Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "my favorite food is pasta" not "the pasta").

예시: My favorite food is pasta. I grew up eating it because it’s a staple in my country, and my family often cooks it when we gather. For example, last weekend we made spaghetti with tomato sauce and shared it while chatting.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and a reason, and remove repetition. Use a past vs present contrast with a linking word (e.g., "but" or "however"). Correct grammar: "When I was young" and avoid doubling words.

예시: When I was young, I used to love fried potatoes because they were cheap and easy to buy near my home. However, I don’t like them now because I prefer healthier options like salads or grilled vegetables.

제안: Remove filler words and give one or two specific seasonal examples. Use linking words such as "for example" or "in summer" to organize the answer and be specific about foods and seasons.

예시: Yes. My country has four seasons, so people eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter we enjoy hearty stews and in summer we eat fresh salads and fruit like watermelon.

제안: Answer directly and clearly with a concise contrast between past and present. Fix grammar ("it has changed", "I haven’t eaten them for about eleven years"). Provide a reason why your preference changed with a linking word such as "because" or "so".

예시: Yes, my favorite food has changed. As a child I ate fried potatoes a lot, but I haven’t eaten them for about eleven years because I found them too heavy and I now prefer lighter, healthier dishes like grilled fish and vegetables.

× My favorite food is the pasta and pasta is very popular in my country and also in my family and we always try to cook it and also when we have time to gather together we make pasta and eat eat together.

✓ My favorite food is pasta. Pasta is very popular in my country and in my family, and we always try to cook it. When we have time to gather, we make pasta and eat together.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before a general food category ('pasta') so remove it. Also the original sentence is a run-on; split into shorter sentences and remove duplicate word 'eat'. Use commas to join related clauses. This makes the meaning clearer and grammatically correct.

× When I was a young I used to eat fried potatoes but I don't like it now and fried potatoes because it was very easy to find near my my family.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat fried potatoes, but I don't like them now because they were very easy to find near my family.

Do not use 'a' before 'young' when referring to age; use 'young'. 'Fried potatoes' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'them' instead of 'it'. Also correct tense agreement: 'were' refers to past availability. Remove duplicated 'my'. Use commas to separate clauses.

× Uh, yes. Uh, because in my country there are Four Seasons and also, uh, there are many, uh, uh, type of different foods according to the seasons. So I like to try, uh, in every season, different type of, uh, foods.

✓ Yes. In my country there are four seasons, and there are many different types of food according to the season. I like to try different foods in every season.

Capitalization error: 'Four Seasons' should be 'four seasons' when speaking generally. Use plural 'types' and 'foods' for countable nouns. 'Type of different foods' is awkward; reorder to 'different types of food'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant commas. Maintain singular 'season' in the phrase 'according to the season' or use plural consistently.

× Yes Sir, it has to changed. When I was a child I used to eat fried potatoes and after maybe 11 years I don't. I've never tasted because it was for me a little bit hard.

✓ Yes, sir, it has changed. When I was a child I used to eat fried potatoes, but after about eleven years I stopped. I never liked them because they were a bit hard for me.

'Has to changed' is incorrect; use present perfect 'has changed' or simple past 'changed'. 'After maybe 11 years I don't' is ungrammatical; use 'after about eleven years I stopped' to indicate cessation. 'I've never tasted' is wrong in context; the intended meaning is dislike or texture issue, so 'I never liked them' fits. Use plural pronoun 'them' for 'fried potatoes'. Spell out numbers in formal speech and use 'a bit' instead of 'a little bit' for conciseness.