Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, grammatically correct and give specific descriptive details. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (article use, verb forms), avoid repetition and use linking words to add details (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Also describe flavors, ingredients, and why you like it to show richer content.

예시: My favourite food is nasi goreng, an Indonesian fried rice topped with a fried egg. I love it because the rice is savoury and slightly sweet from kecap manis, and it often includes shrimp and vegetables for extra texture. For example, I enjoy the contrast between the crispy egg edge and the soft rice, which reminds me of home.

제안: Correct grammar (use past tense consistently: 'when I was young') and remove hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence then support with specific reasons or memories using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'I was at owl at'.

예시: When I was young, I liked porridge the most. My mother cooked it every morning, especially when I was sick, because it was warm and easy to eat. I remember she would add a little sugar and banana, which made it comforting and helped me get better.

제안: Answer directly about seasonal eating rather than travel, or clearly link travel as an exception. Reduce hesitations and use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example'). Be specific about seasons, festivals, or seasonal ingredients and correct phrases (e.g., 'I'm looking forward to trying them').

예시: Generally I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer cold fruits like mango and in winter I enjoy hearty soups. However, when I travel I also try local dishes, such as mango sticky rice in Thailand and sushi in Japan, and I’m looking forward to trying them.

제안: Give a clear, concise response with correct tense usage and fewer fillers. Start with a direct sentence saying whether it changed, then explain reasons and frequency using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Be specific about when and why tastes changed.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I often ate burgers—maybe twice a week—because they were convenient and tasty. Now I prefer porridge because it is healthier and comforting, especially in the mornings.

× It would be nasi goreng with a egg.

✓ It would be nasi goreng with an egg.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound; 'egg' begins with a vowel sound so 'an' is required instead of 'a'. Replace 'a' with 'an' to correct the article usage.

× Nasi goreng is actually from Indonesia and I'm looking for it to try and actually I'm from Indonesia and I love nasi goreng.

✓ Nasi goreng is actually from Indonesia, and I want to try it because I love it; I am from Indonesia.

Sentence is repetitive and has awkward structure (redundant 'actually' and 'looking for it to try'). Combine ideas and use correct verb phrases: 'want to try it' not 'looking for it to try'. Also place 'I am from Indonesia' as a separate clause to improve clarity.

× It comes with egg on top and nasi goreng is like when you steam it with.

✓ It comes with an egg on top, and nasi goreng is often stir-fried with rice and seasonings.

Original ends abruptly and uses incorrect verb 'steam' for nasi goreng (which is fried). Also missing article before 'egg'. Use appropriate verb and complete the clause to convey meaning.

× When I were young, maybe porridge actually every day, I used to eat porridge every morning my mother cooked and especially when I was sick and I was at owl at and I always sick when I was young and my mother would cook it every day, every morning for me.

✓ When I was young, I ate porridge every day; my mother used to cook it for me every morning, especially when I was sick.

Use 'was' not 'were' for first person singular. The sentence is run-on and repetitive; simplify and use past tense consistently: 'ate' and 'used to cook'. Remove unclear phrase 'I was at owl at' which seems incorrect.

× It depends actually, but I think I want to eat different foods, maybe when I travel to different countries, maybe umm, Thailand I want to eat mango sticky rice and Japan sushi.

✓ It depends, but I think I like to try different foods when I travel to different countries. For example, in Thailand I want to eat mango sticky rice, and in Japan I want to try sushi.

Use present simple for general preferences: 'I like to try' or 'I want to try'. Add prepositions 'in Thailand' and 'in Japan' and use parallel structure 'want to eat'/'want to try'. Also avoid repetition.

× Yeah, I'm looking forward to try old.

✓ Yeah, I'm looking forward to trying it.

After 'looking forward to' use the -ing form ('trying'), not the base verb. Also 'old' is unclear; replace with 'it' referring to the food.

× Yes, when I was when I were when I was a child, I love to eat burgers and I think I tried twice a week and now I hate burgers and I love to eat, umm, porridge.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I loved to eat burgers; I think I ate them twice a week. Now I dislike burgers and I prefer porridge.

Use 'was' not 'were' for singular first person. Maintain past tense 'loved' and 'ate' for childhood habits. Use present tense 'prefer' or 'I love porridge now' for current state. 'Tried twice a week' is incorrect; use 'ate them twice a week'.