Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also correct pronunciation errors and word order (e.g., 'my traditional food' → 'a traditional Cambodian dish').

예시: My favourite food is fish amok, a traditional Cambodian dish. It is made with coconut milk and curry paste, so it tastes creamy and spicy. Because it uses fresh herbs and fish from local rivers, I find it both comforting and flavorful.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary, reduce repetition, and add a linking word to explain reason. Fix word choice mistakes (e.g., 'crust' not 'crush', 'rich, meaty flavour' rather than 'rich play flavor').

예시: When I was young, I liked fast food, especially pizza. For example, I loved pizza topped with melted cheese and pepperoni because the crispy crust and rich, meaty flavour made it very satisfying.

제안: Be specific and avoid fillers. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide precise timing (e.g., 'in the mango season from May to July'). Correct awkward phrases like 'available day' to 'when mangoes are in season.'

예시: Yes, I do. For example, mango salad is very popular in Cambodia and I usually eat it during mango season, from May to July. Because the fruit is freshest then, the salad tastes especially refreshing.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one concise reason using correct grammar and linking words. Remove fillers and correct tense/form (e.g., 'my tastes have changed as I’ve gotten older').

예시: Yes. As a child I preferred pizza, but now I prefer traditional dishes like fish amok. As I’ve gotten older, I’ve become more interested in local flavours and healthier ingredients, so my tastes have changed.

× I do have several favorite food, but the most favorite one, but my most favorite one is the uh, I'm a fish amok.

✓ I do have several favorite foods, but my most favorite one is fish amok.

Use plural 'foods' after 'several' and remove unnecessary articles and fillers. 'The most favorite one' is redundant; use 'my most favorite one' or better 'my favorite'. Also remove 'I'm a' which is incorrect before a dish name. Suggestion: say 'my most favorite one is fish amok.'

× We are the traditional my food.

✓ It is my traditional food.

Wrong word order and pronoun. 'We are the traditional my food' is ungrammatical. Use 'It is my traditional food' to identify the dish as belonging to the speaker's culture. 'It' refers to the dish; 'my traditional food' is correct prepositional/possessive structure.

× It is very tasty and have a lot of spice inside.

✓ It is very tasty and has a lot of spice in it.

Subject-verb agreement and adjective/adverb placement: 'It' requires verb 'has' not 'have'. 'Inside' is awkward; 'in it' or 'inside it' is better. Suggestion: 'It is very tasty and has a lot of spice in it.'

× When I was young I like fast food, especially pizza.

✓ When I was young I liked fast food, especially pizza.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was young' refers to past time, so verb should be past 'liked' not present 'like'. Use consistent past tense for past time frames.

× I enjoy pizza top with melted cheese and pepperoni because the the crispy crush and rich play flavor makes them very satisfying.

✓ I enjoy pizza topped with melted cheese and pepperoni because the crispy crust and rich, savory flavor make it very satisfying.

Use past participle 'topped' (verb+ -ed) to describe the pizza. Many errors: 'crush' should be 'crust'; 'rich play flavor' likely 'rich, savory flavor'. Subject-verb agreement: 'flavor make it' -> singular 'flavor makes it' or better rephrase to plural elements 'crust and flavor make it'. Also 'them' is incorrect pronoun for 'pizza' (singular). Suggestion: 'I enjoy pizza topped with melted cheese and pepperoni because the crispy crust and rich, savory flavor make it very satisfying.'

× For example, uh, mango salad shower mango salad is very popular in Cambodia.

✓ For example, mango salad is very popular in Cambodia.

Remove filler words 'uh' and incorrect duplication 'shower mango salad'. Keep simple: 'mango salad is very popular in Cambodia.' Avoid extra words.

× It's very refreshing and you can only have it in uh, uh, several months during the year.

✓ It's very refreshing and you can only have it during certain months of the year.

Use 'during certain months of the year' rather than 'in several months during the year'. Also remove fillers 'uh'. 'Only have it' is acceptable but clearer with 'only have it during certain months of the year.'

× So I eat this one, uh, according to the available day.

✓ So I eat this according to availability.

Awkward phrasing and subject-verb agreement: 'according to the available day' is incorrect. Better: 'according to availability' or 'when it is available.' Remove filler 'uh' and extra 'one'.

× Yes, uh, like I mentioned earlier that uh, when I was a child, I like to eat pizza, but now I like traditional food, which is a fish amok.

✓ Yes, like I mentioned earlier, when I was a child I liked to eat pizza, but now I like traditional food, which is fish amok.

Maintain past tense 'liked' for childhood preference. Remove extraneous commas and fillers 'uh'. Also 'a fish amok' is wrong article use; 'fish amok' (name of dish) does not need 'a'.

× And it's actually, uh, because when I getting older, umm, my taste preference has been changed dramatically.

✓ And it's actually because, as I got older, my taste preferences changed dramatically.

Use past time 'as I got older' not 'when I getting older'. 'Getting' is present participle—incorrect here. Also 'has been changed' is passive and unnatural; use active past 'changed'. 'Taste preferences' plural is more natural. Remove filler 'uh' and 'umm'. Suggestion: 'As I got older, my taste preferences changed dramatically.'