Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer, more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler (uh), correct word choice, and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep to 1–4 sentences and use a linking phrase if adding detail.

예시: My favourite food is noodles. I grew up eating them with my parents, and I love them for their rich broth and springy texture. However, as I approach 30, I now choose lighter, healthier noodle dishes.

제안: Lead with a clear statement about past preference, avoid repetition and fillers, and add one specific detail (when or why). Use a linking word to connect past and present preferences.

예시: When I was young, my favourite food was fried chicken, especially during celebrations. For example, my father often took me to KFC, and I loved the crispy coating and special family treats on those days.

제안: Be specific about festivals/occasions and give clearer examples of seasonal dishes. Remove hesitation, use linking words (for instance, however) and correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'simpler' -> 'simpler meals').

예시: Yes. For instance, during our main festival we usually prepare special meat and chicken dishes as signature meals. However, on normal days we eat simpler meals like rice with vegetables or soup.

제안: Start with a direct answer, explain one clear reason for the change, and give a concrete example of what you eat now. Avoid fillers and improve verb tense consistency.

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred very flavorful noodles, but now health matters more, so I choose dishes with more vegetables and lean protein, such as whole-grain noodles with grilled chicken and steamed vegetables.

× I love noodles so much in my life.

✓ I have loved noodles for most of my life.

The original mixes present simple with a time expression incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have loved' to show a continuous state from the past to present and 'for most of my life' is a natural time phrase.

× I used to have it in my, uh, childhood with my mum's, uh, dad.

✓ I used to eat them in my childhood with my mum and my dad.

The sentence misuses 'have' and pronouns. Use 'eat' for food, plural 'them' for noodles, and parallel 'my mum and my dad' instead of 'mum's, dad'. Also remove filler words.

× I realised that I fall in love with the stretch nurse and for the flavourful taste of the needles.

✓ I realized that I had fallen in love with the texture and the flavorful taste of the noodles.

Multiple problems: tense and word choice. 'Realised' should be followed by past perfect 'had fallen' to show prior state. 'Stretch nurse' and 'needles' are incorrect words; correct to 'texture' and 'noodles'. Use 'flavorful' and parallel structure 'texture and the flavorful taste.'

× But when I'm turning 30 years old.

✓ But when I turned 30 years old.

The fragment uses incorrect progressive future 'I'm turning' in an unfinished clause. Context refers to past change, so use simple past 'turned'. Also make it a full sentence.

× Like I said earlier, I used to love noodle and I'm still loving it, but when I was young, uh, I am, I'm growing up, fried chicken was my favorite, uh, especially during, during celebration, my father used to bring me to this restaurant called KFC, Kentucky Fried Chicken.

✓ Like I said earlier, I used to love noodles and I still love them, but when I was growing up, fried chicken was my favorite, especially during celebrations; my father used to take me to a restaurant called KFC (Kentucky Fried Chicken).

Change 'noodle' to plural 'noodles' and use 'them' as pronoun. Use simple present 'I still love' rather than 'I'm still loving'. Replace 'I am, I'm growing up' with 'when I was growing up'. Use plural 'celebrations', 'take me' instead of 'bring me' for going to a restaurant, and add article 'a restaurant'.

× Yes, of course, the food depends on the time or what is the celebration.

✓ Yes, of course, the food depends on the time of year or the type of celebration.

Use 'depends on' with correct noun phrases: 'time of year' and 'type of celebration' are natural collocations; original 'what is the celebration' is awkward.

× Uh, for instance, when we are having UH-83, the food is mainly made from the meat and chicken, which is uh, our signature dishes.

✓ For instance, when we are celebrating UH-83, the food is mainly made from meat and chicken, which are our signature dishes.

Use 'celebrating' rather than 'having' for events, remove 'the' before uncountable 'meat', use plural verb 'are' to match plural 'dishes'.

× But when we are having normal day, it can be more simpler.

✓ But on a normal day, it can be simpler.

Use preposition 'on' with 'a normal day'. 'More simpler' is incorrect (double comparative); use 'simpler'.

× Yes, during Chai, my favorite food was noodle and something that is that was more flavorful, more tastier.

✓ Yes, during Chai, my favorite food was noodles and other dishes that were more flavorful and tastier.

Use plural 'noodles'. Correct tense and structure: 'that were' for past reference. 'More flavorful, more tastier' is redundant; use 'more flavorful and tastier' or better just 'more flavorful'.

× But when I'm turning 30 years old, I believe that the health is more important.

✓ But when I turned 30 years old, I believed that health was more important.

Context refers to a past change, so use simple past 'turned' and 'believed', and drop the definite article before 'health'.

× So I started to, uh, be more picky about the food and choose the nutrients wisely.

✓ So I started to be more picky about food and to choose nutritious options wisely.

Simplify 'started to be' is acceptable but pair infinitives consistently: 'to be' and 'to choose'. Use 'food' without 'the' and 'nutritious options' rather than 'choose the nutrients' which is awkward.