Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用更自然、简洁的句子表达观点，减少重复和语音填充词（如 "uh"、"umm"），注意语法（例如时态和主谓一致），并使用连接词组织细节。可以先给出主题句，接着用一到两个具体原因或例子支持，最多保持三到四句。

예시: My favourite food is cherries because they are sweet and very tasty. Although they used to be quite expensive, their price has come down this year, so I can buy them more often. I especially enjoy them fresh in summer as a healthy snack.

제안: 注意时态一致（描述过去应使用过去式），保持句子完整并避免重复填充词。给出一到两个具体例子或原因，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'for example' 来增强连贯性。

예시: When I was a child, I preferred sweet foods such as cakes and ice cream because they made me feel happy. For example, I often had pudding after school with my family.

제안: 回答要针对问题（不同季节或不同时间），而不是重复之前的内容。明确说明在不同季节或场合如何改变饮食，并用连接词（e.g., 'however', 'for example', 'in winter')给出具体例子。控制句子长度，不超过五句。

예시: Yes. I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer fresh fruits and salads, while in winter I like warm, salty dishes like soups and stews because they are more filling and comforting.

제안: 回答要简明并注意语法（过去和现在对比应清晰）。减少语音填充词，使用比较词（e.g., 'but', 'however', 'now') 并给出简短具体的例子说明变化的原因或程度。

예시: Yes, it has changed a little. I used to prefer hard candies because they were very sweet, but now I like chocolate more since it is less sweet and has richer flavour.

× My favorite B My favorite food is cherry because it's sweet and, uh, delicious.

✓ My favorite food is cherries because they're sweet and delicious.

该句中有冠词和名词单复数错误。如果指一般喜欢某种水果，通常用复数形式（cherries）或在前加不定冠词（a cherry）表示单个。原句还有重复“My favorite B My favorite”。建议使用复数并把动词和代词一致。改为“My favorite food is cherries because they're sweet and delicious.” 更自然。

× Even though it's a little bit expensive before umm, I still love it very much.

✓ Even though they were a little bit expensive before, I still loved them very much.

此处谈论复数水果时，量词和代词需要与复数一致。原句使用单数代词“it”与复数“cherries”不匹配。并且时态应与“before”过去时间一致，使用过去式。建议将代词改为“they/them”，动词改为过去式。

× And uh, its price has uh, going down this year, so I love it better.

✓ And its price has been going down this year, so I like them better.

1) “has going down” 是不正确的现在完成进行时结构，应为“has been going down”。2) 代词与复数不一致，改为“them”。3) “love it better” 在表达偏好上更自然用“like... better”。因此使用现在完成进行时并调整代词与动词。

× When I was a child, I prefer sweet foods, just like desserts because I think sweet foods could uh, bring me a lot of happiness and umm umm, my taste was very healthy, uh, and uh.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred sweet foods, like desserts, because I thought sweet foods could bring me a lot of happiness and my taste was very simple.

句子描述过去的习惯，应使用过去时（preferred, thought）。原句“my taste was very healthy” 用词不当，可能想说“口味很单纯/简单”，应改为“my taste was very simple”。建议使用过去时并选择更恰当的形容词。

× Yes, and just as I just mentioned and I I love, I prefer sweet foods when I was young, but now I prefer salty foods because I think when I'm very hungry, salty foods is the better choice to to feed.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, I preferred sweet foods when I was young, but now I prefer salty foods because I think when I'm very hungry, salty foods are a better choice to eat.

1) 描述过去习惯应使用过去时“preferred”。2) “salty foods is” 主谓不一致，复数名词应用复数动词“are”。3) “to feed” 用法错误，应为“to eat”。此外删去重复词并简化句子。

× Yes, actually, umm, but not very much because uh, for example, I prefer the candies at first because I love the sweet things, but later I change my mind to chocolate, umm, something that's not so sweet as candies.

✓ Yes, actually, not very much. For example, I preferred candies at first because I loved sweet things, but later I changed my mind and chose chocolate, something that's not as sweet as candies.

句中时间对比涉及过去，需使用过去式（preferred, loved, changed）。“the candies” 冠词不必要，可直接用“candies”。“change my mind to chocolate” 用法不当，改为“changed my mind and chose chocolate”。比较结构“not so sweet as” 更自然为“not as sweet as”。建议统一使用过去时并修正比较结构与动词搭配。