Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure, make answer more concise and use linking words for coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid repetition. Add one specific example of a topping or recent occasion to make it more concrete.

예시: My favourite food is pizza because it tastes delicious and I can customize it with different toppings. For example, I often choose mushrooms, bell peppers and mozzarella. Also, I enjoy sharing pizza at birthday parties because it brings people together.

제안: Correct tense and grammar (use past simple and correct articles), combine short sentences with linking words, and add a brief specific memory for richness. Avoid informal fillers like 'so so much.'

예시: When I was young, I loved sweet foods such as candy, chocolate and ice cream. However, I couldn't eat them all the time because my parents only gave me sweets as a reward when I did well at school.

제안: Clarify unclear words (e.g., 'surfers' likely meant 'seasonal foods') and improve cohesion with linking words. Use correct prepositions and articles, and give one clear example per season with specific dish names or ingredients.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For instance, in winter I enjoy hot pot because it keeps me warm, while in summer I prefer cold noodles and salads because they feel refreshing.

제안: Make a clear contrast between past and present using correct grammar and cohesive devices (e.g., 'however', 'now'). Specify what you like about the new cuisines and give a concrete example of a dish you enjoy to add specificity.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I loved sweets like candy and ice cream; however, now I enjoy trying different cuisines such as Japanese and Italian food. For example, I often eat sushi and margherita pizza because I like their fresh flavours and variety.

× One of my favorite food is pizza because I think pizza is delicious and also I can customize my own pizza, like adding different toppings on that.

✓ One of my favorite foods is pizza because I think pizza is delicious and I can customize my own pizza, like adding different toppings to it.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' must be followed by a plural noun 'foods' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also 'addings toppings on that' is awkward; use the preposition 'to' and the pronoun 'it' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 11 and 12). Suggestion: use 'one of my favorite foods' and 'add different toppings to it'.

× And I enjoy eating pizza that in the birthday party we can share it together and share the happiness.

✓ I enjoy eating pizza at birthday parties because we can share it and share the happiness together.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and misplaced clause 'that in the birthday party' (Grammar Problem Type 26). Use a clear adverbial phrase 'at birthday parties' and combine clauses with 'because'. Also 'share it together' is redundant; 'share it' or 'share it together' is acceptable but better as 'share it and share the happiness together'.

× When I were young, definitely would be the sweet food like candies, chocolate and ice cream.

✓ When I was young, I definitely liked sweet foods like candies, chocolate and ice cream.

Use past tense 'was' with singular subject 'I' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also 'would be the sweet food' is ungrammatical; express past preference with 'liked' and use plural 'sweet foods' (Grammar Problem Type 1).

× I love them so so much.

✓ I loved them very much.

In a past context, use past tense 'loved' (Grammar Problem Type 5) and replace informal 'so so much' with 'very much' for standard grammar (Grammar Problem Type 14).

× However, I can't eat them all the time.

✓ However, I couldn't eat them all the time when I was young.

Tense mismatch: the context is past, so use past modal 'couldn't' rather than present 'can't' (Grammar Problem Type 5/6). Also clarify time frame 'when I was young' to match previous sentence (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× Like my parents would use this sweet foods to reward me with candies when I get a better result.

✓ For example, my parents would use these sweet foods to reward me with candies when I got better results.

Use plural demonstrative 'these' to match plural 'foods' (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 12). Match past tense 'got' to the past context (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also 'a better result' is better as 'better results' for generality (Grammar Problem Type 14).

× Definitely yes because there are surfers only have in several season and also have their own function.

✓ Definitely yes, because some foods are only available in certain seasons and each has its own function.

The original has unclear noun 'surfers' (typo) and incorrect structure. Replace with 'some foods are only available' and 'in certain seasons' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 26). Use plural agreement 'foods' (Grammar Problem Type 1) and correct prepositions 'in certain seasons' (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× For example in winter I'm addicted to the hot pot because it can keep me warm and also maybe in summer I will enjoy eating cold noodles and the salad because it's more fresh.

✓ For example, in winter I'm addicted to hot pot because it keeps me warm, and in summer I enjoy eating cold noodles and salads because they are fresher.

Use 'in winter' with comma for clause separation. 'Hot pot' doesn't need 'the'. Match present habitual 'I'm addicted' with 'it keeps' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use plural 'salads' and plural pronoun 'they are' and comparative 'fresher' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 25). Remove unnecessary 'maybe' and use consistent tense (Grammar Problem Type 6).

× Yes, sure, I was a child.

✓ Yes, when I was a child,

The response 'Yes, sure, I was a child.' is awkward and fragments; better to say 'Yes, when I was a child,' to introduce change since childhood (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 26). Keep past tense 'was'.

× I'm enthusiast at the sweet foods like candy, ice cream and chocolate.

✓ I was enthusiastic about sweet foods like candy, ice cream, and chocolate.

Use adjective 'enthusiastic' (not 'enthusiast') and correct preposition 'about' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 11). Use past tense 'was' to match time frame (Grammar Problem Type 5).

× However, for me at the moment, I would love to try different cuisine like Japanese food, Italian food because I think this food can let me know more.

✓ However, at the moment I would love to try different cuisines like Japanese and Italian food because I think these cuisines can help me learn more about food culture.

Use plural 'cuisines' when referring to multiple kinds (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'This food can let me know more' is ungrammatical; use 'these cuisines can help me learn more about food culture' for clear meaning (Grammar Problem Type 26). Maintain present conditional 'would love' but clarify purpose with 'help me learn'.