Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Use one or two concise supporting details and a linking phrase to make it coherent. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'food' repeated) and aim for varied vocabulary like 'seafood' and 'plant-based' to sound more natural.

예시: I don't have a single favourite food; I prefer a healthy, pescatarian diet. For example, I often eat grilled fish, shellfish and plenty of vegetables, because they are nutritious and versatile.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, explain the change with a reason, and finish the thought—avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast past and present and provide a specific example of a food you liked.

예시: When I was young I liked meat, especially roast beef and chicken. However, I became pescatarian for health and ethical reasons, so I no longer eat pork, beef or chicken.

제안: Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No) then expand with specific seasonal examples. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'in summer' to organize details. Mention one or two concrete seasonal items to make your answer more specific.

예시: Not really; I tend to eat similar foods year-round, such as oats and eggs. However, in summer I add more berries and salads, while in winter I prefer warm soups and roasted vegetables.

제안: Provide a complete, polished answer: state how it changed, give reasons and a brief example. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain the shift and include a specific current favourite or habit.

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved sweets and chips because of their taste, but now I focus on healthy options like baked salmon and steamed vegetables because I'm more health-conscious.

× But I used to like it and.

✓ But I used to like it.

The sentence ends with an extra conjunction 'and' without completing the clause, creating a sentence fragment. Remove the trailing 'and' to form a complete sentence or add the clause that follows 'and'. For example: 'But I used to like it.' or 'But I used to like it, and sometimes I miss it.'

× I tried to add vegetables and fruits every now and then in my meal.

✓ I try to add vegetables and fruits to my meals every now and then.

The original uses 'tried' (past) while the context refers to habitual present behavior; present simple 'try' is appropriate. Also use 'to my meals' instead of 'in my meal' for natural collocation and plural 'meals' for repeated actions. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and correct preposition and plural form.

× I do like to eat food like fish, seafood, eggs, and other healthy foods like vegetables.

✓ I do like to eat foods such as fish, seafood, eggs, and vegetables.

Use 'such as' (or 'like') to give examples; avoid repeating 'like'. Also 'foods' or simply list items is more natural than 'food like fish'. 'Vegetables' does not need 'healthy' repeated. This corrects preposition/phrase choice and improves register.

× As far as I know I do eat the same food every time, like oats, chia seeds, any proteins like eggs.

✓ As far as I know, I eat the same foods most of the time, such as oats, chia seeds, and proteins like eggs.

Use a comma after the introductory phrase. 'Eat the same foods most of the time' is more natural than 'every time'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples, and include conjunctions for lists. 'Any proteins' is unnatural; use 'proteins like eggs'.

× But now that I'm an adult, I am very conscious with my health and I like to keep my my.

✓ But now that I'm an adult, I am very conscious of my health and I like to take care of myself.

'Conscious with my health' is incorrect; use 'conscious of my health'. The phrase 'keep my my' is incomplete and likely a typo. 'Take care of myself' or 'maintain my health' completes the thought. This fixes preposition choice and sentence fragment/wording.

× I'm not particularly sure but I didn't really notice until you asked me.

✓ I'm not particularly sure, but I didn't really notice until you asked me.

Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. The tense contrast (present 'I'm not sure' and past 'didn't notice until you asked') is acceptable; punctuation improves readability.

× As far as I know I do eat the same food every time, like oats, chia seeds, any proteins like eggs.

✓ As far as I know, I eat the same foods most of the time, such as oats, chia seeds, and protein sources like eggs.

'Food' should be plural ('foods') when referring to different items repeated over time. 'Proteins' as a count noun is awkward; 'protein sources' or 'protein' is better. This correction fixes number agreement and noun choice.

× When I was a child I used to like chocolates, chips, anything unhealthy because I like the taste of it.

✓ When I was a child, I used to like chocolates, chips, and other unhealthy foods because I liked the taste of them.

Add a comma after the introductory clause. Use 'and' before the final item in a list. Match past tense ('used to' and 'liked') consistently. Use 'them' to refer back to plural 'foods' rather than singular 'it'.

× I don't really have a favorite food and I'm not certain why that is, but I do like to eat healthy food and since I'm a pescatarian, I like to eat food like fish, seafood, eggs, and other healthy foods like vegetables.

✓ I don't really have a favorite food and I'm not sure why, but I do like to eat healthy foods, and since I'm a pescatarian, I eat fish, seafood, eggs, and vegetables.

Though not strictly a third person singular error, this revision simplifies phrasing and uses consistent verb forms. 'I'm not certain why that is' is wordy; 'I'm not sure why' is natural. Use 'eat' rather than 'like to eat' repeatedly and plural 'foods'. This improves fluency and verb usage.