Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar, word choice and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and article usage, and avoid unnecessary words. Use one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. For example, change 'the sweet cuisine taste help me relax' to 'the sweet taste helps me relax.'

예시: My favourite food is ice cream, especially fruit flavours. I often have it when I'm stressed because the sweet taste helps me relax, and fruity varieties feel refreshing after a long day.

제안: Fix word choice and tense consistency, and remove unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific memories linked logically. Correct vocabulary errors like 'scarf' → 'scoop' and 'on hot' → 'on hot days.'

예시: When I was young, I loved eating ice cream whenever I felt unhappy. My parents would buy me a scoop of chocolate ice cream as a treat, and I remember licking the cone on hot summer days because it cheered me up.

제안: Good structure and specificity. Improve fluency by smoothing linking words and small grammar points: 'When in summer' → 'In summer,' and avoid repeating 'I' too much. You can add one brief reason to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods in different seasons. For example, in spring I tend to eat fresh salads and fruits to feel light and refreshed, and in summer I prefer cold dishes and smoothies to stay cool during hot weather.

제안: Clear and well-structured answer. To improve, vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. 'sweet treats' instead of 'sweet snacks') and tighten linking phrase: use 'because' once and add a brief example of a healthy meal to be more specific.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to love sweet treats like candy and ice cream, but now I prefer healthier options such as steamed fish and salads because I want to stay healthy; for example, I often have grilled salmon with a green salad.

× I usually eat it when I'm feeling stressed because the sweet cuisine taste help me relax and forget my worries for a little while.

✓ I usually eat it when I'm feeling stressed because the sweet taste of the dessert helps me relax and forget my worries for a little while.

The original mixes incorrect noun choice and form: 'cuisine' is an uncountable noun meaning style of cooking and is not appropriate; 'sweet cuisine taste' is awkward. Also subject-verb agreement requires 'helps' to match singular subject 'the sweet taste of the dessert'. Use 'dessert' or 'ice cream' and 'the sweet taste' and 'helps' to correct meaning and grammar. Suggestions: replace 'cuisine' with 'dessert' or 'ice cream', reorder to 'the sweet taste of the dessert', and change 'help' to 'helps'.

× My parents would buy me a scarf of chocolate ice cream as a trip and the sweet taste always leaves my spirits.

✓ My parents would buy me a scoop of chocolate ice cream as a treat, and the sweet taste always lifted my spirits.

'Scarf' is the wrong word; the intended word is 'scoop' (a portion of ice cream). 'As a trip' is incorrect contextually; 'as a treat' is appropriate. Tense consistency: the sentence refers to past habitual events, so 'leaves' should be past 'lifted' (or 'left') to match 'would buy' and overall past context. Also use 'lifted my spirits' (idiomatic). Suggestions: use 'scoop', 'treat', and past tense verbs for past habits.

× I still remember licking the cone on hot.

✓ I still remember licking the cone on a hot day.

'On hot' is incomplete and ungrammatical. The intended expression is 'on a hot day' or 'when it was hot'. Adding 'a hot day' or 'when it was hot' completes the prepositional phrase and clarifies the time reference. Suggestions: use 'on a hot day' or 'when it was hot'.

× When in summer I prefer cold dishes and smoothies to stay cool.

✓ In summer I prefer cold dishes and smoothies to stay cool.

Word order is awkward: 'When in summer I prefer...' should be 'In summer I prefer...' or 'During the summer, I prefer...'. The verb 'prefer' is present simple and is correct for habitual actions; only rearrangement needed for natural English. Suggestions: use 'In summer' or 'During the summer' at the start of the sentence.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed since childhood.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

'Since childhood' is not incorrect but 'since I was a child' is more natural in this spoken context; however both are acceptable. This suggestion improves clarity and conversational tone. Suggestions: use 'since I was a child' for clearer reference.