Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unnecessary personal health details that make your answer confusing and reduce coherence. Keep your answer within 3–4 sentences and correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “I’m not really interested in food” → “I’m not very interested in food”).

예시: My favourite food is salmon because it is low in calories and rich in omega-3 fatty acids. I often choose shrimp as well since it’s light and easy to prepare. For these reasons, I prefer seafood when I want something healthy.

제안: Use correct past tenses and clearer linking to show change over time. Begin with a clear past-topic sentence, then explain reasons for the change using linking words such as “but” and “so.” Be specific about what you changed to (examples of healthier foods) to add content and coherence. Correct grammar: “fried chicken” (uncountable), “it was bad for my health,” “I often got sick,” and “I started eating healthier food.”

예시: When I was about six or seven, I used to eat a lot of junk food, such as chips and fried chicken. However, I often got sick and realized this was bad for my health, so I started eating more fruits, vegetables, and grilled meat instead.

제안: Be specific about seasonal or situational changes and use correct time expressions. If you mention a past event (trip to Thailand), keep it short and relate it to seasonal eating patterns or personal habit changes using linking words like “for example” or “however.” Correct verb forms: “I was really into Thai food,” “after I got back,” “I usually ordered Thai takeaway.” Avoid off-topic comments about appetite unless they answer the question directly.

예시: It depends on the season and where I am. For example, when I went to Thailand last month I was really into Thai food and ordered Thai takeaway every day after I got back. In winter I tend to eat heartier foods like stews, while in summer I prefer salads and cold dishes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear statement about change, then give one or two concise reasons using past and present contrast. Use correct tense and avoid vague slang (“food lover” is fine but be more specific about types of food). Use linking words like “because” and “so” correctly. You can mention emotional eating briefly but focus on how your preferences changed (specific foods or eating habits).

예시: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I loved sweets and fast food because I ate more when I felt anxious, but now I prefer healthier options like grilled fish and vegetables, so I avoid overeating.

× Well, I shall no interest in food and sometimes I barely eat and I only eat one meal a day because I'm really afraid can wait if I have to choose one.

✓ Well, I have no interest in food and sometimes I barely eat; I only eat one meal a day because I'm really afraid I can't wait if I have to choose one.

Errors: incorrect modal/auxiliary 'shall' used instead of 'have' (possession/state), and missing auxiliary 'can't' for inability. Type 4 applies because modal/auxiliary verbs are used incorrectly. Suggestion: use 'have no interest' to express lack of interest and 'can't' to express inability; include necessary subject for the clause ('I can't wait').

× Maybe salmon or shrimps because you know, it's really low calories and good for your health.

✓ Maybe salmon or shrimp, because they are really low in calories and good for your health.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural/uncountable nouns; 'shrimp' is typically uncountable or plural without 's' in general reference. This is type 12 (pronoun) plus plural usage. Use 'they are' to agree with 'salmon or shrimp' and 'low in calories' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× When I was younger, like 6 or 7 years old, I would always eat a lot of junk food, like you know some chips or fried chickens.

✓ When I was younger, like 6 or 7 years old, I always ate a lot of junk food, like chips or fried chicken.

Using 'would' for habitual past is possible but here simple past 'always ate' is clearer. Also 'fried chickens' is incorrect; 'fried chicken' is uncountable. This is type 5 (past tense issue) and type 13 (adjective/adverb/noun form). Use simple past for past habits and correct noun forms.

× But then I realized it's really bad to your immune system and I would always got sick easily.

✓ But then I realized it's really bad for your immune system, and I would always get sick easily.

Use 'bad for' not 'bad to' (type 11). Also 'got' is wrong after 'would' — modal 'would' requires base form 'get' (type 5/past tense/modal). Change 'got' to 'get' to express habitual past condition.

× So then I gave up and I chose to eat some more healthier food.

✓ So then I gave up and I chose to eat healthier food.

'More healthier' is a double comparative; use either 'more healthy' or 'healthier' but not both. This is type 14 (quantifier/comparative error). Prefer 'healthier' or 'more healthy' depending on context; here 'healthier food' is natural.

× Well, I think it really depends actually.

✓ Well, I think it really depends, actually.

Minor punctuation to separate adverb 'actually' is recommended; tense is fine. This entry addresses clarity rather than a strict grammar type but relates to type 6 (present tense) to confirm correct present simple usage.

× I went to Thailand last month and I really into Thai food during that time and after I back to my hometown, I would always order some take away food about the Thai food every day.

✓ I went to Thailand last month and I was really into Thai food during that time, and after I came back to my hometown, I would always order Thai takeaway food every day.

Multiple errors: 'really into' requires past continuous/state 'was really into' (type 5). 'After I back' needs past 'came back' (type 5). 'Take away' should be 'takeaway' or 'takeaway food' and 'about the Thai food' is unnecessary; simplify to 'Thai takeaway food'. Maintain past habitual 'would always order'.

× But now I'm just, you know, lost the appetite.

✓ But now I'm just, you know, losing my appetite.

'Lost the appetite' is past; to express a current state use present continuous 'losing my appetite' or 'have lost my appetite' (type 6). Also include possessive 'my' with 'appetite'.

× I would like to say yes because, you know, people always change and when I was younger I used to be a food lover and when I feel anxiety or depressed I would always eat a lot of food.

✓ I would say yes because, you know, people always change. When I was younger I used to be a food lover, and when I felt anxious or depressed I would always eat a lot.

Tense consistency: 'when I feel anxiety or depressed' should be past 'when I felt anxious or depressed' to match 'when I was younger' (type 6/present vs past). Also use adjective 'anxious' rather than noun 'anxiety' after 'felt' (type 13). 'Eat a lot of food' can be shortened to 'eat a lot'.

× But that's not a good lifestyle so I give up.

✓ But that's not a good lifestyle, so I gave it up.

Mix of present and past: if referring to past decision use past 'gave it up' (type 26). Include object 'it' after 'gave up'. If speaker means currently giving up, say 'so I give it up' or 'so I have given it up'.