Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確ですが、語の繰り返しや冗長表現があるため、より自然で流暢な表現に改善しましょう。具体的には“traditional traditional”の重複を避け、理由や味の特徴を一つか二つ加えて文を豊かにしてください。また、文の長さは3〜4文に収め、接続詞でつなぐとより効果的です。

예시: My favourite food is takoyaki. It's a traditional Japanese snack made of batter and octopus, and I love it because it's crispy on the outside and soft inside. I often eat it at festivals with a savory sauce and mayonnaise, which makes it even more delicious.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、文法や語順に誤りがあり、接続表現が不自然です。過去の習慣を表す“used to”と現在の状況の対比を明確にし、理由を一つ追加してください。否定表現は簡潔にして、冗長を避けましょう。

예시: I used to love cotton candy when I was a child because it was fun to eat at fairs. However, now I find it too sweet, so I rarely eat it anymore.

제안: 季節ごとの食べ物を挙げている点は良いですが、文法ミスと繰り返しがあり、説明が不自然です。季節ごとに短い理由や場面を付け加え、不要な繰り返しを避けて流れを良くしましょう。接続詞で列挙するとより論理的になります。

예시: Yes, I do. In winter I often eat sticky rice because it feels warming and filling. In autumn I enjoy sweet potatoes as a seasonal snack, and in summer I like kakigori, a shaved-ice dessert that tastes refreshing like ice cream.

제안: 意図は明確ですが、文法（"used to don't" や重複）が誤っており、語順も改善が必要です。まず主題文で答えを示し、その後に変化の理由と具体例（好きになった野菜）を一文か二文で述べてください。重複を避け、単語の大文字化に注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since I was a child. I used to dislike vegetables, but now I enjoy green peppers and eggplant because I learned to appreciate their different flavors when cooked.

× Takoyaki is Japanese traditional traditional food and that is so delicious.

✓ Takoyaki is a traditional Japanese food and it is very delicious.

'Japanese traditional traditional food' repeats 'traditional' and the adjective order is incorrect; in English the correct order is 'traditional Japanese food'. Also use the article 'a' for countable singular noun 'food' when speaking generally, and replace 'that is so delicious' with 'it is very delicious' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use correct adjective order (opinion before origin), include the article 'a', and use 'very' or 'really' instead of 'so' for more natural emphasis.

× I used to love cotton candy and but now it's too sweet and I can't eat now.

✓ I used to love cotton candy, but now it's too sweet and I can't eat it.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect connector placement: 'and but' is incorrect; choose either 'and' or 'but'—here 'but' contrasts past and present. Also 'can't eat now' needs an object 'it' to refer to cotton candy. Remove the extra 'now' or place it correctly. Suggestion: Use a single contrasting conjunction 'but' and include the pronoun 'it' as the object.

× Yes I think so. I eat sticky rice in winter and also I eat sweet potato in autumn and in summer I eat kakigori which is which is taste like ice cream.

✓ Yes, I think so. I eat sticky rice in winter and sweet potatoes in autumn, and in summer I eat kakigori, which tastes like shaved ice similar to ice cream.

Repetition 'which is which is' should be removed. Use present simple for habitual actions (correct). 'Sweet potato' as a general habit should be plural 'sweet potatoes'. 'Which tastes like' uses third-person singular verb 'tastes' to agree with 'kakigori' (singular). Also 'kakigori' is shaved ice; describing it as 'similar to ice cream' is clearer. Suggestion: Remove repetition, ensure subject-verb agreement ('tastes'), pluralize general foods, and give a concise comparison.

× Yes, I think so because I used to don't like vegetables but now I like I like green Peppers or eggplant and my taste has changed.

✓ Yes, I think so because I didn't use to like vegetables, but now I like green peppers and eggplant, and my tastes have changed.

'I used to don't like' is ungrammatical. The correct negative form is 'didn't use to' or 'didn't used to' (preferred 'didn't use to'). Also 'I like I like' repeats; remove duplication. 'Green Peppers' should be lowercased except proper nouns and pluralized 'peppers' is fine. 'Taste has changed' is better as 'tastes have changed' when referring to preferences in general, though 'my taste has changed' is also acceptable; plural 'tastes' emphasizes multiple preferences. Suggestion: Use correct negative past habitual form 'didn't use to', avoid repetition, lowercase common nouns, and choose singular or plural 'taste/tastes' consistently.