Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary errors (e.g. 'meat' not 'meeting'; 'spicy' not 'space spicy'), use one linking phrase to add a reason or example, and avoid repetition. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favourite food is hot pot. I like it because you can cook a variety of fresh ingredients at the table, such as thinly sliced meat, vegetables and seafood. Also, I enjoy the spicy broth and the social atmosphere when friends and family gather around it.

제안: Correct tense and word choice, and give a clear topic sentence followed by a specific detail or short example. Use past tense for childhood and one linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: When I was young, I liked sweet foods such as candy, cake and popcorn. I used to beg my mother to buy them for me, but as I grew up I gradually stopped eating so many sweets.

제안: Provide a direct, fluent response and correct grammar. Use present tense for habits, avoid fillers, and give one clear reason with linking words. Be specific about why seasons do not affect you.

예시: No, I don't change my diet much during the year. Because I mostly eat at home and can buy any ingredients at nearby supermarkets, seasonal changes rarely affect what I eat.

제안: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary and tense. State the change clearly, give reasons or examples, and avoid hesitations. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I preferred sweets, but now I usually choose healthier meals and often enjoy spicy dishes instead, so I avoid sugary snacks most of the time.

× Favorite food? I'm gonna say my favorite food is hot pot because you can try so many different fresh food at the same time such as a delicious meeting, vegetables and seafood.

✓ Favorite food? I'm going to say my favorite food is hot pot because you can try so many different fresh foods at the same time such as delicious meat, vegetables, and seafood.

Errors: 'gonna' is informal but acceptable in speech; main problems are count noun 'food' needs plural 'foods' when referring to many types, 'meeting' is a misspelling of 'meat', and commas needed in a list. Suggestion: use 'fresh foods' for multiple items, correct spelling 'meat', and include serial commas for clarity.

× And I also enjoy the space spicy flavor and I like the gathering together.

✓ And I also enjoy the spicy flavor, and I like gathering together with others.

Errors: 'space spicy' is incorrect word order and word choice; should be 'spicy' as an adjective modifying 'flavor'. 'the gathering together' is unnatural; use 'gathering together' or 'getting together' and add 'with others' for clarity. Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and use natural collocations.

× When I was a child I always enjoy something sweetie just like candy, cake and popcorn.

✓ When I was a child I always enjoyed sweet things like candy, cake, and popcorn.

Errors: Tense mismatch—sentence refers to past so use past tense 'enjoyed' not 'enjoy'. 'sweetie' is incorrect; use noun phrase 'sweet things'. Also adjust list punctuation. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct nouns.

× I always begging my mom to bought me some but as I grow up I gradually far away from them.

✓ I always begged my mom to buy me some, but as I grew up I gradually moved away from them.

Errors: 'begging' should be past simple 'begged' or 'was begging'; 'bought' is past but after 'to' should be base form 'buy'; 'as I grow up' should be past 'as I grew up'; 'gradually far away from' is incorrect phrase; use 'moved away from' or 'drifted away from'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct verb forms after 'to' (infinitive).

× No, actually I didn't, uh, because I always eating indoor and, uh, personally I didn't care about something like that.

✓ No, actually I didn't, because I was always eating indoors, and personally I didn't care about something like that.

Errors: 'I always eating' needs past continuous 'I was always eating' for past habitual action; 'indoor' should be adverb 'indoors'; 'didn't' is okay. Suggestion: use correct past continuous and adverb form.

× And there's a season and there's a climate didn't affect me about the choice of food and if I wanted to eat something, the modern mall had everything so I can bought them.

✓ And the seasons and the climate didn't affect my choice of food, and if I wanted to eat something, modern malls had everything so I could buy it.

Errors: Sentence structure messy—use plural 'seasons' and 'climate' with definite article 'the' when generalizing; 'didn't affect me about the choice' is incorrect—use 'didn't affect my choice of food'; 'modern mall had' should be plural 'modern malls had' or 'the modern mall had', and tense/modal mix: 'so I can bought them' should be 'so I could buy it/them'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, keep past tense consistent, and match singular/plural and pronouns.

× Yes, when I was a child I liked sweet singing, but as I grow up, uh, the most of time I prefer he healthier food and uh, the other time I like to taste something spicy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked sweet things, but as I grew up, most of the time I preferred healthier food, and other times I liked to try something spicy.

Errors: 'sweet singing' is wrong word choice—use 'sweet things'; tense consistency: 'as I grow up' should be 'as I grew up'; 'the most of time' should be 'most of the time'; 'I prefer he healthier food' has pronoun/article errors—use 'I preferred healthier food'; 'the other time' -> 'other times'. Suggestion: maintain past tense when comparing childhood to later, fix word choices and pronouns.

× Uh, so uh, now I usually avoid the sweetie things.

✓ So now I usually avoid sweet things.

Errors: 'sweetie' is incorrect adjective form; 'the sweetie things' unnatural article and noun combination. Suggestion: use 'sweet things' and omit unnecessary filler words for clarity.