Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and avoid repetition. Mention when you eat it and why you like it (taste, health, family tradition) in one or two sentences.

예시: My favourite food is a traditional winter dish called saag with makki roti. I especially like it because it is hearty and nutritious — rich in iron and fiber — and my family cooks it every winter, so it reminds me of home.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid vague words and fix unclear terms (e.g., 'timber' seems wrong). Use linking words to contrast past and present tastes. Provide one specific reason or memory to enrich the response.

예시: When I was young, I mainly liked junk food such as burgers, noodles and momos because they were tasty and easy to get. I also enjoyed pastries like croissants from a local bakery near my school.

제안: Keep the answer concise and avoid repetition. Provide one clear reason and an example using linking words (for example, in summer/for instance). Mention a specific vegetable or fruit to be more concrete.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods in each season because seasonal produce is fresher and healthier. For example, I eat lots of leafy greens and cucumbers in summer, while in winter I enjoy saag with makki roti.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence that states the change, then give one or two specific reasons and finish the thought. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (however, now, because) and specify what nutrients or qualities you now prefer (e.g., healthy, high in protein).

예시: Yes, my preferences have changed. When I was a child I preferred spicy junk food like burgers and momos, but now I am more health-conscious and choose nutritious meals that are high in protein and fiber, such as saag and whole-grain roti.

× Uh, my favorite food is my traditional food, uh, the Saag and Makiti roti and it mostly, uh, made in winters, uh, and it is rich in fiber, protein and iron.

✓ Uh, my favorite food is my traditional dish, Saag and Makki roti, and it is mostly made in the winter; it is rich in fiber, protein, and iron.

The original sentence has article and word choice errors: 'the Saag and Makiti roti' is unnatural; use 'Saag and Makki roti' as a dish name and 'my traditional dish' is clearer. 'in winters' should be 'in the winter' for the typical seasonal expression. Also add the verb 'is' before 'mostly made' for correct structure and use commas and conjunctions properly. Suggestion: use definite article 'the' with 'winter' or say 'in winter' and include the verb 'is' to form a complete clause.

× And I always, I would say, or during the winter, I eat it every day.

✓ And I would say that during the winter I eat it every day.

This sentence mixes present habitual ('I always') with conditional/modal phrasing ('I would say') awkwardly. Use 'I would say that' to introduce the statement, then use present simple 'I eat' for habitual action. Remove redundant 'always' or place it consistently: 'I always eat it every day' is redundant.

× When I was young, I mostly liked the junk food, especially the burgers, noodles and momos, which is famous in my country.

✓ When I was young, I mostly liked junk food, especially burgers, noodles, and momos, which are famous in my country.

Plural noun agreement and tense: 'junk food' is uncountable so no 'the'; list items 'burgers, noodles, and momos' are plural so the relative clause must use 'are' not 'is'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which are famous'.

× Uh, I also like the croissant, the timber.

✓ Uh, I also like croissants and timbre (timber) or perhaps 'timber' if referring to a specific pastry name.

Using 'the' before items in a list is unnecessary. 'Croissant' should be plural if speaking generally: 'croissants'. 'Timber' may be a mistranslation; if it is a pastry name use the correct term or remove 'the'. Use parallel structure: 'croissants and timber.'

× Yes, I always try to eat seasonal foods because it is good for our health.

✓ Yes, I always try to eat seasonal foods because they are good for our health.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'seasonal foods'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Ensure agreement between pronoun and antecedent.

× Uh, like the green vegetables during the summers and the saag and the maki, the roti in the winters.

✓ For example, green vegetables in summer, and saag and makki roti in winter.

Article overuse and inconsistent singular/plural and seasonal expressions: use 'in summer' not 'during the summers'; remove 'the' before general food names. Use consistent noun forms: 'makki roti' (no extra comma). Keep parallel structure.

× So I always try to eat seasonal foods throughout the day throughout the year.

✓ So I always try to eat seasonal foods throughout the year.

Redundant phrase 'throughout the day throughout the year' is confusing and repetitive. Choose the intended meaning; likely 'throughout the year' is correct. Remove redundancy for clarity.

× Yes, I as I already told you, in my childhood and when I was young my favorite food was junk food because at that time I like I used to like spicy food, but now I'm more health conscious so I don't like the junk food.

✓ Yes, as I already told you, in my childhood my favorite foods were junk food because I used to like spicy food, but now I'm more health-conscious so I don't like junk food.

Several issues: redundancy ('I as I'), tense consistency (use past 'were' and 'used to like' for past habits), subject-verb agreement and article use ('junk food' uncountable so no 'the'), and punctuation to separate clauses. 'Health conscious' should be hyphenated as 'health-conscious' when used as an adjective.

× Nowadays I always try to eat the food which is rich in.

✓ Nowadays I always try to eat foods that are rich in nutrients.

The original sentence is incomplete: 'rich in' requires an object (what they are rich in). Use 'foods that are rich in nutrients' or specify 'fiber, protein, and iron'. Also use plural 'foods' and 'that are' for correct relative clause structure.