Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. "as a lunch" → "for lunch").

예시: My favourite food is spaghetti. I usually have it for lunch when I go to work because it’s quick to prepare and easy to eat on the go. For example, I can pack it in a container and reheat it at the office, so it saves me time in the afternoon.

제안: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and avoid filler words and repetition. Use one or two specific supporting details (e.g. types of bread, memories) and correct tense and agreement errors ("like" → "liked", "have" → "had").

예시: When I was young, I liked bread the most. My mother often packed a simple roll or sandwich in my school bag, which made it a convenient breakfast and a comforting part of my morning routine.

제안: Answer the question directly about seasonal changes. If you do sometimes change foods, give a clear example linked to a season and explain why. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences; use linking words such as "in summer", "during winter", "because".

예시: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer light salads and grilled fish because it’s hot, but in winter I often eat soups and stews to keep warm.

제안: Give a direct yes/no topic sentence and support it with a concise reason and a specific example. Correct grammar ("since I was a child") and remove hesitations like "like". Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: No, my favourite food has not changed since childhood. I still enjoy bread for breakfast because it’s convenient to pack and eat on the way to work, for example a sandwich or a roll I can grab quickly.

× Well, my favorite food is spaghetti. I love to have it as a lunch every time I go to work.

✓ Well, my favorite food is spaghetti. I like to have it for lunch every time I go to work.

The student used 'I love to have it as a lunch' which is awkward and non-native. This is a present tense usage problem (ID 6). Use 'like' or 'love' with 'to have it for lunch' and use 'for lunch' not 'as a lunch'. Suggestion: use 'I like/love to have it for lunch' to sound natural.

× I cannot think of anything for lunch besides spaghetti.

✓ I cannot think of anything to have for lunch besides spaghetti.

This is an incorrect use of prepositions/structure (ID 11). 'Think of anything for lunch' is understandable but more natural is 'think of anything to have for lunch'. Suggestion: use 'to have for lunch' to clarify the action.

× I find it convenient for me to eat rather than having rice as of lunch in the afternoon.

✓ I find it more convenient to eat it rather than having rice for lunch in the afternoon.

The phrase 'as of lunch' is incorrect (ID 11). Also awkward word order. Correct preposition is 'for lunch' and use comparative 'more convenient' to compare choices. Suggestion: reorder to 'I find it more convenient to eat it rather than having rice for lunch.'

× When I was young, the food that I really like the most is bread, because in the morning when I go to school, my mom always have that in my bag so that it's it's it's very easy for me to have it as a breakfast.

✓ When I was young, the food I liked the most was bread, because in the morning when I went to school my mom always put it in my bag so it was very easy for me to have it for breakfast.

Multiple past tense errors (ID 5). The student mixed present with past: 'like' should be 'liked', 'is' should be 'was', 'go' should be 'went', 'have' should be 'had' or better 'put'. Also 'have it as a breakfast' should be 'for breakfast'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when discussing childhood and use 'put it in my bag' for correct verb and 'for breakfast' for preposition.

× my mom always have that in my bag

✓ my mom always had that in my bag

Subject-verb agreement/third person singular in past (ID 2 and 27). 'Mom' requires 'has' in present or 'had' in past. Because the context is past, use 'had'. Suggestion: match verb form to subject and tense: 'my mom always had that in my bag.'

× So yes, would be the bread.

✓ So yes, it would be bread.

This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). The sentence lacks a subject and uses awkward word order. Add subject 'it' and remove unnecessary articles: 'it would be bread.' Suggestion: use 'So yes, it would be bread.'

× Just like last year, I love having pizza as a dinner.

✓ Just like last year, I loved having pizza for dinner.

Tense mismatch (ID 6). 'Just like last year' refers to the past, so use past tense 'loved'. Also use 'for dinner' rather than 'as a dinner'. Suggestion: match tense to time expression and use 'for dinner.'

× Like almost every day.

✓ I had it almost every day.

Sentence fragment (ID 26). 'Like almost every day' is not a complete sentence. Make it complete by providing subject and verb: 'I had it almost every day.' Suggestion: avoid fragments in speaking/writing.

× I usually have I usually have pizza for the dinner.

✓ I usually have pizza for dinner.

Repetition and article/tense issue (IDs 6 and 22). The phrase repeats and 'for the dinner' is unnatural; use 'for dinner'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I usually have pizza for dinner.'

× But like right now, just like I mentioned above, I love.

✓ But right now, as I mentioned above, I love it.

Fragment and missing object (ID 26). 'I love' requires an object; context needs 'it' (spaghetti/pizza). Suggestion: complete the sentence: 'I love it.'

× It has never changed since I was child.

✓ It has never changed since I was a child.

Missing article and small tense/context issue (ID 6 and 22). Use the article 'a' in 'a child'. The present perfect 'has never changed since' is correct because it refers from past to present. Suggestion: include 'a' -> 'since I was a child.'

× I love having bread as a morning food and still right now, I still love to have bread in the morning because it's very convenient for me to like put it in the bag and then have it all the way.

✓ I love having bread for breakfast and even now I still like to have bread in the morning because it's very convenient for me to put it in my bag and eat it on the way.

Multiple present tense and word choice issues (ID 6, 11, 13). 'As a morning food' is awkward; use 'for breakfast'. 'Still right now, I still' is redundant. 'Like put it' is filler; remove 'like'. 'Have it all the way' is incorrect—use 'eat it on the way' or 'on the way to work/school'. Suggestion: use natural expressions: 'for breakfast', avoid filler 'like', and use 'put it in my bag and eat it on the way.'