Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure, correct vocabulary and fewer hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct key words (e.g. the dish name and ingredients) and avoid filler words like “uh” or repeating phrases. (English (Mongolia))

예시: My favourite food is a traditional Mongolian dish called buuz. It is a steamed dumpling filled with minced mutton and onion. Because it is very common during festivals and has a rich, savoury flavour, I eat it often with family.

제안: Your response starts well but ends abruptly and has many hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence about what you liked, then briefly explain why and finish with a linking phrase showing change (e.g. “but now…”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use precise words like “junk food” or “fast food.” (English (Mongolia))

예시: When I was young, I loved fast food such as burgers, hot dogs and pizza because they were tasty and easy to get. However, as I grew older I changed my diet and now I prefer healthier, home-cooked meals.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Start with a direct sentence answering the question (yes/no and brief reason), then give one specific example of seasonal food and use a linking word (e.g. “for example”). Avoid vague phrases like “more color footed.” (English (Mongolia))

예시: Yes. Because Mongolia has cold winters and hot summers, we eat different foods in each season. For example, in winter we eat hot, fatty dishes such as stews and preserved meat, while in summer we prefer fresh vegetables and dairy products.

제안: This answer is quite clear and well structured but could be improved with a stronger topic sentence and one concrete example of what you now eat. Use a linking word like “because” (you already did) and avoid repeating similar words (homemade/home-cooked). (English (Mongolia))

예시: Yes, it has changed. I used to eat a lot of fast food when I was a child, but now I prefer healthy, home-cooked meals such as grilled fish and steamed vegetables because they are cheaper and safer.

× One of my favorite food is the national, uh, food called ports and it is delicious and Mongolians use it to eat these foods, uh, for centuries.

✓ One of my favorite foods is the national food called buuz, and it is delicious; Mongolians have eaten it for centuries.

The noun 'food' should be plural after 'one of my favorite' (singular and plural issue). 'Ports' seems to be a mispronunciation; likely 'buuz' (a Mongolian dish) is intended. Use present perfect 'have eaten' to indicate an action continuing to the present (tense) and remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: say 'One of my favorite foods is the national food called buuz, and Mongolians have eaten it for centuries.'

× In this food, there is a minced meat with the difference.

✓ This dish contains minced meat with some variations.

The original sentence uses awkward structure and incorrect article use. Use verb 'contains' to describe what the dish has (present simple). 'Minced meat' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'With the difference' is unclear; 'with some variations' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'This dish contains minced meat with some variations.'

× When I was a child, I used to have a, a junk food, umm, which is a, a burger, hot dog, pizza, etcetera.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat junk food such as burgers, hot dogs and pizza.

Use 'eat' rather than 'have' for habitual past actions; 'used to eat' correctly indicates past habit (past tense issue). 'Junk food' is uncountable so do not use 'a'; list items should be plural: 'burgers, hot dogs'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I used to eat junk food such as burgers, hot dogs and pizza.'

× But now I have my attitude, umm, attitude have changed into the food and uh, now I prefer.

✓ But now my attitude toward food has changed, and now I prefer healthier options.

Subject-verb agreement: 'attitude' is singular so the verb should be 'has changed' not 'have changed'. The phrase 'changed into the food' is incorrect—use 'attitude toward food' and complete the sentence by stating what is preferred. Suggestion: 'But now my attitude toward food has changed, and I prefer healthier options.'

× Is as my country has a, uh, really harsh winter and hot summer, uh, we use it the to have food according to the variety.

✓ Because my country has very harsh winters and hot summers, we eat different foods according to the season.

Original has incorrect pronoun and article usage ('Is as', 'we use it the to have food'). Rephrase with 'Because' to show reason and use plural 'winters'/'summers' and 'according to the season' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Because my country has very harsh winters and hot summers, we eat different foods according to the season.'

× We tend to have more color footed, more color.

✓ We tend to eat more colorful foods.

Original contains unintelligible words 'color footed'. Use adjective 'colorful' to describe 'foods' (noun). Also use 'eat' rather than 'have' for food consumption. Suggestion: 'We tend to eat more colorful foods.'

× Yes indeed it has changed. I used to have a fast food when I was a child but now I'm more into healthy food or homemade home cooked food because it is cheaper and also safer.

✓ Yes, it has changed. I used to eat fast food when I was a child, but now I'm more into healthy, home-cooked food because it is cheaper and safer.

Use 'eat fast food' rather than 'have a fast food' for past habitual actions (past tense issue). 'Home-cooked' is the correct adjective form; 'homemade home cooked' is redundant. Keep present tense 'I'm' for current preference. Suggestion: 'I used to eat fast food when I was a child, but now I'm more into healthy, home-cooked food because it is cheaper and safer.'