Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, pluralization), remove fillers and repetitions, and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief reason. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: My favourite food is seafood because I grew up in a coastal city and we always had fresh prawns and shellfish. For example, my family often cooked grilled prawns with garlic, which I still enjoy because of the fresh flavour.

제안: Correct tense usage and verb forms, avoid redundancy, and make the structure clear: a topic sentence in past tense, then one specific example and a reason. Use linking words such as "for example" and "because."

예시: When I was younger, I preferred simple, sweet foods. For example, I ate cakes and candies during holidays because my parents rewarded me for finishing my homework.

제안: Avoid small errors and repetition ("in summer" repeated, "ice ice tea"). Keep answers concise and coherent: state the general pattern, then give specific contrasting examples using linking words like "while" or "in contrast."

예시: Yes, I change my diet by season. For example, in winter I prefer hot soups and noodles to stay warm, while in summer I choose light dishes like salads and iced tea.

제안: Clarify meaning, fix grammar and word choice, remove filler phrases, and present a clear contrast between past and present. Use past tense for childhood habits and present tense for current preferences, with one reason and one or two examples.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I ate many sweets and snacks, but now I prefer healthier options like salads and seafood because I learned more about nutrition.

× Well, my favorite foods is seafood because I grew up at the coastal city and we used to eat a lot of fresh seafood, for example, prawn or uh, shellfish. I, I like it too much.

✓ Well, my favorite food is seafood because I grew up in a coastal city and we used to eat a lot of fresh seafood, for example, prawns or shellfish. I like it very much.

Errors: 'foods' should be singular 'food' when referring to a general favorite; verb 'is' agrees with singular 'food'. 'At the coastal city' incorrect preposition and article; use 'in a coastal city'. 'Prawn' should be plural 'prawns' in a list with 'shellfish'. 'I, I like it too much' is awkward; use 'I like it very much'. Suggestions: use consistent singular/plural for general nouns, correct preposition 'in', include indefinite article 'a', pluralize countable items when listing multiple examples, and replace informal 'too much' with 'very much'.

× When I was younger, I would like to choose simple and sweet food. For example, I ate a lot of cakes and candies during the holiday and it's also was a reward for me after I finish my homework.

✓ When I was younger, I liked to choose simple and sweet foods. For example, I ate a lot of cakes and candies during the holidays and they were also a reward for me after I finished my homework.

Errors: 'would like to choose' mixes present conditional with past context; use past 'liked to choose'. 'Food' should be plural 'foods' or 'food' can remain uncountable, but parallel with 'cakes and candies' use 'foods'. 'During the holiday' should be plural 'holidays' for recurring periods. 'It's also was' is an incorrect combination of tenses; use simple past 'they were also'. 'After I finish' should be past 'after I finished'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently for past descriptions, match plural nouns for repeated events, and ensure pronoun agreement ('they' for cakes and candies).

× Yes, I usually change my diet with the seasons in summer. In winter I prefer hot food such as soups or noodles because they can keep me warm, while in summer I prefer light food such as salad or ice ice tea.

✓ Yes, I usually change my diet with the seasons. In winter I prefer hot foods such as soups or noodles because they keep me warm, while in summer I prefer light foods such as salads or iced tea.

Errors: 'change my diet with the seasons in summer' is redundant and unclear; 'with the seasons' alone suffices. 'Hot food' and 'light food' should be plural 'hot foods'/'light foods' when giving examples. 'They can keep me warm' is acceptable but simpler 'they keep me warm' is better. 'Ice ice tea' is incorrect; use 'iced tea'. Suggestions: remove redundant time phrase, pluralize countable food examples, and use correct term 'iced tea'.

× Yes, when I was a child I used to eat a lot with and the candies but are as I grew up and I learned a lot of nutritions so now I change to healthy options like salad or seafoods or really healthy and easy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to eat a lot of candy and sweets, but as I grew up and learned about nutrition I switched to healthier options like salads or seafood because they are healthy and easy to prepare.

Errors: Sentence is ungrammatical and disorganized: 'eat a lot with and the candies' is garbled; use 'eat a lot of candy and sweets'. 'But are as I grew up' incorrect connector; use 'but as I grew up'. 'I learned a lot of nutritions' should be 'learned about nutrition' (nutrition is uncountable). 'Now I change to healthy options' tense and verb choice wrong; use past change 'I switched to healthier options' or present 'I now choose healthier options'. 'Seafoods' should be 'seafood'. Suggestions: reorder sentence for clarity, use correct nouns ('candy', 'nutrition', 'seafood'), maintain tense consistency, and use comparative 'healthier' when contrasting past and present.