Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors; use one clear topic sentence, then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Avoid hesitations like "uh" and correct noun/verb forms (e.g. “mild digestion problems” → “mild digestion problem”; “cell eating” → “eating”).

예시: I like salads because they are fresh and rich in vitamins. Additionally, they help my mild digestion problem, so I try to eat a salad every day.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and reduce redundancy. Fix collocations and grammar (e.g. “I was obsessed with sweets” not “I had really obsessed with sweet tooth”). Use linking words to show sequence or contrast.

예시: As a child, I was obsessed with sweets. For example, I often spent my pocket money on chocolates and cakes as treats after school.

제안: Use correct tense and phrasing, avoid filler words, and be specific. Use linking words (“for instance”, “while”) correctly and correct vocabulary (“seasonal”, “I always eat”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because seasonal produce changes. For instance, I always eat lots of fruits like watermelon in summer, while in winter I prefer hot dishes such as soup.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear reasons. Correct phrasing (e.g. “I used to eat a lot of sweets”; “homemade nutritious meals”; “they make me feel healthier and fitter”). Remove hesitations.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to eat a lot of sweets, but now I prefer homemade nutritious meals like grilled fish and vegetables because they make me feel healthier and fitter.

× I have a mild digestion problems so uh cell eating salads helps me to digest my uh food easily so I try to eat them every day.

✓ I have a mild digestion problem so eating salads helps me to digest my food easily, so I try to eat them every day.

The noun 'problems' should be singular because it is modified by 'a mild' which requires a singular count noun. Also 'cell' is incorrect (possibly misheard) and unnecessary; remove it. Use 'eating' (gerund) after 'helps' to form 'helps me to digest' or 'helps me digest'. Combine clauses with correct punctuation. Suggestion: say 'a mild digestion problem' and use 'eating salads helps me digest my food.'

× As a child I had really obsessed with sweet tooth.

✓ As a child I was really obsessed with having a sweet tooth.

The verb 'obsessed' needs a correct auxiliary: 'was obsessed' (passive/state) rather than 'had obsessed'. Also 'sweet tooth' is a noun phrase; to express tendency use 'having a sweet tooth'. Suggestion: use 'I was really obsessed with having a sweet tooth' or 'I had a sweet tooth.'

× I used to eat a lot of chocolate candies and cakes every day and even I tried to keep some my pocket money to buy some to treat myself for snacks after my school and it was really crazy.

✓ I used to eat a lot of chocolate, candies, and cakes every day, and I even tried to save some of my pocket money to buy snacks to treat myself after school; it was really crazy.

Errors include word order and missing prepositions/articles. Use 'save' instead of 'keep', include 'of' in 'some of my pocket money', remove extra 'some', and 'after school' without 'my'. Punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: 'I used to eat a lot of chocolate, candies, and cakes every day. I even saved some of my pocket money to buy snacks after school.'

× Yes, I definitely eat different food at different times of the year because of the wide variety of seasonable food.

✓ Yes, I definitely eat different foods at different times of the year because of the wide variety of seasonal foods.

Use plural 'foods' when talking about different kinds. 'Seasonable' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'seasonal'. Make both nouns plural for consistency. Suggestion: 'different foods' and 'seasonal foods.'

× For instance, in the summer I always eating, uh a lot of fruits and vegetables such as watermelon and melon, while in the winter I prefer more hot, uh, healthy dishes such as soup to.

✓ For instance, in the summer I always eat a lot of fruits and vegetables such as watermelon and melon, while in the winter I prefer hotter, healthy dishes such as soup too.

'Always eating' is incorrect here; use present simple 'always eat'. 'Prefer more hot' should be 'prefer hotter' (comparative) or 'prefer hot'. 'Soup to' is wrong; use 'soup too' meaning also. Suggestion: 'I always eat' and 'prefer hotter, healthy dishes such as soup too.'

× Yes, my favorite food considerably changed since I was a child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed considerably since I was a child.

When an action started in the past and continues to now or affects the present, use present perfect 'has changed' not simple past 'changed'. Suggestion: use 'has changed considerably since I was a child.'

× I used to eat a lot of sweet tooth, how I said before, uh, but now I prefer more, uh, homemade nutrition meals, uh, like grilled fish and vegetables because they makes me feel more healthier and uh, more fitable.

✓ I used to have a big sweet tooth, as I said before, but now I prefer more homemade nutritious meals, like grilled fish and vegetables because they make me feel healthier and fitter.

Multiple issues: 'eat a lot of sweet tooth' is wrong - one 'has a sweet tooth'. 'Homemade nutrition meals' should be 'homemade nutritious meals'. 'They makes' should be 'they make' (subject-verb agreement). 'More healthier' is redundant; use 'healthier'. 'Fitable' is not a word; use 'fitter'. Suggestion: 'I used to have a big sweet tooth... I prefer homemade nutritious meals because they make me feel healthier and fitter.'