Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct vocabulary and grammar, and add one specific example. Use a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail with a linking word. Correct errors: 'salmon nigiri' not 'salmon Nigeria'; 'I often eat sushi when celebrating success.' Limit to 2–3 sentences to sound natural.

예시: My favourite food is sushi, especially salmon nigiri. I enjoy it because the fresh, delicate flavour of the fish combined with lightly seasoned rice creates a perfect balance, and I often eat it to celebrate special occasions.

제안: Use past tense consistently and produce complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid fragments and finish your examples. For instance, say 'I loved steamboat...' and specify what it included and why it was meaningful.

예시: When I was young, I loved steamboat because it was a simple, warming meal my grandmother made for family gatherings. For example, we would share chicken soup, steamed rice and pickles, and the sweet snacks afterwards always made it feel special.

제안: Answer the question directly about seasonal eating rather than telling an unrelated anecdote. Use present simple for habits and give a clear example with linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences. For example, say whether you change foods by season and then give one specific seasonal example.

예시: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter I often eat hearty stews and hot pot, whereas in summer I prefer cold salads and fruits like watermelon because they are refreshing.

제안: Use clear grammar and correct word choice: 'has changed', 'when I was a child', 'plain pasta', 'roasted vegetables', 'creamy' or 'natural' flavour. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one example. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. I used to prefer plain pasta and simple sandwiches, but now I prefer more complex dishes like grilled salmon with roasted vegetables because I appreciate richer flavours and healthier options.

× I enjoy it because the fresh, delicate flavor of the fish combined with lightly seasoned rice uh creates a perfect balance.

✓ I enjoy it because the fresh, delicate flavor of the fish combined with lightly seasoned rice creates a perfect balance.

Remove the extra 'uh' (a filler) which interrupts the sentence flow; also ensure subject 'the fresh, delicate flavor of the fish combined with lightly seasoned rice' agrees with the singular verb 'creates'. The sentence reads smoothly without the filler word.

× And I often do sushi when celebrating successful.

✓ And I often eat sushi when celebrating a success.

Use the correct verb 'eat' for consuming food and change 'successful' (an adjective) to the noun 'a success' to match the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Uh, when I was young I love Steamboat.

✓ Uh, when I was young I loved steamboat.

The time marker 'when I was young' requires the past tense. Change 'love' (present) to 'loved' (past) to maintain correct tense consistency.

× Simple homemade food, especially my grandmother.

✓ Simple homemade food, especially my grandmother's cooking.

The fragment 'especially my grandmother' lacks a noun to complete the idea. Add 'cooking' to specify what about the grandmother is meant, creating a complete noun phrase.

× Chicken soup and steamed rice, pickled.

✓ Chicken soup and steamed rice, and pickles.

The original is a fragment. Replace 'pickled' (an adjective) with the noun 'pickles' and add a conjunction to form a proper list of items.

× It tastes comfortable and reminded me of family gathering.

✓ It tasted comforting and reminded me of family gatherings.

Use the adjective 'comforting' to describe taste and change tense to past 'tasted' to match 'reminded'. Make 'family gathering' plural to indicate repeated or general occasions.

× I also enjoy sweet snacks like.

✓ I also enjoyed sweet snacks like cookies and cakes.

The original is incomplete. Provide example items to complete the sentence and match past tense 'enjoyed' if referring to childhood; otherwise use present 'enjoy' if current. Here 'enjoyed' fits the context of past preferences.

× Yes, Sir. Uh, one time I go into the commercial center with my family to celebrate for my, for my sister, uh, is on, on her birthday and I really enjoy that I because I can eat.

✓ Yes, sir. Once, I went to the shopping center with my family to celebrate my sister's birthday, and I really enjoyed it because I could eat there.

This sentence has tense and structure issues. Use past tense 'went' and 'enjoyed' for a past event. Use 'shopping center' or 'commercial center' consistently. Change 'celebrate for my sister is on her birthday' to 'celebrate my sister's birthday'. Replace awkward filler and correct pronouns and modal 'could' to express ability in the past.

× Yes, my favorite food Hut change in child's.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since childhood.

Correct vocabulary and tense: 'Hut change' is incorrect; use 'has changed' for present perfect to indicate change over time and 'since childhood' is the proper phrase.

× I used to love plant pasta or simple sandwiches, but now I prefer more complex dishes like grilled salmon with roasted vegetable because I appreciate creature flavor and healthy options.

✓ I used to love plain pasta or simple sandwiches, but now I prefer more complex dishes like grilled salmon with roasted vegetables because I appreciate richer flavors and healthier options.

Fix word choice: 'plant' -> 'plain', 'vegetable' -> plural 'vegetables'. 'Creature flavor' is incorrect; use 'richer flavors'. Match plural/singular and adjective forms for clarity and correctness.

× For example, at the UH try.

✓ For example, at the university cafeteria I tried new dishes.

The original is incomplete and unclear ('UH try'). Clarify the location and complete the verb phrase: use past tense 'tried' to match context and provide a complete example sentence.