'them' to agree with 'fruits.' Add a comma and conjunction to join clauses and optionally specify 'certain kinds' to complete the thought.