Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragments and repeat words (e.g., “ice cream” and “icing”).

예시: My favourite food is ice cream. I especially enjoy fruit flavours like watermelon and mango, because they taste refreshing. For example, in summer I often have one after lunch to cool down.

제안: Use past tense consistently and a clear structure: topic sentence in past, then reasons with linking words. Be specific about examples rather than vague phrases.

예시: When I was young, I liked almost every kind of food except vegetables. I found vegetables unpleasant, so I preferred sweet treats and spicy snacks, such as candy and spicy noodles.

제안: Answer directly and use correct pronouns. Provide a clear contrast with linking words (e.g., "in summer... whereas in winter...") and limit to 2–3 sentences with specific examples.

예시: Yes, I do. In summer I often eat cold foods such as watermelon and ice cream to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm.

제안: Use past and present contrast clearly and correct grammar (avoid repetition like “are are” and awkward phrases like “icing ice creams”). Give a reason for the change with one specific example and linking word (e.g., "however","since").

예시: Yes, it has changed. At first I preferred noodles because they reminded me of Chinese culture; however, since trying ice cream I now enjoy it more because it tastes refreshing and comes in many flavours.

× I think it's ice cream.

✓ I think it's ice cream.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. (Included only if considered but matches no error.)

× I eat all kinds of ice creams such as watermelon flavors, mango flavors, strawberry flavors, and icing.

✓ I eat all kinds of ice cream, such as watermelon, mango, and strawberry flavors, and topping.

Use uncountable form 'ice cream' after 'kinds of' (singular uncountable); 'flavors' can follow specific flavors; 'icing' is not a typical ice cream topping term here so use 'topping' or 'ice cream topping'. Also remove repeated 'flavors' after each item for conciseness. Suggestion: say 'all kinds of ice cream, such as watermelon, mango, and strawberry flavors.'

× In summer.

✓ In summer, I especially like it.

Fragment lacking a verb and subject. Combine with surrounding sentence or complete it. Suggestion: attach to previous sentence: 'In summer, I especially like it.'

× If I have an ice cream, it makes me feel very cool.

✓ If I have an ice cream, it makes me feel very cool.

Sentence is grammatical; present simple correctly used for general truth. No change needed.

× I like all kinds of food besides vegetables because when I was young I think vegetables were very yucky and I liked all kind of flavors such as sweet or spicy.

✓ I liked all kinds of food except vegetables because when I was young I thought vegetables were very yucky, and I liked all kinds of flavors, such as sweet or spicy.

Tense sequence: question asked about past, so use past tense 'liked' and 'thought' not present 'like'/'think'. Use 'except' rather than 'besides' for exclusion and plural 'kinds'. Also plural 'all kinds of flavors'. Suggestions: keep past tense throughout when talking about childhood and use plural forms where needed.

× Of course he is.

✓ Of course I do.

Student responded about their own eating habits; 'he' is incorrect pronoun. Also verb 'do' matches question 'Do you eat...' so use 'I do'.

× In summer I eat some cold foods and in winter I eat some warm food, such as I eat watermelons and maybe ice creams in the hot summer, but in winter I don't eat them because it's very cold.

✓ In summer I eat cold foods, and in winter I eat warm food. For example, I eat watermelons and maybe ice cream in the hot summer, but in winter I don't because it's very cold.

Use parallel structure and consistent countability: 'cold foods' and 'warm food' (or 'warm foods')—prefer plural for consistency. 'Ice creams' should be 'ice cream' (uncountable). Remove repeated 'I eat' and use 'for example' to introduce examples. Also 'don't eat them' can be shortened to 'don't' when context is clear.

× Yes, I like the noodle at first because I thought noodles are are a symbol of China's cultures.

✓ Yes. At first I liked noodles because I thought noodles were a symbol of Chinese culture.

When referring to first liking in the past, use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Use plural 'noodles' or 'noodle' consistently; 'noodles' is standard. Use past 'were' for 'thought'. Use 'Chinese culture' (singular) instead of 'China's cultures'. Remove duplicate 'are'.

× But when I first ate the ice creams, icing ice creams is better than noodles.

✓ But when I first ate ice cream, ice cream was better than noodles.

Use uncountable 'ice cream' not 'ice creams'. Maintain past tense 'was' to match 'when I first ate'. 'Icing ice creams' is incorrect phrasing; simplify to 'ice cream'. Suggestions: keep consistent noun forms and past tense when describing past preferences.