Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler sounds (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas. Also correct minor grammar ("the pork one" -> "the pork broth/variety").

예시: My favourite foods are sushi rolls and soy ramen. I especially enjoy soy ramen because the broth is light yet flavorful, and I usually choose the pork variety for its rich taste. In addition, sushi provides a nice contrast with its fresh texture.

제안: Be specific and accurate with vocabulary ("Mormons" and "Chad pates" are unclear; likely "momos" and "chaat/pakoras"). Provide one clear example and explain why you liked it, using linking words for coherence. Reduce repetition like "used to".

예시: When I was young I often ate momos and street snacks such as pani puri and chaat. I loved them because they were quick to eat after school and full of spicy, tangy flavours, so I would sometimes argue with my parents to buy them on the way home.

제안: Avoid fillers and tighten sentences. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words (e.g., "in winter," "in summer") and give specific examples and brief reasons for seasonal changes.

예시: Yes, I do. In winter we often eat soupy dishes like Tibetan noodles because they are warming and comforting. In summer I prefer cold treats such as ice cream and chilled drinks to stay refreshed.

제안: Make the contrast clearer and avoid awkward phrasing. Start with a direct statement about change, then explain briefly why you changed and give specifics. Use linking words like "but" and "now" correctly.

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved momos and burgers, but now I prefer healthier options. For example, I usually eat boiled chicken and eggs because they help me stay fit and provide good protein.

× Currently my favorite food is sushi rolls and ramen.

✓ Currently, my favorite foods are sushi rolls and ramen.

The original uses singular 'food' to refer to multiple items. Change to plural 'foods' and use plural verb 'are' for subject-verb agreement. Also add a comma after 'Currently' for clarity.

× I really love uh the soy ramen, which is very simple and looks delicious at the same time.

✓ I really love the soy ramen, which is very simple and looks delicious.

Remove filler 'uh' and the redundant phrase 'at the same time' to make the sentence concise and natural. The tense and clause structure are otherwise fine.

× I I prefer the pork one.

✓ I prefer the pork one.

Duplicate 'I' is a speaking disfluency; remove the extra pronoun. The pronoun 'one' correctly refers to the pork option.

× I remember a lot of foods that I used to love when I was a child.

✓ I remember many foods that I used to love when I was a child.

'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate for written correction. The tense 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual actions.

× For example, I used to eat Mormons most of the time and also some local Pani Puri and Chad pates.

✓ For example, I used to eat momos most of the time and also some local pani puri and chaat paan.

'Mormons' is a wrong word; the intended food is 'momos'. Use lowercase for common nouns and correct names: 'pani puri' and 'chaat' or 'paan' depending on dish. Choose consistent spelling for clarity.

× I always used to fight with my parents to eat while coming back from school.

✓ I always used to argue with my parents about what to eat on the way home from school.

'Fight with my parents to eat while coming back from school' is awkward. Replace 'fight' with 'argue' and rephrase to 'about what to eat on the way home' for natural English and clear meaning.

× Yes. This is what I do most of the time uh, specially during the winter uh, we eat lot of uh, soupy items uh like uh, the Tibetan noodles and other kind of foods.

✓ Yes. This is what I do most of the time, especially during the winter; we eat a lot of soupy dishes, like Tibetan noodles and other kinds of food.

Replace 'specially' with 'especially'. Use 'a lot of' and 'soupy dishes' instead of 'soupy items'. Use plural 'kinds of food'. Remove filler 'uh' and add punctuation for clarity.

× And in summer I, I usually eat ice cream and cold drinks yes.

✓ And in summer I usually eat ice cream and drink cold beverages.

Remove duplicate 'I' and 'yes' at end. 'Cold beverages' is more natural than 'cold drinks' here; keep consistent verb forms 'eat' and 'drink'.

× As a child my favorite food was momo and burger, but these days I've started a healthy habit of eating healthy foods only, so this currently my favorite.

✓ As a child my favorite foods were momos and burgers, but these days I've adopted the habit of eating only healthy foods, so my current favorites are different.

Use plural 'foods were momos and burgers' and correct verb 'I've adopted the habit'. Rephrase 'so this currently my favorite' to a complete clause 'so my current favorites are different.' Maintain tense consistency.

× This is boiled chicken and egg.

✓ My current favorites are boiled chicken and eggs.

'This is' is unclear; use 'My current favorites are' with plural 'eggs' to match 'chicken' as a general food category. Ensure plural agreement and clarity.