Part 1
시험관
What is your favourite food?
수험생
I think my favorite food is the caffeine because everyday morning the first time I need to do is, uh, drink a cup of Americano.
시험관
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
수험생
When I was so young I prefer to milk, but uh, recently I uh, gallery for the milk so I drink more tea and a coffee instead.
시험관
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
수험생
The year, yes, I did eat a different food such as the fruits. Uh, I eat a watermelon in the summer because it's more fresh and uh, water, have more water in the juicy. Umm, in the winter I will. I prefer to eat some apple, orange, Peaches.
시험관
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
수험생
I don't think my favorite food has changed the since I was a child. I like the rice very much and I enjoy it's chicken, the white meat, so it's not changed.
What is your favourite food?
점수: 55.0제안: 表达要更自然、用词准确,并控制长度。不要把饮料称为“food”,去掉填充词(uh),用一两句直接说明喜好并简短解释原因。可使用连接词如“because”来衔接原因。
예시: My favorite drink is Americano. I drink a cup every morning because it helps me wake up and focus for the day.
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
점수: 50.0제안: 时态和词汇要准确,避免语法错误和口头语。用过去时描述儿时喜好,用现在时描述改变,并给出简短原因。将模糊词(gallery)改为合适表达(stop liking)。
예시: When I was a child I liked drinking milk because it was comforting. Recently I stopped drinking much milk and prefer tea or coffee because I enjoy the taste and caffeine.
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
점수: 60.0제안: 回答要更有条理与连贯。先给出总体回答,再用连接词列举具体例子,注意名词复数和形容词使用(fresh, juicy),减少犹豫词。
예시: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I often eat watermelon because it is fresh and very juicy. In winter I prefer apples, oranges and peaches because they are in season and comforting.
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
점수: 58.0제안: 句子要简洁且语法正确。明确主题句,然后补充具体细节并使用连词。注意冠词和代词的用法(it's → its, the rice → rice)。
예시: No, my favourite food hasn't changed much since childhood. I have always liked rice, especially with white chicken meat, so my main preferences remain the same.
× I think my favorite food is the caffeine because everyday morning the first time I need to do is, uh, drink a cup of Americano.
✓ I think my favorite drink is caffeine because every morning the first thing I need to do is drink a cup of Americano.
原句中把 caffeine 当作可数的“食物”使用不当,应使用 drink(饮品)来表达喜好;everyday 是形容词“每天的”,此处应用副词短语 every morning(每天早上);the first time I need to do is 结构不自然,正确表达为 the first thing I need to do is(我需要做的第一件事是);Americano 前不需要冠词或可说 a cup of Americano(我喝一杯美式)。建议:将名词类别区分清楚(food vs drink),使用合适的时间副词短语,并用固定搭配 the first thing I need to do is + 动词原形。
× When I was so young I prefer to milk, but uh, recently I uh, gallery for the milk so I drink more tea and a coffee instead.
✓ When I was very young I preferred milk, but recently I moved away from milk so I drink more tea and coffee instead.
原句时态和词汇使用错误:当谈过去时应使用过去时态 preferred(我以前更喜欢);短语 "prefer to milk" 语法错误,应为 prefer milk 或 preferred milk;recently 表示现在完成或现在状态,应与现在时或现在完成时连用,这里用 present 表示现在的习惯(I drink more...),但表达"不再喜欢牛奶"应使用 move away from milk 或 stopped drinking milk 等;a coffee 在泛指时可去掉冠词。建议:过去习惯用过去式,描述现在习惯用一般现在时,避免把动词和名词搭配写反。
× When I was so young I prefer to milk, but uh, recently I uh, gallery for the milk so I drink more tea and a coffee instead.
✓ When I was very young I preferred milk, but recently I moved away from milk so I drink more tea and coffee instead.
原句中的介词或短语使用混乱:"prefer to milk" 中的 to 不应出现;"gallery for the milk" 不是正确表达,可能想说 move away from 或 give up milk(放弃牛奶)。建议:用固定搭配 move away from / give up / stop drinking + 名词。
× The year, yes, I did eat a different food such as the fruits. Uh, I eat a watermelon in the summer because it's more fresh and uh, water, have more water in the juicy. Umm, in the winter I will. I prefer to eat some apple, orange, Peaches.
✓ Yes, during the year I eat different foods such as fruits. I eat watermelon in the summer because it's fresher and juicier. In the winter I prefer to eat apples, oranges and peaches.
原句时态和名词复数不一致:"did eat a different food" 不自然,描述一般习惯应用一般现在时 I eat different foods;fruits 为可数复数时应去掉定冠词 the;watermelon 为可数名词,复数或单数需一致,且比较级应为 fresher(更鲜)和 juicier(更多汁),而不是 more fresh 或 "have more water in the juicy"(语序和结构错误);句尾列举水果应使用复数形式 apples, oranges and peaches,并且句子断裂(I will. I prefer...)需合并为完整句。建议:使用一般现在时描述习惯,注意可数名词单复数和比较级形容词的正确形式,调整句子以保持完整。
× I eat a watermelon in the summer because it's more fresh and uh, water, have more water in the juicy.
✓ I eat watermelon in the summer because it's fresher and juicier.
原句中使用比较级错误:形容词 fresh 和 juicy 的比较级分别为 fresher 和 juicier,不应使用 more fresh 或把句子拆成不连贯的短语(water, have more water in the juicy)。另外 watermelon 前可以省略冠词表示总体喜好或用 a watermelon 表示一整瓜,但更自然为 I eat watermelon(表示作为习惯)。建议:使用正确比较级形式,并保持句子结构简洁连贯。
× In the winter I will. I prefer to eat some apple, orange, Peaches.
✓ In the winter I prefer to eat some apples, oranges and peaches.
原句中出现不完整的将来式 "I will." 导致句子断裂;描述季节性习惯应使用一般现在时 prefer;可数名词 apple, orange, peach 应使用复数 apples, oranges and peaches 或使用不定量词 some + 复数。建议:删除不完整的将来式,使用一般现在时并注意名词复数形式。
× I don't think my favorite food has changed the since I was a child. I like the rice very much and I enjoy it's chicken, the white meat, so it's not changed.
✓ I don't think my favorite food has changed since I was a child. I like rice very much and I enjoy its chicken, especially the white meat, so it hasn't changed.
原句中时态和冠词代词使用错误:多余的定冠词 the 在 the since 中不应出现,应为 since;enjoy it's chicken 中的 it's 是 it is 的缩写,不是所有格,应使用 its;句尾描述完成状态应用现在完成时 haven't changed 而不是 it's not changed。另:rice 前通常不加定冠词 the,且 chicken 在此为不可数名词或指鸡肉时用其所有格 its chicken。建议:注意 since 的用法,区分 it's 与 its,并使用现在完成时表达从过去到现在未改变的状态。