Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and well-structured. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give one or two specific supporting details (where you get it and why you like it). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: My favourite food is butter chicken. I especially like it from a popular chain called Baba Chicken because their sauce is rich and creamy and they use the right balance of spices. For example, their butter chicken tastes slightly sweet and mildly spicy, which I find comforting.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about your childhood preferences, then list specific examples with brief explanations. Avoid vague or incorrect words (e.g., 'char month' unclear). Use linking words such as 'also' or 'however' to organise information.

예시: When I was young, I mainly enjoyed traditional Indian dishes such as dal and roti because my family cooked them every day. I also liked spicy dishes like butter chicken. Later, I tried other foods like sushi, which I enjoyed for its fresh fish and simple flavours.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: state the pattern, then explain reasons with specific details. Correct grammar (use 'in summer' not 'in summers', avoid repeated words). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to show cause and effect.

예시: Yes, my diet changes with the seasons. In summer I usually eat more vegetarian meals because they feel lighter, but in winter I prefer more non-vegetarian dishes and red meat because they make me feel warmer. I also eat more eggs in winter for extra protein and energy.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then give a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your reason.

예시: No, my favourite food has not changed. My family and I have enjoyed butter chicken from Baba Chicken since I was a child because their recipe consistently tastes rich and comforting, so I still prefer it today.

× I'm quite foodie and whenever I get a chance to eat from outside I always try to have a butter chicken which is my favorite dish and from the place from where I always prefer to eat is a Baba chicken which is a famous Indian branch and you have a lot of branches in Canada too, so I.

✓ I'm quite a foodie, and whenever I get a chance to eat out, I always try to have butter chicken, which is my favorite dish. The place I prefer is Baba Chicken, a famous Indian chain that has many branches in Canada.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'foodie' is a noun that needs the article 'a'; 'eat from outside' is unnatural — use 'eat out'; 'a butter chicken' is unnecessary — 'butter chicken' is uncountable in this context; 'from the place from where I always prefer to eat is a Baba chicken' is ungrammatical and awkwardly ordered — reorder to 'The place I prefer is...'; 'branch' is the wrong word for a restaurant chain — use 'chain'. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'foodie', use 'eat out', remove unnecessary articles before uncountable dish names, reorder clauses for clarity, and use 'chain' for restaurant groups.

× Since my childhood, I'm eating Indian food like Dal roti and the foods that have a lot of spices in it like butter chicken that I stored previously.

✓ Since my childhood, I have been eating Indian food like dal roti and other spicy dishes such as butter chicken.

The phrase 'Since my childhood' requires a present perfect continuous tense ('have been eating') to indicate an action continuing from the past to the present. 'I'm eating' is incorrect here. 'Foods that have a lot of spices in it' has number and pronoun agreement issues — use 'other spicy dishes'. 'Stored previously' makes no sense for a dish; remove it. Suggest using present perfect continuous and concise noun phrases.

× And I also try a lot of the things like sushi, the Japanese fish and also I like to have a char month.

✓ I have also tried many things like sushi, which is Japanese, and I also like char kway teow.

'try a lot of the things' is unnatural; use 'tried many things'. 'the Japanese fish' is incorrect and vague — sushi is Japanese cuisine, not simply 'fish'. 'char month' appears to be a mispronunciation or misspelling; I suggested 'char kway teow' (a common dish) but confirm the intended dish. Suggest using clear nouns and correct dish names.

× Yes I try to have a different food like in summers I used to be vegetarian but when the times of winter I prefer to eat more non veg because because of the it's too cold outside and the red meat helps me to like get heaty from inside.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. In summer I tend to be vegetarian, but in winter I prefer to eat more non-vegetarian food because it is cold outside and red meat helps me feel warmer. I also try to eat a lot of eggs.

Mix of tenses and nonstandard expressions: 'I try to have a different food' should be 'I eat different foods'. 'In summers I used to be vegetarian' suggests a past habit; use 'in summer I tend to be vegetarian' for a seasonal habit. 'When the times of winter' is incorrect — use 'in winter'. 'because because of the it's' has grammatical errors; simplify to 'because it is cold outside'. 'get heaty from inside' is nonstandard; use 'feel warmer'. Also add a clear final clause for eggs.

× Moreover I also try to have a lot of eggs in.

✓ Moreover, I also try to eat a lot of eggs.

The verb phrase 'try to have a lot of eggs in' is ungrammatical and 'have in' is not appropriate. Use 'try to eat' with direct object 'eggs'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper verb choice for consumption.

× My answer is straightly no because since my childhood me and my family eating up butter chicken from Baba chicken and uh that's the famous store and I think whoever will try that food, it will be good for that person.

✓ My answer is simply no, because since my childhood my family and I have been eating butter chicken from Baba Chicken. It's a famous restaurant, and I think anyone who tries that food will like it.

Several pronoun and word order issues: 'straightly' is incorrect — use 'simply'. 'me and my family' is informal and should be 'my family and I'. 'eating up butter chicken' is incorrect — use present perfect continuous 'have been eating'. 'Baba chicken' should be 'Baba Chicken' and 'store' is better as 'restaurant'. 'whoever will try that food, it will be good for that person' is awkward; use 'anyone who tries that food will like it.' Suggestions: correct pronoun order, use proper verb tense, and choose appropriate nouns.

× And since childhood I'm eating that I never feel any change in in the taste.

✓ And since childhood I have been eating it; I have never noticed any change in the taste.

Again, 'since childhood' requires present perfect continuous ('have been eating') or present perfect for the state. 'I'm eating that' is incorrect. Also 'I never feel any change in in the taste' has repetition and tense issues — use 'I have never noticed any change in the taste.' Suggestions: use present perfect/continuous with 'since', remove repeated words, and use 'notice' for changes in taste.