Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two supporting details connected by linking words. Improve accuracy: say "soy sauce" instead of "soybeans sauce", and fix subject-verb and pronoun errors (e.g., "I love this meal because it's nutritious and high in protein"; "another reason I like it is that it's quick to prepare").

예시: My favourite food is fettuccine with soy sauce and fried chicken breast. It is nutritious and high in protein, and moreover it’s quick and simple to prepare, which suits my busy schedule.

제안: Answer directly and use better tense and linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give a specific example and reason. Correct grammar: use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy (e.g., "we studied and played together" rather than repeating).

예시: When I was young, I mainly liked snacks. For example, my friends and I would buy chips or sweets after playing together, because snacks were a quick and convenient option before going home for a proper meal.

제안: Make the answer personal and concise, use linking words and specific details. Start with a direct statement about your own habits, then give an example using appropriate capitalization and word choice ("roast turkey"). Avoid repeating the word "festive" twice.

예시: Yes, I do. For instance, during Christmas I usually eat roast turkey and various desserts because the season is celebratory; at other times I stick to simpler, everyday meals.

제안: Use consistent tense and avoid contradictions and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence about whether it has changed. Use linking words to explain the contrast between preference and habit (e.g., "although"), and correct tense: "I still love chips" and "I am more mindful now."

예시: My favourite food hasn’t changed much — I still love chips, but I’m more health-conscious now. Although I still enjoy chips occasionally, I prioritize nutritious meals and try to eat them more often.

× My current favorites are fettuccine pasta tossed in soybeans sauce along with fried chicken breast.

✓ My current favorites are fettuccine tossed in soybean sauce and fried chicken breast.

Use present tense correctly (sentence is present but wording and noun forms are wrong). 'Fettuccine pasta' is redundant; 'fettuccine' suffices. 'Soybeans sauce' is incorrect plural noun used attributively; use the singular attributive noun 'soybean sauce'. Use 'and' rather than 'along with' for a simple list. These changes make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× I love this meal because it's full of nutrients and protein as well.

✓ I love this meal because it's full of nutrients and protein.

Pronoun use is acceptable but the redundant 'as well' after 'protein' is unnecessary. Removing it avoids awkward repetition and keeps the sentence concise.

× But another reason why I love them it's because it's very easy to make and prepare and it doesn't take a lot of time.

✓ Another reason I love it is that it is very easy to make and doesn't take a lot of time.

The original mixes plural pronoun 'them' with singular 'it' and has a comma splice and redundant phrasing. Use consistent singular reference 'it' for 'meal', insert 'is that' to introduce the reason, remove redundant 'and prepare', and change 'doesn't take a lot of time' for natural phrasing.

× My favorite kind of food when I was younger was really snacks as I used to spend a lot of time with my friends and neighbors as we studied together and played also together.

✓ My favorite kind of food when I was younger was snacks because I used to spend a lot of time with my friends and neighbors; we studied and played together.

Use past tense consistently ('was', 'used to'). 'Really snacks' is unnatural; use simply 'snacks'. 'Because' is better than 'as' for clarity. 'Played also together' is awkward; 'played together' is correct. Combine clauses with a semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity.

× The very easy route when we felt hunger was to buy a snack, so that was my favorite meal until we go home and eat a proper meal.

✓ The easiest option when we felt hungry was to buy a snack, so that was my favorite meal until we went home and ate a proper meal.

Use comparative/superlative correctly: 'the easiest option' instead of 'very easy route'. Use adjective 'hungry' not noun 'hunger' after 'felt'. Keep past tense consistent: 'felt', 'went', 'ate' instead of 'go' and 'eat'.

× Yes, people usually eat different food at different times of the year.

✓ Yes, people usually eat different foods at different times of the year.

'Different' should modify the plural noun 'foods' or use 'different food' with an article/context. Here 'foods' is more natural when speaking generally. This fixes number agreement and adjective-noun collocation.

× For example, at Christmas time, people prefer to eat roasted Turkey and a lot of sweets as well, because that time is very festive and the food gets festive as well.

✓ For example, at Christmas time, people prefer to eat roasted turkey and a lot of sweets because that time is very festive and the food is festive as well.

Do not capitalize 'turkey' in this context. Remove redundant 'as well' and fix verb choice 'is' instead of 'gets' for natural description. Keep articles and capitalization consistent.

× But at other times of the year, we will eat just regular meals.

✓ But at other times of the year, we eat just regular meals.

Sentence refers to habitual action, so use present simple 'eat' rather than future 'will eat'. Use present tense for general habits.

× It hasn't changed much, I still loved chips a lot but I am mindful now of the food I'm eating as I'm getting older.

✓ It hasn't changed much; I still love chips a lot, but I am mindful now of the food I'm eating as I get older.

Maintain consistent tense: 'hasn't changed' (present perfect) pairs with present 'I still love' not past 'loved'. Use 'as I get older' for general ongoing process rather than 'as I'm getting older' (both acceptable, but simpler present is cleaner). Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× Although I prefer healthy meals at this time and age, but I still prefer chips as my favorite kind of snacks and food as well.

✓ Although I prefer healthy meals at this stage of life, I still prefer chips as my favorite snack.

Do not use both 'although' and 'but' together (conjunction error). 'At this time and age' is awkward; 'at this stage of life' is natural. 'Favorite kind of snacks and food' is redundant and inconsistent in number; use singular 'favorite snack'. Remove 'as well'.

× But I make a priority for healthy food.

✓ But I prioritize healthy food.

Use the verb 'prioritize' for natural phrasing. 'Make a priority for' is awkward; 'prioritize' is concise and correct.